Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct verb forms; start with a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (use present simple for habitual actions).

例: Yes, I usually wear headphones when I travel on public transport because it is very noisy. For example, I often listen to music or short motivational talks to relax and focus while commuting.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer structure: give a topic sentence naming the type, then two concise reasons linked by connectors. Correct word choice (wireless vs wired) and avoid filler words.

例: I prefer wireless headphones because they are compact and easy to carry in my bag or pocket. Also, unlike wired headphones, they don’t get tangled and feel more comfortable during long trips.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence describing typical times you use headphones and add specific examples with linking words. Use present simple for routines and avoid hesitation.

例: I usually use headphones when I travel by bus or train, especially on weekends when I return home. For instance, on Saturdays and Sundays I listen to podcasts or music to unwind during the journey.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Use present simple and be concise.

例: I don’t use headphones when I am with friends or family because I want to talk and share the journey with them. For example, on a family trip I prefer to keep my ears free for conversation and to hear important announcements.

提案: Make a clear opinion statement, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Correct vocabulary (noise cancellation/noise-cancelling) and avoid repetition and fillers.

例: Yes, I find headphones comfortable because they reduce background noise and help me relax. For example, on a noisy train I use noise-cancelling headphones to listen to music quietly and feel less stressed.

× Yes, most of the time I used headphone while I was travelling in a public transport.

✓ Yes, most of the time I use headphones when I travel by public transport.

The student used past tense 'used' but is describing a habitual action, so present simple 'use' is correct. Also 'headphone' should be plural 'headphones' for general use, and 'in a public transport' is incorrect; use 'by public transport' or 'on public transport'. Use present simple for habitual actions and correct noun number and preposition.

× So that time I use headphone because due to too much noise in the public area.

✓ So I use headphones then because there is too much noise in public areas.

'Headphone' should be plural 'headphones' for general reference. 'Due to' was awkwardly placed; use 'because' or 'because there is'. Also 'the public area' is better as 'public areas' or 'public places'. Ensure correct noun plurality and clearer clause order.

× So that's why I use headphone by for listening some of music, some of motivational speeches.

✓ That's why I use headphones to listen to music or motivational speeches.

The phrase 'for listening' is awkward; use the infinitive 'to listen'. 'Some of music' is incorrect — use 'music' without quantifier or 'some music'. 'Some of motivational speeches' should be 'motivational speeches' or 'some motivational speeches'. Also fix plural 'headphones' and remove extraneous words.

× I used wireless headphones because it is very easy to carry in a bag and also it is very convenient for me to fit in my in my pocket also and uh, and also when I used wire, wire charges, so that time I use very uncomfortable.

✓ I use wireless headphones because they are easy to carry in a bag and convenient to fit in my pocket. When I used wired ones, they were very uncomfortable.

The student mixes past and present incorrectly. Use present simple 'use' for current habit. 'It is' should agree with plural 'headphones' -> 'they are'. Remove duplicate words and correct 'wire, wire charges' to 'wired ones'. Use past tense 'were' when referring to past experience with wired headphones. Also correct pronoun agreement and sentence segmentation.

× Most of the time I used headphone while I was travelling in a public, uh, bus.

✓ Most of the time I use headphones when I travel on a public bus.

Habitual action should be present simple 'use' not past 'used'. 'Travelling in a public bus' is better expressed as 'travel on a public bus'. Also use plural 'headphones' for general reference.

× So that time I used, uh, headphone, uh, frankly speaking in, uh, in a week like Saturday, Sunday.

✓ For example, on weekends like Saturday and Sunday, I use headphones when I return home.

Use present simple for habitual weekend activity. 'In a week like Saturday, Sunday' is ungrammatical; say 'on weekends like Saturday and Sunday'. Also include the main clause to show when the headphones are used.

× When I was traveling with some of my friends or my family members, so that time I am not able to use headphone because I want to talk with my relatives and friends about each and everything so that's why I cannot use headphones.

✓ When I am traveling with friends or family, I do not use headphones because I want to talk with them about everything.

Pronoun and tense mismatches: mix of past 'was traveling' and present 'am not able' should be consistent for general habit -> present. 'Some of my friends or my family members' is wordy; 'friends or family' is natural. 'Talk with my relatives and friends about each and everything' is redundant; use 'talk with them about everything'. Also correct plural 'headphones' and use appropriate negative form 'do not'.

× Uh, yes, definitely wearing headphone is very comfortable for me to reduce and wise and wise.

✓ Yes, definitely wearing headphones is very comfortable for me and helps reduce noise.

'Reduce and wise and wise' is nonsensical; likely intended 'reduce noise' or 'noise-wise'. Replace with clear phrase 'helps reduce noise'. Also correct 'headphone' to plural 'headphones' and use natural conjunction 'and'.

× And also, uh, uh, for example, if we travel by a train, by a bus, so that time when we, when I, we used headphones for that time, we feel very comfortable and relaxed due to noise controller some of headphones.

✓ For example, if we travel by train or by bus and use headphones, we feel comfortable and relaxed because of the headphones' noise cancellation.

Preposition use: 'travel by a train' should be 'travel by train' or 'on a train'. The phrase 'for that time' and repeated subjects are redundant. 'Noise controller' is incorrect — use 'noise cancellation' or 'noise-cancelling feature' and express possession as 'headphones' noise cancellation'. Streamline the sentence for clarity and correct prepositions.