Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、简洁，并包含主题句和一两句具体的支持细节。注意语法（例如动词形式和冠词）以及避免重复表达。可以用连词如 because 或 as 来连接原因。尽量把句子控制在三到四句内。

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my spirits and helps me relax. For example, upbeat songs motivate me to exercise and improve my focus when I’m working. Overall, happy music makes my day feel more positive.

提案: 回答要避免填充词（uh）和时态混乱，使用现在时表达常态感受，并用连词（for example, which）组织细节。提供具体的情景或结果会更有说服力。控制在三到四句内。

例: Yes, absolutely. Happy music usually makes me feel energetic and more optimistic. For example, when I play upbeat songs in the morning I have more energy for my workout and feel ready for the day.

提案: 回答需用正确时态（过去式）描述过去经历，語句要流暢，刪除多余語氣詞。可先给出直接答案，然后用一到两句具体细节说明上课的目的或学到的东西。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my mother enrolled me in singing lessons because I wanted to sing like a professional. The lessons helped me improve my pitch and confidence on stage.

提案: 注意时态与语法的一致性（使用一般现在时描述习惯），去掉多余词并使用连词（for example, so）使表达连贯。提供具体例子说明音乐如何提高效率或心情。

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I play energetic playlists when I run and calming music when I cook, which helps me stay focused and enjoy the tasks more.

× I prefer happy music, I always want my body stay in a good mood.

✓ I prefer happy music. I always want my body to stay in a good mood.

句中缺少不定式標誌“to”，動詞“stay”在這裡應以不定式形式表示目的或願望。建議：在want後使用“to + 動詞原形”。（简体：句中缺少不定式“to”，应使用“want my body to stay...”）

× It is help healthy for my body.

✓ It is helpful for my body.

原句中“help healthy”搭配錯誤。應使用形容詞“helpful”表示“有幫助的”，或用不定式結構“It helps keep my body healthy.” 具體建議：根據語境選擇“helpful”或改為主動句“helps keep...”。（简体：应使用“helpful”或改为“It helps keep my body healthy.”）

× When I was listening some happy music, I feel uh, my body is full of energy and uh, am uh, staying uh, energetic mood.

✓ When I was listening to some happy music, I felt my body was full of energy and I was in an energetic mood.

存在多個問題：1) “listening”後缺少介詞“to”；2) 時態不一致，既用了過去進行“was listening”又用現在時“feel/am”，應統一為過去時“felt/was”；3) “staying energetic mood”搭配不當，應用“be in an energetic mood”。建議：注意介詞搭配和時態一致性，主語缺失時補上“I”。（简体：缺少“to”，时态不一致，且表达应为“in an energetic mood”。）

× And when I was uh listening some happy music, I feel a happiness and today is better than yesterday.

✓ And when I listen to happy music, I feel happy and today feels better than yesterday.

句中時態和名詞使用不當：1) 如果描述習慣性動作應用一般現在時“listen to”而非過去進行；2) “feel a happiness”不自然，應用形容詞“feel happy”或名詞“feel happiness”；3) “today is better than yesterday”語法可，但與主句時態需一致。建議：確定是表習慣用現在時，並使用“feel happy”。（简体：应使用一般现在时“listen to”，并说“feel happy”。）

× When I was a child, I want to see sing a song like a singer.

✓ When I was a child, I wanted to sing like a singer.

時態錯誤：描述過去的願望應使用過去時“wanted”；另外“to see sing a song like a singer”結構不正確，應簡化為“wanted to sing like a singer”或“wanted to sing songs like a singer”。建議：過去背景使用過去時，簡化不必要結構。（简体：谈论过去应使用过去时，且短语应为“wanted to sing like a singer”。）

× So my mom took me to some music classes to improve the my skills.

✓ So my mom took me to some music classes to improve my skills.

存在冠詞和冗餘代詞問題：不應有定冠詞“the”在“my skills”前；“to improve my skills”是正確表達。建議：刪去多餘的“the”。（简体：不要在“my skills”前加“the”。）

× When I was running, cooking and other else I can listening music at the same time, so they can keep me, keeping me doing something efficiently.

✓ When I run, cook and do other things, I can listen to music at the same time, so it helps me do things more efficiently.

多處錯誤：1) 若為習慣性情況，應使用一般現在時“run, cook”；2) “other else”不正確，應用“other things”或“else”之一；3) “can listening”應為“can listen to”；4) 結尾片語不自然，改為“it helps me do things more efficiently”。建議：注意時態一致、固定搭配（listen to），刪除冗餘詞並使用自然表達。 （简体：使用一般现在时，改为“listen to music”，把“other else”改为“other things”，并用“helps me do things more efficiently”。）