Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "when my motivation is low") and avoid repetition. Keep it under five sentences.

例: I prefer happy music to sad music. I usually choose upbeat songs when my motivation is low because they lift my mood and help me focus. For example, I often play energetic pop before studying to feel more positive.

提案: Clarify your meaning and use correct expressions. Begin with a direct yes/no and a brief reason, then provide a specific example. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., "cold food player") with the correct term (e.g., "cold-weather player" or the sport you play).

例: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited. For instance, before each game I listen to upbeat tracks to raise my energy and focus, which helps me play better.

提案: Organize your response chronologically and use correct tense. Start with a clear topic sentence about your experience, then give specific details (when, instrument, reason). Avoid vague phrases like "used to" multiple times.

例: Yes, I have taken music classes. I learned music in primary and junior high school, and last year I took another course because I play the trumpet and wanted to improve my technique.

提案: Give a concise, organized answer with linking words. Start with a clear statement, then list specific activities using linking words like "for example" or "also". Fix grammar ("when I am doing" and "to help me relax").

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play music when I am doing homework, exercising, or commuting to school, and I sometimes listen to calm tracks before bed to help me relax.

× I prefer happy music rather than sad music.

✓ I prefer happy music to sad music.

Use 'prefer ... to ...' when comparing preferences. 'Rather than' is possible but not after 'prefer' in this structure; 'prefer A to B' is the correct collocation.

× This is because I usually listen to music when I when my motivation is pretty low, so I won't.

✓ This is because I usually listen to music when my motivation is pretty low, so I want to feel better.

There is a repeated word 'when' and the clause 'so I won't' is incomplete and incorrect. Replace with 'so I want to feel better' to express purpose. Ensure a complete verb and clear meaning.

× I want to listen music to be happy.

✓ I want to listen to music to be happy.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by its object. Also infinitive 'to listen' is correct here. Use 'listen to music' for grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, for actually I am cold food player so every time before the game I listen to happy music to make my feel more excited.

✓ Yes, actually I am a cold-footed player, so every time before a game I listen to happy music to make myself feel more excited.

Multiple issues: 'for actually' is incorrect adverb placement; 'cold food player' seems to be a mispronunciation - likely 'cold-footed' or 'nervous' and needs article 'a'. 'Before the game' should be 'before a game' for general statements. 'Make my feel' lacks the reflexive pronoun and verb form; use 'make myself feel'.

× Yes, I used to take no more music class when I was in junior high school and primary school.

✓ Yes, I used to take many music classes when I was in primary and junior high school.

'Used to' indicates past habitual action; 'no more music class' is incorrect. Use plural 'classes' and quantify correctly ('many'). Also standard order 'primary and junior high school' for chronological clarity.

× Then I also took music class last year because I used to play trumpet.

✓ Then I also took a music class last year because I used to play the trumpet.

Add article 'a' before 'music class' and 'the trumpet' is the common collocation when referring to a specific instrument one learned. 'Used to play' is correct for past habit.

× I wanted to.

✓ I wanted to continue practicing.

The sentence 'I wanted to.' is incomplete and leaves the object implied. Provide a full verb phrase (e.g. 'continue practicing') to clarify intention.

× Yes, I do. I do listen to music when I doing my homework or my exercise.

✓ Yes, I do. I listen to music when I am doing my homework or exercising.

After 'when' use a full clause with 'am doing' for continuous action. 'My exercise' is unnatural; use 'exercising'. Also avoid redundant 'do' unless for emphasis.

× And on the way to school. Yeah. And before I go to bed to make my feel.

✓ I also listen on the way to school, and before I go to bed to help me relax or feel better.

Fragments like 'And on the way to school.' lack a verb. Combine into a full sentence and complete the purpose clause: 'to help me relax' or 'to feel better'. 'Make my feel' is incorrect; use 'help me feel'.