Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Melhore a fluência, pronúncia e correção gramatical; evite repetições e use uma estrutura mais direta. Comece com uma frase-tópico curta, depois acrescente uma ou duas frases de apoio com ligações simples (por exemplo, "because", "so"). Corrija erros como "up beated" → "upbeat", elimine repetições como "I I" e ajuste tempos e preposições (por exemplo, "in" → retirar quando desnecessário).

例: I usually choose music based on my mood. For instance, I listen to upbeat songs when I feel energetic because they boost my spirits, but I prefer sad songs when I want to reflect quietly.

提案: Corrija palavras e formas verbais e reduza redundâncias; use ligações claras. Diga primeiro a resposta direta, depois explique brevemente com uma razão usando "because" ou "so". Substitua formas erradas como "energize, energized" por "energized" e evite repetir "uplift".

例: Yes, definitely. Happy music usually energizes me because its lively rhythm and melody lift my mood, so I play it when I need to feel more active.

提案: Melhore a gramática, especialmente tempos verbais e preposições; evite frases confusas. Comece com uma resposta clara e use o passado simples para eventos passados. Use a condicional corretamente para hipóteses no passado. Por exemplo, troque "attended to" por "attended", "attempted to piano lessons" por "tried piano lessons", e corrija "I it's not successful at my practices" para algo claro.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes. I did try piano lessons as a teenager, but I struggled with regular practice and eventually stopped. If I had practised more back then, I might have become a proficient pianist.

提案: Melhore coerência e correção; use uma resposta direta seguida de detalhes específicos. Evite erros de concordância e palavras estranhas (por exemplo, "they listen" e "horror chores"). Diga claramente quando e porquê ou dê um exemplo de atividades. Use conectores simples como "so" ou "because".

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing household chores or working. For example, I play playlists on Spotify while cleaning or cooking because the music makes the time pass faster and keeps me motivated.

× There are times when I'm feeling excited, I like to listen up beated songs.

✓ There are times when I'm feeling excited; I like to listen to upbeat songs.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object (preposition error) and 'up beated' is incorrect; use the adjective 'upbeat'. Also punctuation to separate clauses improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'listen to' + noun and correct adjective forms.

× However, when I'm feeling a little bit down, I also like to enjoy sad songs just to reflect and embrace the feeling that I I have at the moment.

✓ However, when I'm feeling a little bit down, I like to listen to sad songs to reflect and embrace the feelings I have at the moment.

Redundant 'also' is unnecessary (sentence flow) and 'enjoy sad songs' is acceptable but 'listen to' fits better. Duplicate 'I' is a typo. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match general experience. Suggestion: remove redundancies and fix typos.

× So when I want to feel a little bit more energize, energized, I just play a happy song to uplift my mood and make me feel more active.

✓ So when I want to feel a little bit more energized, I just play a happy song to uplift my mood and make me feel more active.

'Energize' is a base verb; the correct adjective here is 'energized' (past participle used adjectivally). Remove the duplicate word. Suggestion: use 'energized' to describe state.

× Unfortunately, I've never attended to music classes before.

✓ Unfortunately, I've never attended music classes before.

'Attend' is used without the preposition 'to' when referring to classes or events. Suggestion: use 'attend music classes' or 'go to music classes'.

× However, when I was a teenager I've attempted to piano lessons.

✓ However, when I was a teenager I attempted piano lessons.

Mixing present perfect ('I've') with a past time marker ('when I was a teenager') is incorrect; use simple past 'I attempted'. Also the verb 'attempted' is odd with 'piano lessons' — 'took' or 'had' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'I took piano lessons'.

× Unfortunately I it's not successful at my practices so I gave up.

✓ Unfortunately, my practice was not successful, so I gave up.

'I it's' is ungrammatical and confusing. Use a clear subject and verb: 'my practice was not successful'. Also 'practices' should be singular or 'practice sessions'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'my practice wasn't successful'.

× But if I have practiced more I would be a professional piano player right now.

✓ But if I had practiced more, I would be a professional piano player right now.

This is a third conditional for past unreal condition affecting present result: use past perfect in the if-clause ('had practiced') with 'would' + base for present hypothetical. Suggestion: use 'If I had practiced more, I would be...'. (Grammar problem type: Past tense issue)

× I suppose they listen to music when you're doing ordinary activities can make the time goes faster.

✓ I suppose listening to music while doing ordinary activities can make time go faster.

Sentence mixes pronouns and clauses incorrectly ('they' and 'you're'). Use gerund 'listening' as subject. 'Can make time go faster' uses bare infinitive 'go' not 'goes'. Suggestion: use 'listening... can make time go faster'.

× So I usually like to play a Spotify song when I'm doing a house, horror chores or any activity at work.

✓ So I usually like to play a Spotify playlist or a song when I'm doing household chores or any activity at work.

'Doing a house, horror chores' is incorrect. Use 'household chores' for domestic tasks. 'Play a Spotify song' is acceptable but 'playlist' may be more natural. Suggestion: use 'household chores' and 'playlist or a song'.

× It helps me to stay concentrated and also do something fun while I'm doing something ordinary.

✓ It helps me stay focused and do something enjoyable while I'm doing ordinary tasks.

'Stay concentrated' is awkward; 'stay focused' is natural. Avoid repeating 'something' twice; use 'enjoyable' and 'ordinary tasks' for clarity. Suggestion: use concise, natural collocations.