Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Also use correct tense and verb forms (e.g., 'I prefer', 'listening to').

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and reduces anxiety. For example, upbeat songs boost my energy and help me concentrate when I’m doing chores.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Use natural expressions (e.g., 'puts me in a good mood', 'gives me energy') and avoid fillers like 'umm'. Keep to two or three sentences.

例: Yes. Happy music puts me in a good mood and gives me energy; for instance, I often listen to upbeat playlists before exercising to feel more motivated.

提案: Respond with a clear short answer then give a concise reason. Use correct negative forms and clearer phrasing (e.g., 'I haven’t taken any music classes because I don’t have time and there aren’t any nearby').

例: No, I haven’t taken any music classes because I don’t have time and there aren’t any suitable classes near my home.

提案: Give one clear statement and two brief, specific examples linked with connectors (e.g., 'for example', 'also'). Avoid repetition and correct collocations ('listen to music', 'give me energy').

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play background music while studying because it helps me focus, and I listen to upbeat songs when walking to the shop to feel more energetic.

× I preferred happy music because happy music may make us feeling good and feeling positive and anxiety.

✓ I prefer happy music because happy music may make us feel good and feel positive and reduce anxiety.

The student used past tense 'preferred' but is talking about a general preference, so present tense 'prefer' is correct (Grammar problem type 6). Also 'make us feeling' is incorrect: after 'make' use the base form 'feel' (this matches verb form errors: use of base rather than -ing; counted as present tense/verb form). 'Anxiety' should be described as reduced anxiety; simply listing 'anxiety' is unclear, so 'reduce anxiety' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual preferences and use 'make + object + base verb' (make us feel).

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✓ (Remove filler sounds)

This is not a sentence and contains filler sounds; remove them in a formal response (Grammar problem type 6/26). Suggestion: pause briefly or say a concise linking phrase such as 'well' instead of filler noises.

× I prefer happy music and when I am happy, I love to listening in happy music.

✓ I prefer happy music and when I am happy, I love listening to happy music.

After 'love' use the base verb or gerund 'listening'; 'love to listening' mixes patterns (Grammar problem type 8). Also use 'listen to music' (preposition 'to' required) rather than 'listening in'. Suggestion: use 'love listening to' or 'love to listen to'.

× When I am sad rather I like to listening happy music.

✓ When I am sad, I prefer to listen to happy music.

'Like to listening' is incorrect: use 'like listening to' or 'prefer to listen to' (Grammar problem type 8). Also 'rather' is misplaced; use 'instead' or rephrase. Suggestion: 'When I am sad, I prefer to listen to happy music.'

× Yes, happy happy music makes me feel more excited and positive because when I listen umm happy music, my mood is too much good and I'm feeling in positive energy umm.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and positive because when I listen to happy music, my mood improves and I feel more energetic.

'Happy happy' repetition is unnecessary (Grammar problem type 26). 'Listen happy music' needs preposition 'to' (Grammar problem type 11). 'My mood is too much good' is ungrammatical; use 'my mood improves' or 'my mood gets much better' (adjective/adverb misuse; types 6/13). 'I'm feeling in positive energy' is incorrect collocation; use 'I feel more energetic' or 'I feel positive energy'. Suggestion: avoid filler 'umm' and use correct collocations: 'listen to', 'mood improves', 'feel energetic'.

× No, I did not because there is no time to take a class or no any classes nearby my home.

✓ No, I have not because there is no time to take a class and there are no classes near my home.

Answering 'Have you taken any music classes?' requires present perfect 'have not' rather than simple past 'did not' (Grammar problem type 5). 'No any classes' is incorrect; use 'there are no classes' and correct preposition 'near' rather than 'nearby my home' or use 'near my home' (Grammar problem type 11 and 22/article errors). Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and correct existential construction 'there are no...'.

× Yes I do. I listen. I listen to a music by doing all the things because when I am watching * **** I listen a music because that music give me energy to complete my work.

✓ Yes, I do. I listen to music while doing other things because when I am watching TV I listen to music, and that music gives me energy to complete my work.

'Listen a music' is incorrect: use 'listen to music' (preposition error, type 11). 'By doing all the things' should be 'while doing other things' to express simultaneous actions (Grammar problem type 6/26). 'When I am watching * ****' likely refers to watching TV; use the appropriate noun. 'That music give' should be 'that music gives' to agree with singular noun (subject-verb agreement/third person singular, types 27/2). Suggestion: use 'listen to music', 'while' for concurrent actions, and third-person singular verb form 'gives'.

× And when I am walking to a shop, for being. For being, for being.

✓ And when I am walking to a shop, I listen to music to feel better.

The student repeats 'for being' which is unclear and ungrammatical (Grammar problem type 26). Likely intended to express purpose 'to feel better' or 'to be happier'. Suggestion: state a clear purpose using 'to' + verb, e.g., 'to feel better' or 'to keep myself motivated'.