Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: state your preference clearly in one topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (e.g., "used to" is wrong here).

例: I prefer music that matches my mood. For example, I listen to upbeat pop songs when I’m happy to celebrate, but when I’m sad I choose slow, melancholic tracks to reflect and relax.

提案: Good idea expressed, but make it more concise and use natural collocations (e.g., “energizes me” instead of “brings more energy in myself”). Use one linking phrase and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes. Happy music energizes me and lifts my mood, so I feel more enthusiastic and open when celebrating good news.

提案: Organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence (no classes), then give a specific reason or example. Fix grammar ("I have never taken", "I like to learn", "when I sing", "I listen to Billie Eilish songs with lyrics"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I have never taken formal music classes, but I would like to. For instance, I learn songs by listening to Billie Eilish and following the lyrics, which helps me pick up melodies quickly.

提案: Be more natural and correct grammar: use present simple ("I often listen") and plural nouns where needed. Give one clear example and a linking phrase. Avoid redundant words like "going outside for a walk or running or jogging"—choose one or two.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing housework or exercising. For example, when I go for a run I usually play upbeat pop songs because they energize and motivate me.

× Well this depends upon the situation whether you are sad or happy.

✓ Well, this depends on the situation and whether you are sad or happy.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect preposition 'upon' here; 'depends on' is the standard collocation. Also add 'and' to connect clauses for clarity and insert a comma after 'Well'. Suggestion: use 'depends on the situation and whether...' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× So whenever I am happy I used to listen the good good music, pop music and whenever I'm sad I just sit and listen sad music of specially.

✓ So whenever I am happy I listen to good pop music, and whenever I'm sad I just sit and listen to sad music, especially.

'Used to' indicates a past habit and is incorrect with 'I am happy' (present). Use simple present 'I listen to' for habitual actions. Also 'listen the' should be 'listen to'; 'good good music' is redundant; 'of specially' should be 'especially' placed at the end. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and correct verb patterns ('listen to').

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more ecstatic and joyful because it enhances my mood and it brings more energy in myself to enjoy the situation or the good news more openly.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel ecstatic and joyful because it enhances my mood and gives me more energy to enjoy the situation or good news more openly.

'More ecstatic' is unnecessary comparative when 'ecstatic' already expresses strong feeling; 'brings more energy in myself' is ungrammatical — use 'gives me more energy' or 'energizes me'. Also remove second 'the' before 'good news'. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs ('give' instead of 'bring in myself') and avoid redundant comparatives.

× I have never ever taken any music classes but I would like to learn my favorite music.

✓ I have never taken any music classes, but I would like to learn my favorite music.

'Never ever' is informal/redundant; 'have never taken' is correct present perfect for life experience. Add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: use 'never' alone and include comma for compound sentence.

× For example, when I song I used to listen Billie Eilish song, so I used to listen them with lyrics.

✓ For example, when I sing, I listen to Billie Eilish songs, and I usually follow the lyrics.

'When I song' is incorrect; correct verb is 'sing'. 'Used to' wrongly implies past habit; use present 'listen'. 'Listen Billie Eilish song' needs 'listen to' and plural 'songs' if general. 'Listen them with lyrics' is ungrammatical; say 'follow the lyrics' or 'listen with the lyrics'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and 'listen to' plus pluralization as needed.

× I meant to say that with subtitles I learned quickly.

✓ I meant to say that with subtitles I learn quickly.

Context indicates general ability, not a single past event; use present simple 'I learn quickly' or present perfect 'I have learned quickly' if referring to past learning. 'Learned quickly' can be correct if referring to a past instance; choose based on intended meaning. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual ability.

× Yes, I often used to listen music while doing house chores or exercise.

✓ Yes, I often listen to music while doing house chores or exercising.

'Used to' incorrectly suggests past habit; use simple present 'often listen' for habitual action. 'Listen music' requires 'listen to'. 'Exercise' should be in the -ing form 'exercising' to match 'doing' construction. Suggestion: use 'listen to' and parallel gerund forms.

× For example, whenever I go outside for a walk or running or jogging, I prefer to listen pop song that make my mood more excited and inspiring.

✓ For example, whenever I go outside for a walk, run, or jog, I prefer to listen to pop songs that make me feel more excited and inspired.

Maintain parallel gerunds/verbs: use 'walk, run, or jog' or 'walking, running, or jogging'. 'Listen pop song' needs 'listen to pop songs' (plural for general). 'That make my mood more excited and inspiring' is incorrect: use 'make me feel more excited and inspired' or 'lift my mood'. Suggestion: keep parallel structures, use 'listen to', and correct object and adjective usage.