Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct, concise, and add a brief specific reason. Avoid unnecessary words like 'over time' unless you explain them. Use correct verb forms: 'help' (not 'helps') after 'can'.

例: I prefer happy music because it helps lift my mood when I'm feeling down, especially upbeat songs with positive lyrics.

提案: Answer directly with a clear subject and correct verb agreement. Remove filler and repeated words. If you give a condition, state it clearly with a linking phrase (e.g., 'when it has' + specify what 'it' refers to).

例: Yes, happy music makes me more excited, especially when it has a fast tempo and catchy melody.

提案: Use the correct tense and avoid fillers like 'uh'. Combine the sentences smoothly and give a brief specific detail about why it was hard to show reflection.

例: Yes, I took violin lessons for a few months, but I stopped because learning proper bowing technique and reading music was too challenging at that time.

提案: Avoid repetition and be more concise. Group similar activities and use linking words to make the list natural. Limit to 2–3 examples and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'clean my room' and 'tidy up').

例: Yes, I usually listen to music while doing other tasks, such as studying, cleaning my room, or taking a shower.

× I prefer happy music because it can helps improve my emotions over time.

✓ I prefer happy music because it can help improve my emotions over time.

The modal verb 'can' must be followed by the base form of the verb, not a third-person singular 'helps'. Replace 'helps' with 'help'. Also, 'improve my emotions' is acceptable, though 'improve my mood' is more natural.

× Happy music does make me feel more excited when when they have, when it have, when it has.

✓ Happy music does make me feel more excited when it has a faster tempo or joyful lyrics.

The student repeats forms and mixes plural pronoun 'they' with singular 'it'. 'Happy music' is a singular noun and requires third-person singular pronoun 'it' and matching verb form 'has'. Also choose a clear clause to complete the idea. Remove repetition and use a specific condition (e.g. 'has a faster tempo or joyful lyrics').

× Yes I do. I have taken a violin class before but it only lasted a while because, uh, it was so hard and I quit.

✓ Yes, I have. I took a violin class before, but it only lasted a short time because it was so hard and I quit.

Mixed tense: 'I have taken' is present perfect suggesting relevance now, while 'it only lasted' and 'I quit' are past simple. Use past simple 'I took' to match the completed past action. Also 'lasted a while' is informal; 'lasted a short time' is clearer. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, most of the time I listen to music when I'm doing other things. For example, when I'm studying, when I do my homework, when I clean my room, when I shower, when I'm showering, when I clean my bedroom.

✓ Yes, most of the time I listen to music when I'm doing other things. For example, when I'm studying, when I'm doing my homework, when I'm cleaning my room, when I'm showering.

In a list of simultaneous activities, use consistent verb forms. Prefer present continuous ('I'm studying', 'I'm doing', 'I'm cleaning', 'I'm showering') for actions happening at the same time as listening. Remove redundant items ('clean my room' vs 'clean my bedroom') and duplicate forms to improve concision.