Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar: state a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (e.g., "I I", "happy happy"). Also correct verb agreement and article use ("sad songs feel").

例: I like both happy and sad music depending on my mood. For example, when I'm cheerful I prefer upbeat songs to stay energetic, but when I need to reflect I choose sad songs because their lyrics and melody help me process my thoughts.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then support with one clear reason using linking words. Fix grammar ("it’s emotional", "it makes", avoid unfinished phrases). Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics lift my energy. In contrast, sad music makes me more reflective since it highlights emotions and memories.

提案: Respond directly and concisely, then add a specific detail or future plan. Remove hesitations and repeated words, and use more natural phrasing (e.g., "I never intended to" → "I never planned to").

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes. I never planned to because I’m not confident in singing, but I would like to learn guitar in the future and hope to take lessons someday.

提案: Start with a clear yes/no, then give a brief, specific reason and one example. Remove redundancy and fix phrasing ("it makes it easier to work"). Use linking words like "so" or "because" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while I work because it prevents boredom and helps me concentrate. For instance, I play mellow background music when studying, which improves my focus and mood.

× I think I I like both kind of music.

✓ I think I like both kinds of music.

'Both' requires a plural noun, so 'kind' should be plural 'kinds'. Remove the duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: say 'I like both kinds of music.'

× It depends entirely on my mood.

✓ It depends entirely on my mood.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple and fits the context. No change needed.

× If I'm feeling good then I would like to hear something happy happy.

✓ If I'm feeling good, then I like to hear something happy.

Mixing conditional modal 'would' with a present real condition is inconsistent. For general habitual reactions use present simple 'I like'. Also remove the duplicated 'happy'. Add a comma after the dependent clause.

× But the other times I do I do prefer sad song.

✓ But other times I do prefer sad songs.

'Other times' is plural, so the noun should be plural 'songs'. Remove duplicated 'I do'.

× It's not because I'm just sad all the time, it's because the sad songs feels good to hear for me.

✓ It's not because I'm just sad all the time; it's because sad songs feel good to hear for me.

Subject 'songs' is plural, so verb should be 'feel' not 'feels'. Also remove the definite article 'the' before 'sad songs' unless referring to specific songs. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses.

× It does make me feel a bit more excited compared to sad music.

✓ It does make me feel a bit more excited compared to sad music.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately uses present simple with emphasis 'does make'. No change needed.

× Sad music, it just emotional music which makes me feel good in one way or another.

✓ Sad music is just emotional music which makes me feel good in one way or another.

The original contains a comma splice and lacks a main verb for the second phrase. Remove the redundant pronoun 'it' and add the linking verb 'is' to form a complete sentence.

× It just make me realize what life is and everything I'm going through, whether it's good or bad.

✓ It just makes me realize what life is and everything I'm going through, whether it's good or bad.

Subject 'it' requires third person singular verb 'makes', not 'make'.

× I don't care about being the anything all that but.

✓ I don't care about being anything like that.

The original has extra words 'the' and 'all that but' causing ungrammatical structure. 'Anything like that' conveys the intended meaning concisely.

× No, I haven't taken any music classes.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes.

This sentence is correct: present perfect appropriately expresses life experience up to now. No change needed.

× I, I never intended to intended to take any music classes in my life.

✓ I never intended to take any music classes in my life.

Remove duplicated words 'I,' and duplicated phrase 'intended to intended to'. Keep single 'intended to' for correct structure.

× I, I was never good at singing or anything like that.

✓ I was never good at singing or anything like that.

Remove duplicated 'I,'. The past tense 'was' is appropriate for describing a past ability or tendency. No other change needed.

× But I did wanna learn how to play guitar someday in my life.

✓ But I did want to learn how to play the guitar someday in my life.

Use standard 'want to' instead of informal 'wanna'. When talking about a specific instrument in general, include the definite article 'the guitar'. 'Did want to' is acceptable when emphasizing past desire; consider 'I want to learn to play the guitar someday' for present desire.

× Maybe in future I will try to do that.

✓ Maybe in the future I will try to do that.

Add definite article 'the' before 'future' in this idiomatic expression: 'in the future'. The rest is correct.

× Yeah, I do that quite often.

✓ Yeah, I do that quite often.

This sentence is correct in present simple for habitual action. No change needed.

× While doing some things, I usually get bored or I usually just end up thinking something in my mind which isn't very exciting.

✓ While doing some things, I usually get bored or I just end up thinking about things in my mind which aren't very exciting.

Use 'thinking about' rather than 'thinking something in my mind'. 'Things' should be plural and verb agreement 'aren't' to match plural. Remove duplicate 'usually'.

× So usually what I do is I play some music in the background and it makes my mood a bit better and I get it's easier to work.

✓ So usually what I do is play some music in the background; it improves my mood and makes it easier to work.

Remove redundant 'I' after 'do is'. Replace informal 'it makes my mood a bit better and I get it's easier to work' with clearer coordinated clauses: 'it improves my mood and makes it easier to work.' Use semicolon or period to separate independent clauses.