Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives contrast, but it has hesitations, small grammar errors, and some redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence, smooth linking phrase for contrast, correct collocations (e.g., “listen to happy music”), and avoid filler words. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: It depends on my mood. When I feel energetic or enthusiastic, I prefer to listen to happy music because it boosts my energy. On the other hand, when I feel low, I usually choose sad music to reflect my emotions and help me process them.

提案: You answered directly but the sentence is long, repetitive and has grammar issues. Use a concise topic sentence, then add one specific reason with linking words (e.g., “because” or “as”). Mention concrete musical elements (rhythm, tempo) and avoid repeating words.

例: Yes, definitely. Happy music makes me feel more excited because its upbeat tempo and energetic rhythm increase my motivation. For example, lively drum beats or fast guitar strumming make me want to move and be more productive.

提案: The response conveys the idea but is ungrammatical and disorganized with many fillers. Start with a clear direct answer (e.g., “No, I haven’t.”), then give one or two concise supporting details about why and what you do instead. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating phrases.

例: No, I haven’t had formal music lessons, but I would like to. Since I haven’t had the chance, I teach myself by listening to songs and singing along to learn the melody and rhythm. Sometimes I also watch online tutorials to improve my technique.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has many hesitations and a repetitive ending. Provide a clear topic sentence, then one specific example of activities and explain briefly why music helps (e.g., increases concentration or motivation). Use linking words like “for example” and avoid fillers.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks. For example, when I study or tidy my room, playing background music helps me concentrate and complete the work faster. I usually choose instrumental or low-vocals playlists so the music doesn’t distract me.

× When I'm filled, uh, energetic or enthusiastic, uh, I would prefer to listen happy music.

✓ When I'm feeling energetic or enthusiastic, I prefer to listen to happy music.

The student used 'I'm filled' (incorrect collocation) and 'would prefer' which suggests conditional; the context is general present preference so present simple 'prefer' is correct. Also 'listen happy music' is missing preposition 'to' and needs gerund or noun phrase. Suggest replacing 'I'm filled' with 'I'm feeling', use 'prefer' for habitual preference, and add 'to' after 'listen'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× But when I feel very low in energy or very sad, I prefer to listen sad music.

✓ But when I feel very low in energy or very sad, I prefer to listen to sad music.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listen' is an error in verb + preposition usage within present-tense statement. The rest is present simple and correct. Add 'to' to form 'listen to music'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, of course it is because when I listen to that music, the the rhythm, the instrument they have they used that will give more energy to do more works compared to the normal music or the uh normal sad music.

✓ Yes, of course. When I listen to that music, the rhythm and the instruments they use give me more energy to do more work compared to normal or sad music.

Multiple issues: unnecessary 'it is' and repetition 'the the'; tense and agreement: 'instruments they have they used' is incorrect; present simple 'use' fits general truth; 'will give' is future but general effect uses present 'give'; 'do more works' is uncountable 'work'. Streamline sentence: use present simple for habitual effect, correct subject-verb agreement and choose 'instruments' and 'work'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I'm not but actually I want to learn music, but I never had a chance to go to music class and all but I what I do is I just listen to the music and I repeat that song.

✓ I haven't taken lessons, but I want to learn music. I never had a chance to attend classes, so what I do is listen to music and repeat the songs.

Fragmented and conflicting structures: 'I'm not' is incomplete; tense mismatch 'I never had' is acceptable but needs auxiliary for present perfect 'I haven't had' if referring to life experience. Improve clarity by separating ideas into sentences, use 'attend classes' and plural 'songs'. Keep tenses consistent. The student should use 'I haven't had a chance' for life experience up to now. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I just sing with that song. Allow me that rhythm. I just sing with that song but.

✓ I just sing along to the song. I follow the rhythm and sing along.

Incorrect preposition: 'sing with that song' is unnatural; correct phrase is 'sing along to' or 'sing along with'. 'Allow me that rhythm' is incorrect phrasing; use 'I follow the rhythm'. Remove trailing 'but' and make complete sentences. This fixes preposition and sentence completeness. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, certainly, because when I umm, do something while I'm listening to music, I feel like I can finish that uh uh, work more quickly by listening to the music umm, mostly during when I'm studying, I just play the song in my phone and just.

✓ Yes, certainly. When I do something while listening to music, I feel like I can finish the work more quickly. Mostly when I'm studying, I just play songs on my phone.

Run-on sentence with filler words and tense consistency issues. Remove fillers, use present simple for habitual actions ('I do', 'I feel', 'I play'), correct noun 'work' without article and use plural 'songs' and preposition 'on my phone'. Avoid trailing 'and just'. Grammar problem type ID:6