Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более грамотно и естественно: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных причины. Избегайте лишних слов и исправьте ошибки грамматики (например, "I'm a happy person" и "happy music is very useful"). Используйте связку для плавного перехода (because / as / since).

例: I prefer happy music because I’m generally a cheerful person and upbeat songs boost my mood. For example, I listen to lively pop when I need energy before a workout.

提案: Упрощайте и структурируйте ответ: сначала короткий "Yes" с тезисом, потом 1–2 уточняющих предложения. Исправьте согласование подлежащего и сказуемого ("music makes"), и избегайте противоречий (excited vs relaxed) — объясните, как именно она влияет. Используйте связки (because / so / but).

例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms and bright melodies increase my energy. At the same time, some cheerful songs also help me relax by lifting my mood.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и грамотно: используйте простые конструкции ("Yes, I took music lessons at school"). Добавьте конкретный пример: сколько уроков, чему вы учились, что вам понравилось. Избегайте слов-паразитов и нечётких фраз.

例: Yes, I took music lessons at school for two years, where we learned basic piano and music theory. I enjoyed practicing simple songs and learning how to read sheet music.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ ясно: начните с короткого подтверждения, затем поясните, какие дела вы выполняете и почему музыка полезна. Исправьте грамматику ("when I do other things") и избегайте пауз/запинок. Используйте связки (for example / because / while).

例: Definitely. I often listen to music while studying or cooking because it makes routine tasks more enjoyable and helps me concentrate. For example, I prefer instrumental playlists while I study.

× I prefer happy music because I'm happy person in life and happy music very useful.

✓ I prefer happy music because I'm a happy person in life and happy music is very useful.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'happy person' and the verb 'is' before 'very useful'. Add 'a' because 'person' is a singular, countable noun. Add the linking verb 'is' to form the correct predicate. Suggestion: say 'I'm a happy person' and 'happy music is very useful.'

× Yes, music make me feel more excited because when I listen to music I feel more feel relaxing, relax.

✓ Yes, music makes me feel more excited because when I listen to music I feel more relaxed.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular noun 'music' (subject-verb agreement). 'Feel more feel relaxing, relax' is ungrammatical repetition; use the adjective 'relaxed' after 'feel' to describe the state. Suggestion: use 'makes' and 'feel relaxed.'

× Yes, I have taken any music lessons in school. Uh, when music lesson come in our class.

✓ Yes, I have taken some music lessons in school. Uh, when music lessons come into our class.

Use of 'any' in affirmative context is incorrect; 'some' is appropriate. 'Music lesson' should be plural 'music lessons' to match context, and 'come in our class' should be 'come into our class' or better 'are brought into our class.' Also maintain tense and number agreement: 'lessons come' or 'are taught.' Suggestion: say 'I have taken some music lessons' and 'when music lessons come into our class.'

× Definitely, I always listen to music when I doing other things because it is more uh, happy and when I listen to music. Doing things.

✓ Definitely, I always listen to music when I am doing other things because it makes me happier when I do things.

After 'when' with continuous action, use the present continuous 'I am doing' rather than 'I doing.' Also the fragment 'when I listen to music. Doing things.' is sentence-fragmented and unclear. Use a full clause: 'it makes me happier when I do things.' Use comparative 'happier' to compare mood states. Suggestion: use 'I am doing' and combine ideas into a complete sentence.