Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ в целом хороший и понятный, но можно улучшить беглость и точность. Сократите повторения (например, «listening happy music» → «listening to happy music»), добавьте связку и одно конкретное объяснение или пример. Постройте ответ из 2–3 предложений: тема + поддержка с конкретной деталью.

例: I prefer listening to happy music because it energises me while I do housework. For example, upbeat songs from cartoons or comedy soundtracks make chores like washing dishes or vacuuming feel more fun.

提案: Ответ короткий и по теме, но можно улучшить связки и словарный выбор. Избегайте общих фраз вроде «gives energy to my whole body» — лучше конкретизировать эффект и добавить связующее слово. Оставайтесь в пределах 2–3 предложений.

例: Yes, upbeat music definitely makes me feel more excited because it boosts my energy and lifts my mood. For example, I often start dancing or moving more and feel like sharing that positive energy with friends.

提案: Идея ясна, но есть ошибки в словоупотреблении и стилистике. Слово «Immaculate» здесь неуместно; лучше использовать «beautiful» или «pleasant». Также предложение про «how my brain worked» звучит неестественно — объясните кратко, например, что игра развивала координацию рук. Постройте ответ: подтверждение + краткая причина с конкретным эффектом.

例: Yes, I took piano lessons as a child. I loved the sound of the piano and playing helped improve my coordination because I had to use both my left and right hands.

提案: Ответ естественный и уместный, но можно улучшить связки и убрать повторы (housework already includes washing dishes/vacuuming). Добавьте одно соединительное слово и конкретизируйте эффект от музыки при прогулке.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing housework such as washing dishes or vacuuming. I also enjoy listening when I walk because upbeat songs motivate me to walk faster and farther.

× I prefer listening happy music because it stimulates me to do some housework like dishwashing or vacuuming.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music because it stimulates me to do some housework like washing the dishes or vacuuming.

The verb 'prefer' followed by another verb normally requires 'to' when using the gerund in this context: 'prefer listening to something'. Also 'dishwashing' as a noun is acceptable but 'washing the dishes' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'prefer listening to happy music' and 'washing the dishes' for idiomatic English.

× I especially like songs from cartoons or some comedies.

✓ I especially like songs from cartoons or comedy shows.

The phrase 'some comedies' is awkward here; 'comedy shows' or 'comedies' as films/TV shows is better. Use 'comedy shows' to clearly indicate source. Suggestion: replace 'some comedies' with 'comedy shows'.

× For example, I want to dance more or move, and I would like to share this energy with other people.

✓ For example, I want to dance more or move more, and I would like to share this energy with other people.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but 'move' without an adverb is vague; parallel structure requires 'dance more or move more'. Suggestion: keep parallel adverb usage for clarity.

× Yes I have. When I was a kid I took piano classes.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a kid, I took piano lessons.

'Piano classes' is understandable but 'piano lessons' is more natural. Also add commas after 'Yes' and the introductory clause. Suggestion: use 'piano lessons' and include commas for correct punctuation.

× For me, piano sounded Immaculate and I really liked how my brain worked because I used both of my hands left and right.

✓ For me, the piano sounded immaculate, and I really liked how my brain worked because I used both my left and right hands.

Use lowercase 'immaculate' (not capitalized) and include the definite article 'the' before 'piano' for specificity. The phrase 'both of my hands left and right' is ungrammatical; correct order is 'both my left and right hands' or 'both of my hands'. Suggestion: 'the piano sounded immaculate' and 'both my left and right hands'.

× Yes, I sometimes listen to music while I'm doing housework, like washing the dishes or vacuuming.

✓ Yes, I sometimes listen to music while I do housework, like washing the dishes or vacuuming.

Using 'while I'm doing' is acceptable, but in this context simpler present simple 'while I do housework' sounds more natural and matches habitual action. Suggestion: use 'while I do housework' for habitual activities.

× Also, I enjoy listening to music when I walk, it stimulates me to walk more.

✓ Also, I enjoy listening to music when I walk because it motivates me to walk more.

The original is a comma splice: two independent clauses joined only by a comma. Replace comma with a conjunction like 'because' and use 'motivates' or 'stimulates' with appropriate object. Suggestion: connect clauses properly and use 'motivates me to walk more' for clarity.