Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), and add one specific example. Use linking words for clarity and correct verb forms (e.g., 'when I'm doing my homework' and 'sad music doesn't').

例: I prefer happy, light music because I usually listen to it when I'm doing my homework. For example, upbeat pop helps me feel refreshed and improves my mood, whereas sad songs tend to make me feel down.

提案: Correct grammar (use subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms), be more direct and avoid redundancy. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas and give a brief specific reason or example.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because it has a light melody and a lively rhythm. For instance, a fast beat song motivates me to move and lifts my spirits.

提案: Use complete sentences and avoid informal fillers. Be concise, correct tense (use past or present consistently), and finish your thought rather than trailing off. Add a specific detail about what you learned or a short example of an activity.

例: Yes, I take music classes at school where we practice instruments like guitar and violin in our school band. I play the violin in the orchestra and recently learned how to read orchestral scores and play in ensemble pieces.

提案: Improve grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'I usually listen to music while doing homework'), avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Give one specific example of how music helps your work and use a linking word to connect cause and effect.

例: Yes, I usually listen to music while doing homework because it helps me relax and stay focused. For example, soft instrumental tracks calm me down and allow me to concentrate, which makes my study sessions more efficient.

× I prefer happy and light music because I usually listening to music when I'm finishing my homework and I need happy music to make me feel refreshed and give me a better mood, but the sad music don't have this effect.

✓ I prefer happy and light music because I usually listen to music when I'm finishing my homework and I need happy music to make me feel refreshed and put me in a better mood, but sad music doesn't have this effect.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'listening' after 'usually' (use base form for habitual actions) and incorrect negative with 'don't' for singular noun 'sad music' (use doesn't). Also 'give me a better mood' is awkward; use 'put me in a better mood'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits (I usually listen), and ensure subject-verb agreement with auxiliary do/does (sad music doesn't).

× I sing happy music usually let me feel more excited because it usually have a light melody and rhythm which can bring my mood up.

✓ Singing happy music usually makes me feel more excited because it usually has a light melody and rhythm which can lift my mood.

Errors: 'I sing happy music usually let me' is ungrammatical; use gerund 'Singing' or rephrase 'When I sing'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'it usually have' should be 'it usually has'. 'Bring my mood up' is acceptable but 'lift my mood' is more natural. Suggestion: start with gerund for the activity and match verbs to singular subjects (has, makes).

× Yeah, I usually take music classes at school and we can practice our instruments like guitar, violin and other instruments with our band. I play the violin in the orchestra and.

✓ Yeah, I usually take music classes at school and we can practice instruments like the guitar and violin with our band. I play the violin in the orchestra.

Errors: unnecessary repetition 'instruments' twice and missing article before instrument names; include 'the' before specific instruments when listing generically use 'the guitar and violin' or omit. The sentence ended with an extra 'and.' Suggestion: remove redundancy, add articles where appropriate, and complete the final sentence without trailing conjunctions.

× That's quite usually for me and I used doing homework and listening to music.

✓ That's quite usual for me and I usually do homework while listening to music.

Errors: 'quite usually' is awkward; 'quite usual' or 'quite common' is better. 'I used doing homework' is incorrect; use 'I used to' for past habit or 'I usually do' for present habit. Context implies present habit, so use 'I usually do homework while listening to music.' Suggestion: place adverb 'usually' before main verb and use correct collocation 'do homework' and 'while listening.'

× That's helped me to lift my mood and let me feel relaxed in the meantime.

✓ That helps me lift my mood and lets me feel relaxed at the same time.

Errors: 'That's helped' (that has helped) mixes tenses; context is general habit so use simple present 'That helps.' Also 'let me feel' should be 'lets me feel' for subject-verb agreement. 'in the meantime' is better as 'at the same time' for simultaneous actions. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual effects and ensure verb agrees with singular subject ('helps', 'lets').

× It can improve my efficiency in doing homework.

✓ It can improve my efficiency when doing homework.

Error: phrasing 'in doing homework' is grammatical but 'when doing homework' is more natural. Use 'can improve my efficiency when doing homework' to indicate improvement during the activity. Suggestion: prefer 'when' for timing and keep simple modal 'can' for general ability/effect.