Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and one brief example. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct verb forms. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer happy music because it gives me energy and improves my mood. For example, when I do homework or household chores, upbeat songs help me stay focused and make repetitive tasks more enjoyable.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a concrete example. Correct plural and verb agreement (music makes, songs help). Use a linking phrase like 'for instance' or 'because'. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic because of its fast tempo and upbeat rhythm. For instance, listening to lively songs while studying helps me concentrate and turns boring chores into something more pleasant.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatical response with specific details: say when you took the class, how long it lasted, and what you learned. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use two to three concise sentences.

例: Yes, I took piano lessons when I was seven for about one hour each week. In those classes I learned basic music theory and how to read simple notes.

提案: Answer directly, correct pronouns and tense, and give a specific example of activities and types of music. Use linking words (because, for example) and finish the idea clearly. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing homework or household chores because upbeat tracks make me feel more energetic. For example, I play upbeat or epic instrumental songs when cleaning or studying, which helps me stay motivated and focused.

× Umm to be honest, I would be very happy music because for me happy music give me a lot of energy while we're doing homework or doing some how household tasks.

✓ Umm to be honest, I prefer happy music because for me happy music gives me a lot of energy while I'm doing homework or doing household tasks.

Problems: subject-verb agreement ('happy music give' -> 'happy music gives') and wrong modal/phrase ('I would be very happy music' -> 'I prefer happy music'); tense and pronoun use for ongoing actions ('we're doing' is awkward; use 'I'm doing' to match speaker). Suggestion: Use the correct verb form to agree with the singular noun 'music' (adds -s), use 'prefer' for preferences, and use the first-person singular for personal habits.

× Umm listening to happy music makes me to engage and feel more energetic during the day.

✓ Umm listening to happy music makes me feel more engaged and energetic during the day.

Problems: incorrect use of 'makes me to engage' (make + object + base verb, not 'to'); adjective vs participle ('engaged' is correct to describe feeling). Suggestion: Use 'makes me feel' + adjective or past participle: 'feel more engaged' and remove 'to' after 'makes'.

× I would say that yes, happy music usually make me feel more energetic and in a better mood, especially when I'm doing homework or household course.

✓ I would say that yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic and in a better mood, especially when I'm doing homework or household chores.

Problems: subject-verb agreement ('music usually make' -> 'music usually makes') and word choice ('household course' is incorrect; use 'household chores'). Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with singular noun 'music' and use correct noun 'chores' for routine home tasks.

× For instance, listening to a bit of lifting songs help me to concentrate and make repetitive tasks more enjoyable.

✓ For instance, listening to a few uplifting songs helps me concentrate and makes repetitive tasks more enjoyable.

Problems: 'lifting songs' should be 'uplifting songs'; quantifier 'a bit of' with countable 'songs' is wrong (use 'a few'); subject-verb agreement ('songs help' -> 'songs help' would be okay but with 'a few uplifting songs' treat as plural so 'help' could work; however 'listening to a few uplifting songs helps' treats the activity as singular); unnecessary 'to' after 'concentrate'. Suggestion: Use 'a few uplifting songs', remove 'to' after 'helps', and match verbs to the chosen subject structure.

× Umm, honestly, I have taken a, a music, a piano class or about one hour, 1 hour, uh, seven years old.

✓ Umm, honestly, I took a piano class for about one hour when I was seven years old.

Problems: incorrect tense and awkward structure ('have taken' vs simple past 'took' for a past event at a specific time), article misuse ('a, a music, a piano class' redundant), time expression wrongly placed. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed actions with specified times, use 'for about one hour', and place age/time correctly: 'when I was seven years old'.

× Uh, this lesson taught me how to read some basis note or, uh, some music some.

✓ This lesson taught me how to read basic notes and some musical notation.

Problems: incorrect adjective 'basis' -> 'basic', singular/plural agreement ('note' -> 'notes'), phrase 'some music some' is fragmented. Suggestion: Use 'basic notes' and 'musical notation' or 'sheet music' to express the idea clearly.

× Yes, umm, I use listening to music while we're doing some homework or repetitive tasks because uh, well, listen to uh, some epic songs.

✓ Yes, umm, I listen to music while I'm doing homework or repetitive tasks because, well, listening to some energetic songs

Problems: wrong verb construction 'I use listening' -> 'I listen', inconsistent pronoun/tense 'we're doing' -> 'I'm doing' for personal habit, and 'epic songs' may be better as 'energetic songs'. Suggestion: Use simple present 'I listen' for habits and maintain first-person singular; use appropriate adjective for the music style.

× It made me feel more energetic and put me in a better mood, while also it helped me to be more.

✓ It makes me feel more energetic and puts me in a better mood, and it also helps me be more productive.

Problems: tense inconsistency ('made' vs present habit should be 'makes'), awkward insertion 'while also it helped me to be more' is incomplete and vague. Suggestion: Use consistent present tense for habitual actions ('makes', 'puts', 'helps') and complete the idea with a clear adjective or noun such as 'more productive'.