Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Use correct verb forms and simpler phrasing (e.g., “I prefer upbeat music because it cheers me up and motivates me during exercise”).

例: I prefer happy, upbeat music because it cheers me up and gives me energy. For example, when I exercise I play fast pop songs which help me keep a steady pace and stay motivated.

提案: Answer directly with a clear subject-verb agreement and explain why briefly using a linking word. Avoid unclear words (e.g., ‘tempo’ not ‘temple’).

例: Yes, definitely. Happy music makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and upbeat rhythm increase my heart rate and lift my mood.

提案: Use correct tense and structure: give a direct response, then add a specific detail about what you’d like to learn and why. Replace vague words like ‘kinda’ with concrete terms.

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would like to learn piano lessons because I enjoy melodies and think learning piano would help me understand music better.

提案: Use correct verb forms and be specific about situations. Begin with a clear topic sentence and then list two or three common activities using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I always listen to music when I'm commuting, doing household chores, or relaxing at home. For instance, I often play podcasts or playlists on the bus and upbeat songs while cooking.

× These days I usually I I prefer a bit happy music because it directly cheers me up and lit me up kind of vibe and I really I really love to love to listen when I exercise so.

✓ These days I usually prefer slightly happy music because it directly cheers me up and gives me a lifted vibe, and I really love to listen to it when I exercise.

Errors: redundant words ('I I', 'I really I really'), incorrect adjective use ('a bit happy music' -> 'slightly happy music'), wrong verb form 'lit me up' (should be 'gives me a lifted vibe'), missing preposition 'listen to'. Suggestion: remove redundancies, use appropriate adverb/adjective ('slightly'), use correct verb phrases ('gives me'), and include required preposition after 'listen' ('listen to'). Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Yeah, definitely happy. Music make me feel more excited and happy because the temple is all about so.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Happy music makes me feel more excited and cheerful because the tempo is upbeat.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('Music make' -> 'Happy music makes') and unclear noun 'temple' likely intended 'tempo'. Missing article and awkward phrasing 'is all about so'. Suggestion: match singular subject with singular verb ending in -s, correct vocabulary ('tempo'), and use clearer adjectives ('upbeat', 'cheerful').

× I've never take in any music classes but I love to kinda piano or instrument things.

✓ I've never taken any music classes, but I would love to learn piano or other instruments.

Errors: incorrect past participle after 'have' ('take' -> 'taken'), incorrect preposition 'in', informal 'kinda' and wrong verb 'love to kinda piano' needs rephrasing. Suggestion: use present perfect with past participle, remove wrong preposition, replace informal fillers with 'would love to learn' and specify 'piano or other instruments'.

× I always listening music, whether I'm going to home, in the bus or just whatever, wherever I am in, I always listening.

✓ I always listen to music, whether I'm going home, on the bus, or wherever I am.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'always listening' should be present simple 'always listen to', missing preposition after 'listen' ('to'), wrong prepositions 'going to home' -> 'going home', 'in the bus' -> 'on the bus', redundant phrases. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions, include 'to' after 'listen', and use correct prepositions for places ('home', 'on the bus').