Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Reduce hesitations and correct basic grammar (e.g., "different situations", "makes me feel weighed down"). Use linking words like "because" or "but" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer happy music most of the time because it energizes me and improves my mood. However, when I feel reflective I sometimes listen to sad songs because their lyrics help me process my feelings.

提案: Answer directly then give a brief, specific reason. Fix grammar and avoid repetition. Use one linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") and a concrete example of how it affects you.

例: Yes, it does. Upbeat music lifts my mood and gives me more energy, so I listen to it when I need to concentrate or exercise.

提案: Give a clear past-tense response with one or two specific details about the classes (what you learned or enjoyed). Remove filler words and organize with a topic sentence followed by supporting detail using linking words like "because" or "for example".

例: Yes, I took music classes at primary school. For example, we learned basic music theory and sang in the school choir, which helped me enjoy singing and understand rhythm.

提案: Answer directly and give two specific activities and a brief reason. Correct grammar ("I usually listen to upbeat music") and avoid repetition. Use a linking word like "because" to explain why.

例: Yes, I often listen to upbeat music when I clean my apartment or exercise because it keeps me motivated and makes chores feel quicker.

× Uh, actually in a situation, different situation have different music.

✓ Uh, actually in different situations, different kinds of music are appropriate.

Original has sentence structure problems and subject-verb agreement. 'In a situation, different situation' is awkward and ungrammatical; use plural 'situations'. Use 'different kinds of music are appropriate' to clarify meaning and ensure subject-verb agreement (situations ... are).

× Uh, if I have a sad mood, are you really listening to, umm, happy music makes me uh, move weighted And if I'm happy.

✓ If I am in a sad mood, listening to happy music makes me feel less weighed down. If I'm happy, ...

The original mixes questions and statements and misuses verb forms. 'listening to happy music makes me' requires third person singular verb 'makes' correctly but the phrase 'are you really listening to' is misplaced. Also 'move weighted' is incorrect; replace with 'feel less weighed down' to convey intended meaning. Maintain present simple for general truths about preferences.

× Yes, of course, when I have done uh, are you really listening to upbeat music? Uh, because makes me, umm, makes me live because I lift my mood and makes me uh, enough energy.

✓ Yes, of course. When I feel down, I listen to upbeat music because it lifts my mood and gives me energy.

Original mixes past ('have done') and incorrect question phrasing, and has missing subjects for verbs ('because makes me'). Use present simple to express habitual behavior: 'I listen', and include subjects for verbs: 'it lifts my mood' and 'gives me energy'.

× And I have, uh, when I was a child, uh, uh, my school usually, uh, had a music class.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my school usually had music classes.

Original starts with 'And I have' which is incorrect for answering 'Have you taken any music classes?'. Use 'Yes, I did.' or 'Yes, I have.' If referring to past habitual classes, use past simple 'my school usually had music classes' and plural 'classes'. Keep tense consistent.

× And I really like music class because, umm, I don't uh, study, learn more, umm, practical knowledge.

✓ I really liked music class because I learned practical skills there.

Original misuses conjunction and negation ('I don't study, learn more'). For past reference to childhood classes, use past tense 'liked' and 'learned'. Simplify sentence and remove unnecessary negation to clearly state reason: 'I learned practical skills.'

× Yes I do when I clean my apartment or exercise and I usually listening to music and up upbeat music.

✓ Yes, I do. When I clean my apartment or exercise, I usually listen to upbeat music.

Original uses incorrect verb form 'I usually listening'. After auxiliary 'do' and as a habitual action use base form 'listen'. Also correct word order and remove duplicated words ('up upbeat'). Add commas to separate clauses and maintain present simple for habitual actions.