Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변을 더 자연스럽고 문법적으로 정확하게 만드세요. 주제 문장으로 바로 대답한 뒤 하나나 두 개의 구체적인 이유를 연결사(for, because, so 등)를 사용해 추가하세요. 불필요한 반복과 단어 오류(ref refresh, get more recharge)를 피하고 문장을 완성하세요. 예: ‘I prefer happy music to sad music because…’ 형태로 시작하고, 마지막에 ‘but sometimes I listen to sad songs when I’m feeling down’처럼 대조를 명확히 하세요.

例: I prefer happy music to sad music because upbeat songs refresh my mind and recharge my energy. However, when I feel down, I sometimes listen to sad music to match my mood and process my feelings.

提案: 명확한 주어-동사 일치와 적절한 어휘 선택을 연습하세요. ‘music’는 불가산명사이므로 복수형 ‘musics’는 피하고, ‘upbeat’이나 ‘lively’ 같은 적절한 형용사를 사용하세요. 이유를 덧붙일 때는 연결사(because, so, therefore)를 자연스럽게 사용하고, 결과 문장은 간결하게 유지하세요.

例: Yes, absolutely. I find upbeat music lively and energizing, so it usually makes me feel more cheerful and motivated.

提案: 문법(현재완료와 일반 부정문), 어순과 표현을 고치세요. ‘I haven't taken any music classes’처럼 현재완료 부정형을 사용하고, 능력 표현은 ‘I don’t have much musical ability’로 자연스럽게 바꾸세요. 의도나 계획을 말할 때는 ‘I would like to take singing lessons someday’처럼 명확히 표현하세요.

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes. I don't have much musical experience, but I would like to take singing lessons someday to improve my voice.

提案: 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하고 전치사·동사 형태를 수정하세요. ‘It depends on what I’m doing’처럼 시작하고, 공부할 때와 운동할 때의 대비를 ‘when… I don’t’ / ‘but when… I usually’로 명확히 표현하세요. ‘prefer listening to music’와 같은 올바른 동명사 사용을 연습하세요.

例: It depends on what I'm doing. When I'm studying I prefer not to listen to music because I need to concentrate, but when I'm working out I usually listen to energetic music to boost my motivation.

× Umm I prefer happy music than sad music because happy music made me more ref refresh my mind and get more recharge my energy. But when I feel sad I usually listen to.

✓ Umm I prefer happy music to sad music because happy music refreshes my mind and recharges my energy. But when I feel sad I usually listen to sad music.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than'. Use present simple 'refreshes' and 'recharges' for habitual effects (subject-verb agreement with singular 'happy music'). 'Made me more' is past and incorrect here; use simple present. Add the object 'sad music' to complete the clause. Suggestions: use 'prefer A to B', match tense (present simple) for general truths, and ensure verbs agree with singular nouns.

× Absolutely yes, because happy musics are very op-ed sounds and it makes me more energetic and cheerful. So happy music make me feel more enjoyable.

✓ Absolutely yes, because happy music has very upbeat sounds and it makes me feel more energetic and cheerful. So happy music makes me feel happier.

Use uncountable 'music' not plural 'musics'. 'Sounds' can be plural, but 'happy music has very upbeat sounds' is natural. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it makes' and 'music makes' (singular). 'Feel more enjoyable' is incorrect; use 'feel happier' or 'feel more enjoyable' is not natural for feelings. Suggestions: treat 'music' as uncountable, match verbs to singular subjects, and use appropriate adjective forms for feelings.

× Well, I think I don't have taken any music classes because I think I don't have ability of music but sometimes someday I want to take a music classes for my sing.

✓ Well, I think I haven't taken any music classes because I don't have musical ability, but someday I want to take music classes to learn singing.

Use present perfect 'haven't taken' for experience up to now. 'I don't have taken' is incorrect. 'Ability of music' is unnatural; use 'musical ability' or 'ability in music'. 'A music classes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'music classes' (no article) or 'a music class' (singular). 'For my sing' should be 'to learn singing' or 'to improve my singing'. Suggestions: use present perfect for life experience, correct noun phrases ('musical ability'), and match articles with count nouns.

× It depends on what I do other things. When I study I don't prefer listen to music because I can concentrate on other stuff studies. But when I workout I usually listen to music because it makes me feel energetic.

✓ It depends on what else I am doing. When I study I don't prefer to listen to music because I can concentrate on my studies. But when I work out I usually listen to music because it makes me feel energetic.

'What I do other things' is ungrammatical; use 'what else I am doing'. Use infinitive 'prefer to listen' not 'prefer listen'. 'Other stuff studies' is incorrect; use 'my studies' or 'other things I am studying'. 'Workout' as noun or verb: use 'work out' (verb) or 'when I work out'. Maintain tense consistency (present continuous for current ongoing activity as needed). Suggestions: use 'prefer to do', proper noun phrases like 'my studies', and correct verb forms 'work out'.

× So happy music make me feel more enjoyable.

✓ So happy music makes me feel happier.

Subject 'happy music' is singular (uncountable), so the verb must take third person singular 'makes' not 'make'. Also 'feel more enjoyable' is incorrect for a person's feeling; use comparative adjective 'happier'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct adjectives to describe feelings.