Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a brief topic sentence then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid very short answers and hesitation. For example, explain what ‘happy music’ means to you and give a concrete situation when you choose it.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me more energetic. For example, I often play upbeat pop songs when I’m getting ready in the morning to feel motivated and positive.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide specific supporting details and use linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and hesitation. Explain how happy music changes your feelings and give an example of when it does so.

例: Yes, definitely — happy music usually makes me feel more excited because of its fast tempo and positive lyrics. For instance, when I’m stressed before a presentation, listening to an upbeat song helps reduce my anxiety and boosts my confidence.

提案: Answer directly and expand slightly with a reason or future plan. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “I haven't, but I hope to” or “I don’t, but I hope to take lessons soon”). Add a specific reason or what kind of class you would like to take.

例: No, I haven’t taken any music classes, but I hope to start guitar lessons next year because I want to learn to play my favorite songs and improve my rhythm.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, then give one or two specific examples of activities and how music helps. Use a linking word to connect ideas and be concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, I often listen to music while exercising and cooking because it boosts my energy and improves my mood. For example, I play fast-paced playlists during workouts to keep my pace up and mellow acoustic tracks while cooking to relax.

× It helps me, uh. Shocked me to help you when I'm sad.

✓ It helps me, uh, to stop feeling shocked when I'm sad.

The original contains sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms. 'Shocked me to help you' is ungrammatical. The speaker likely meant that happy music helps them stop feeling shocked or helps when they feel sad. Use an infinitive or gerund phrase correctly and connect clauses: 'It helps me to stop feeling shocked when I'm sad.' Also combine fragments into one sentence and include a subject and proper verb form. Note: This correction assumes meaning; if the intended meaning differs, rephrase accordingly.

× No, I'm not hoping soon.

✓ No, I haven't, but I hope to take some soon.

The original 'I'm not hoping soon' is ungrammatical: 'hope' is a stative verb not typically used in continuous present for this meaning, and 'soon' placement is awkward. To answer whether they've taken classes, a natural reply is past perfect or present perfect negative plus intention: 'I haven't, but I hope to take some soon.' This uses present perfect to refer to experience up to now and expresses future intention with 'hope to'. Alternatively: 'No, I haven't taken any, but I hope to soon.'

× Yes, it helps me boost my energy and mood.

✓ Yes, it helps me boost my energy and my mood.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but adding 'my' before 'mood' improves clarity and parallel structure: 'boost my energy and my mood.' The verb 'helps' correctly agrees with singular subject 'it' (present tense). No major tense change required.