Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, use correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Add one brief reason with a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: It depends on my mood. When I want to relax and reflect, I prefer sad music because its slower tempo helps me calm down; however, when I need energy, I choose happy music to lift my spirits.

提案: Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating the same idea. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example or situation using a linking word like "because" or "for example."

例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because its upbeat rhythm increases my energy levels. For example, I always play lively songs when I celebrate a promotion or go out with friends.

提案: Answer directly with correct tense and clear plans. If you mention future intentions, use simple future tense and be specific about what you plan to do and why.

例: No, I haven't taken any formal music classes, but I plan to enroll in a vocal course next month to improve my singing technique and confidence.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence, use linking words to list activities, and provide one clear reason. Correct grammar and simplify sentences to avoid confusion.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while exercising, drawing, or studying because it makes boring tasks more enjoyable and helps me concentrate.

× It's depend on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Subject-verb agreement in present simple: with subject 'it' the verb needs third person singular form 'depends'. Use 'depends' not 'depend'. Suggestion: Learn third person -s rules for present simple and practice with subjects he/she/it.

× Sometimes I prefer to listen to sad music and sometimes happy music and.

✓ Sometimes I prefer to listen to sad music and sometimes happy music.

Sentence ended with extra conjunction 'and' creating incomplete structure. Remove the final 'and' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: Avoid dangling conjunctions; finish each clause fully before connecting them.

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited and feeling happy because when I celebrate for something, it's make me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and happy because when I celebrate something, it makes me feel more excited.

Multiple issues: 'happy music' as a singular subject requires 'makes' (third person singular). 'Feeling happy' is unnecessary; use 'happy' as adjective. 'Celebrate for something' is incorrect preposition; 'celebrate something' is correct. 'It's make' should be 'it makes' for subject-verb agreement and correct tense. Suggestions: Ensure subject-verb agreement with third person singular, use correct prepositions (celebrate something), and avoid redundant verb forms.

× I did not take in any music classes, but in the future I was playing yesterday to get some courses to music and singing.

✓ I have not taken any music classes, but yesterday I was looking into taking some music and singing courses for the future.

Original mixes tenses and incorrect verbs/prepositions. 'Did not take in' is wrong; use 'have not taken' to indicate experience up to now. 'I was playing yesterday to get some courses' is ungrammatical: use 'was looking into' or 'looked into' and 'taking some music and singing courses'. Also fix word order. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences and past continuous or simple past appropriately; choose correct verbs like 'look into' and correct noun phrases 'music and singing courses'.

× Yes, I listen to the music while doing some exercise like sport or drawing or studying something not interesting but with amusing feel.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while doing exercise, such as playing sports, drawing, or studying things that are not interesting but feel more enjoyable with music.

'Listen to the music' can be simplified to 'listen to music'. 'Doing some exercise like sport' is awkward; use 'playing sports' or 'doing exercise'. 'Studying something not interesting but with amusing feel' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'studying things that are not interesting but feel more enjoyable with music'. Maintain present tense consistency. Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('play sports', 'listen to music') and clear relative clauses for descriptions.

× Feel this things is music is interesting.

✓ I feel that music makes these things more interesting.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: wrong word order and missing conjunctions. Use 'I feel that' + clause and correct noun/pronoun agreement: 'these things' not 'this things'. 'Music makes these things more interesting' expresses intended meaning. Suggestion: Use complete clauses introduced by 'that' and match singular/plural forms.