Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence saying which you prefer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and correct grammar (e.g., "makes my mood" not "make my feeling").

例: I prefer happy music rather than sad songs because it lifts my mood. For example, upbeat pop songs make me feel more energetic and help me concentrate when I'm working.

提案: Give a direct answer, then explain with a clear reason and a brief example. Use correct verb forms (e.g., "when I listen"), and avoid vague phrases like "leave my mood." Use a linking word such as "because" or "so" for coherence.

例: Yes, definitely, because when I listen to upbeat songs I become more energetic and motivated. For instance, I often play lively music before exercising to boost my energy.

提案: Answer directly (No), then expand with one or two specific details about how you engage with music. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating verbs. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "so") correctly and keep sentences concise (max 5).

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I listen to music all day while I work or cook. For example, I often play acoustic playlists while preparing dinner because they help me relax.

提案: Start with a clear yes/no, then give specific examples using correct tense and vocabulary. Remove fillers and give one reason. Clarify unfamiliar phrases (e.g., "Alice Elysian music"—name the artist or genre correctly).

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I play relaxing indie tracks when I cook and upbeat songs in the shower because music helps me feel more confident and relaxed.

× For me, I prefer happy music with the, uh, melancholy type, Yeah, because, uh, I'm feeling the happy music can make my feeling a little bit up.

✓ For me, I prefer happy music rather than melancholy music, because happy music can lift my mood a little.

The original sentence misuses the definite article 'the' before 'melancholy type' and uses an awkward phrase 'make my feeling a little bit up.' Replace 'the melancholy type' with 'melancholy music' and 'make my feeling a little bit up' with 'lift my mood a little' for natural, grammatical English. Keep tense present simple to express a general preference. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× It's not feeling sad again.

✓ It doesn't make me feel sad.

The original lacks a clear subject-verb structure and uses incorrect verb form 'feeling' with 'It's.' Use 'It doesn't make me feel sad' to show negative effect in simple present. This fixes sentence structure and verb selection. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× Yes for sure, because when I listening happy music I can leave my mood so little bit more energetic and I can feel more excited to.

✓ Yes, for sure, because when I listen to happy music my mood becomes a little more energetic and I feel more excited.

The original uses the present participle 'listening' where the base form 'listen' is required after 'when I.' Also 'leave my mood' is incorrect; use 'my mood becomes' or 'I feel.' Remove the extraneous 'to' at the end. Maintain present simple for habitual action. Grammar Problem Type ID: 10

× I have never been for take any music classes but I like to hear or listening or listen to music for a whole day when I working or just put the music on when I cooking so it's make me a little bit relaxed.

✓ I have never taken any music classes, but I like to listen to music all day when I'm working, or just put music on when I'm cooking, because it makes me a bit relaxed.

Multiple errors: 'been for take' is incorrect — the correct perfect form is 'have never taken.' Choose the infinitive 'to listen' rather than alternating forms. Use 'when I'm working' and 'when I'm cooking' with contraction or full form of 'be.' Use 'it makes me a bit relaxed' for correct subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing. Also replace 'for a whole day' with 'all day.' Grammar Problem Type ID: 9

× Yeah, uh, for example, Alice Elysian music when I was cooking or I put music on my phone in the bathroom when I take a shower.

✓ Yeah, for example, I listen to Alice Elysian when I am cooking, or I put music on my phone in the bathroom when I take a shower.

The original omits the verb 'listen' before the artist name. Use present continuous 'I am cooking' or present simple 'I cook' depending on habitual action; here present simple/habitual is fine but present continuous 'when I am cooking' is natural. Also keep consistent tense in the clause 'when I take a shower.' Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× It's just make me more confident and I feel so relaxed.

✓ It just makes me more confident and I feel very relaxed.

Subject-verb agreement error here requires 'makes' (not 'make') because 'it' is singular. 'So relaxed' is informal but acceptable; 'very relaxed' is more neutral. This corrects verb form and improves adverb choice. Grammar Problem Type ID: 13