Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural, but use more varied vocabulary (avoid repeating 'prefer') and shorten slightly to comply with the 5-sentence maximum and sound more fluent. Add a brief specific example to make it concrete and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: It depends on my mood: when I’m feeling down I tend to listen to mellow, sad songs because they help me process my emotions; but when I’m happy I choose upbeat pop or dance tracks to boost my energy.

提案: The idea is fine but avoid overgeneralized claims and informal phrasing like 'dopamine equals productivity.' Keep it natural by giving a concise, personal reason and, if citing research, be tentative. Use a linking phrase to expand briefly.

例: Yes, it does. For me, cheerful music lifts my mood and makes me more motivated to work; some studies also suggest upbeat music can increase feelings of reward, which may boost focus.

提案: Good direct response and explanation, but reduce redundancy ('no time at all' and 'busy and a bit clustered') and use smoother linking. Mention a specific type of class or what you watch to add detail.

例: No, I haven’t had the time. My schedule is quite packed with work, so instead I watch online music lessons and TV programs about guitar techniques in the evenings.

提案: The answer is a bit unclear ('doing tours' seems incorrect) and slightly repetitive. Clarify what activities you mean, avoid contradictions, and use a linking word to explain the effect. Keep it concise and give a specific example of an activity and a genre.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores like washing dishes or cooking. For example, calm acoustic songs help me relax and make the tasks feel quicker and less tedious.

× My preference depends on my mood.

✓ My preference depends on my mood.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence correctly uses the present simple to describe a general truth. Suggestion: None.

× When I am feeling gloomy, I prefer depressing music.

✓ When I am feeling gloomy, I prefer sad music.

Type: 6 Present tense issue. The original is grammatical but word choice: 'depressing music' implies music that causes depression; 'sad music' is the more natural collocation to express music that matches a gloomy mood. Suggestion: Use collocations that fit the intended meaning.

× However, when I am cheerful, I prefer upbeat music to lift my spirits.

✓ However, when I am cheerful, I prefer upbeat music to lift my spirits.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence correctly uses present simple for habitual preference and the infinitive to express purpose. Suggestion: None.

× Yes it does actually.

✓ Yes, it does, actually.

Type: 2 Third person singular issue. Main issue is punctuation and natural phrasing rather than verb form. Adding commas improves readability and natural speech rhythm. Suggestion: Use commas to separate short interjections.

× Studies show that when you listen to cheerful music, it increases your dopamine and dopamine equals productivity.

✓ Studies show that when you listen to cheerful music, it increases your dopamine levels, and higher dopamine is associated with increased productivity.

Type: 26 Sentence structure errors. Original repeats 'dopamine' awkwardly and uses 'equals' incorrectly. Correct form: 'increases your dopamine levels' and then link to productivity with 'is associated with' or 'is linked to'. Suggestion: Avoid repeating nouns awkwardly; use clear scientific phrasing like 'is associated with'.

× No, I haven't.

✓ No, I haven't.

No grammatical correction needed; present perfect is appropriate to indicate never taking classes up to now. Suggestion: None.

× My schedule is busy and a bit clustered sometimes, so I have no time at all to take classes.

✓ My schedule is busy and sometimes a bit crowded, so I have no time at all to take classes.

Type: 26 Sentence structure errors. 'Clustered' is awkward for describing a schedule; 'crowded' or 'packed' are natural collocations. Moving 'sometimes' before 'a bit' improves flow. Suggestion: Use natural collocations for schedules: 'busy', 'packed', 'crowded'.

× However, I enjoy watching music classes on the television.

✓ However, I enjoy watching music classes on television.

Type: 11 Incorrect use of prepositions. English idiom is 'on television' rather than 'on the television' when referring to TV as a medium. Use 'the television' when referring to the physical device. Suggestion: Choose 'on television' for the medium, 'on the television' only when emphasizing the device.

× Yes, I do, preferably when doing tours.

✓ Yes, I do, preferably when doing chores.

Type: 6 Present tense issue. 'Doing tours' is likely a lexical mistake: context later mentions washing dishes and chores. Replace with 'doing chores' to match meaning. Verb tense is fine. Suggestion: Ensure word choice matches intended activity.

× Tours aren't things that I like to do, especially washing dishes.

✓ Chores aren't things that I like to do, especially washing dishes.

Type: 26 Sentence structure errors. 'Tours' is incorrect word choice; 'chores' fits context. The rest of the sentence is grammatical. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'chores' for household tasks.

× Listening to the melodies helps calm my mind and when my mind is calm, it helps me finish the chores faster or in good time.

✓ Listening to melodies helps calm my mind, and when my mind is calm, it helps me finish the chores faster.

Type: 6 Present tense issue. Sentence is mostly correct; remove 'the' before 'melodies' for general meaning and delete 'or in good time' as redundant and awkward. Use a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and avoid redundant phrases like 'or in good time'.