Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and natural with a clear topic sentence and a specific example. To improve, reduce minor redundancy (e.g., “makes me stay motivated and refreshed” repeats similar ideas) and vary vocabulary slightly. Use one linking phrase to connect reason and example and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel more energetic. For example, I play upbeat songs while doing household chores, which helps me stay focused and makes the tasks more enjoyable.

提案: Content is relevant but delivery has issues: hesitations (“uh”), a grammatical error (“make” → “makes”), and an incomplete final clause. To improve, eliminate filler words, correct subject-verb agreement, and finish your thought using a linking word to show result. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it instantly lifts my mood and energizes me. For instance, I play lively pop songs while doing chores, which helps me stay motivated and complete tasks quickly.

提案: Good, direct response with a brief supporting detail. To improve further, add a little more specific information about the school music period (what you did or learned) and use a linking word to contrast the two ideas smoothly.

例: No, I haven't taken any special music classes; however, we had a weekly music period at school where we learned basic singing and rhythm exercises, which gave me some foundation.

提案: Your answer is natural and detailed but a bit repetitive (motivated/relaxed/rejuvenated) and slightly wordy. Improve by tightening the structure: start with a clear topic sentence, then use one linking word and two specific, distinct effects. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing household chores because it uplifts my mood and keeps me motivated. Additionally, calming tracks help me relax after a long day.

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited because it makes me feel, uh, energetic and it instantly uplifts my mood.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it makes me feel, uh, energetic and it instantly uplifts my mood.

The subject 'happy music' is third-person singular, so the verb must take the -s form: 'make' -> 'makes'. Keep the rest of the sentence unchanged. Suggestion: Always add -s to verbs when the subject is he/she/it or a singular noun in present simple.

× I often play uh, lively pop songs when I'm doing some household chores, which helps me stay motivated and feel.

✓ I often play, uh, lively pop songs when I'm doing some household chores, which helps me stay motivated and feel refreshed.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'feel', which makes the sentence incomplete. This is a sentence structure issue: a verb or complement is missing. Adding a suitable adjective like 'refreshed' completes the thought and matches the context. Suggestion: Ensure every clause has a clear object or complement; avoid trailing unfinished verbs.