Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Expand slightly to show reasoning and avoid sounding rehearsed. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details and a linking word. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: I prefer sad music because I sing ballads professionally. For example, sad songs let me focus on emotional expression and storytelling, which helps me connect with my audience.

提案: Make the response more fluent and use a linking word to connect the general statement with the example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., upbeat, danceable) and avoid repeating similar words.

例: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited; for instance, upbeat, danceable genres like R&B energize me and make me want to move.

提案: Improve grammar (tense and agreement), use a clear topic sentence, and give specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it within five sentences.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but my parents taught me at home. For example, my father taught me guitar technique while my mother coached my singing, so I learned through family practice sessions.

提案: Be more specific and concise. Give one or two concrete examples and avoid filler phrases like 'et cetera'. Use linking words to make the list smoother.

例: Yes, I listen to music every day while I work and when I'm cleaning the house, because it helps me stay focused and lifts my mood.

× My father teach me how to play instruments, my mother teach me how to sing.

✓ My father teaches me how to play instruments, and my mother teaches me how to sing.

Subject-verb agreement for third person singular subjects: 'father' and 'mother' require the verbs to take -s in the simple present (teach → teaches). Also add 'and' to join the two clauses for correct sentence structure and clarity.

× In our family we are music lover.

✓ In our family we are music lovers.

Plural issue and article/noun form: 'music lover' should be plural 'music lovers' to agree with plural subject 'we'. Alternatively, 'we are a musical family' could be used, but to keep original meaning, pluralize the noun.

× I don't take any music classes.

✓ I don't take any music classes. (If meaning is habitual: 'I don't take any music classes.' If meaning is past experience: 'I haven't taken any music classes.' )

Verb tense choice: The original sentence 'I don't take any music classes.' is grammatically correct if describing a habitual present state. If the speaker means they have never enrolled in classes up to now, the present perfect 'I haven't taken any music classes.' is more appropriate. Provide both options depending on intended meaning.

× Every day I listen to the music while doing, for example, doing a job, cleaning a house, et cetera, et cetera.

✓ Every day I listen to music while doing other things, for example working, cleaning the house, etc.

Adverb and article issues: remove 'the' before 'music' for general reference ('listen to music'), avoid repeating 'doing', use natural verbs ('working' instead of 'doing a job'), and use 'the house' for specific house cleaning. 'Et cetera' is better shortened to 'etc.' in speech transcripts. Also place 'Every day' at the beginning is fine; ensure smooth clause flow.