Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear direct answer (state preference), then explain briefly with specific reasons or examples. Avoid unrelated words and unclear phrases. Use linking words (because, when, for example) and keep responses concise (max 4 sentences).

例: I usually prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me focus. For example, when I feel tired after work I listen to upbeat J-pop to feel more energetic. Sometimes I choose slower songs if I want to relax or think.

提案: Answer directly (yes/no) then give 1–2 specific situations and a brief reason. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use linking words like when, while, and because to structure the response.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because its fast tempo boosts my energy. For instance, I listen to upbeat songs while jogging or cleaning my room because they make the tasks feel more enjoyable.

提案: Start with a clear statement about past experience, then give specific details: what instrument, how long, what you learned or gained. Avoid vague or broken sentences; connect ideas with linking words like when, so, and because.

例: Yes, I took guitar lessons when I was a child for about two to three months. During that time I learned basic chords and simple songs, which gave me confidence to play for family and friends. Although I stopped, it was a valuable experience that sparked my interest in music.

提案: Give a direct yes/no, then list specific activities and explain why you listen or avoid music during others. Keep sentences complete and avoid filler words (uh, hmm). Use linking phrases like when, because, and while for clarity.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores such as cleaning my room or washing clothes because it makes the tasks more enjoyable. However, I usually avoid music when I'm studying because I need quiet to concentrate.

× I prefer Japanese, it's not it's all depend on my life and sometimes I prefer cheer for you to happy magic.

✓ I prefer Japanese; it all depends on my life, and sometimes I prefer cheerful music to make me happy.

The sentence has several pronoun and verb agreement issues. 'it's not it's all depend' is incorrect; use 'it all depends' (third person singular). 'cheer for you to happy magic' is unclear and uses incorrect pronouns and nouns; likely intended 'cheerful music to make me happy.' Improve by using clear subjects ('it') and correct verb forms ('depends') and choose appropriate nouns ('music').

× At some time I like to listen to national Instagram as company understand the situation.

✓ Sometimes I like to listen to national music on Instagram for company and to help me understand the situation.

The original uses incorrect noun phrases and word order. 'At some time' should be 'Sometimes.' 'national Instagram' is not a correct phrase; likely 'national music on Instagram.' 'as company understand the situation' should be rephrased to 'for company and to help me understand the situation.' Use correct nouns and prepositional phrases and order words logically.

× Yeah, yes, most of the time I enjoy happy music and while I cleaning my room, while I clean my room, washing dishes and going for jogging in the gym.

✓ Yes, most of the time I enjoy happy music while I clean my room, wash the dishes, or go jogging at the gym.

Use the simple present tense for habitual actions: 'clean' not 'cleaning' in this clause, and parallel verbs should match form: 'clean,' 'wash,' 'go jogging.' 'Going for jogging' is ungrammatical; use 'go jogging' and 'at the gym' for correct preposition.

× Most of the time I enjoy a lot listening to music.

✓ Most of the time I really enjoy listening to music.

Word order and phrase choice: 'enjoy a lot listening' is awkward. Use 'really enjoy listening to music' to place the adverb before the verb and keep the gerund 'listening' after 'enjoy.'

× However in addition some areas like while I was.

✓ However, sometimes there are exceptions depending on the situation.

The original is an incomplete sentence and unclear. Provide a complete clause that conveys the intended contrast: use 'however' followed by a full clause. Avoid sentence fragments.

× Yes, I took classes when I was child is I took guitar classes when I was child.

✓ Yes, I took classes when I was a child; I took guitar classes when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' is incorrect (article errors). Also the sentence repeats and has extra words 'is.' Use past tense 'took' correctly but include the article 'a.'

× I was very interesting, interested in playing guitar.

✓ I was very interested in playing the guitar.

Use the adjective 'interested' to describe feelings, not 'interesting.' Also include the definite article 'the' before 'guitar' when speaking about the instrument in general contexts.

× Around 2 to three months I joined that class.

✓ I joined that class for around two to three months.

Quantifier and number expression should be 'two to three months.' Place time duration after the verb and use 'for' to indicate duration.

× It provides me a good experience. I don't know I for now I that's why.

✓ It gave me a good experience. I don't know why I haven't continued until now.

Tense consistency: when referring to a past class, use past tense 'gave.' The second fragment is unclear and ungrammatical; rephrase to express uncertainty about continuing, using correct tense and word order.

× Uh, yeah, yes, I like to listen a music while I am doing something like I am cleaning my room or washing my T-shirts and some other extra activities where I don't need to, uh, mind, use my mind then at that time I were listening, but while I'm studying or list or.

✓ Yes, I like to listen to music while I am doing things like cleaning my room or washing my T-shirts and other simple tasks when I don't need to concentrate; at those times I listen, but not while I'm studying.

Use 'listen to music' (preposition 'to' required) and 'music' without the article 'a.' Use present continuous 'am doing' for current habitual actions and maintain subject-verb agreement ('I listen,' not 'I were listening'). Clarify conjunctions and remove fillers, use 'concentrate' instead of awkward 'use my mind.' Ensure parallel structure and complete clauses.