Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clearer direct answer first (e.g., I usually prefer happy music) and then explain briefly with specific reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., "sad music sounds emotional" not "is sounds emotion") and avoid redundancy. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "however."

例: I usually prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me feel more energetic. However, I sometimes choose sad music when I want to reflect on my feelings, because its slower melodies make me think.

提案: Answer directly and use correct tense and vocabulary. Say how and when it affects you with a specific example. Replace incorrect words ("retired") with the intended phrase (likely "relaxed" or "relieved") and connect ideas with "because" or "so."

例: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because the upbeat tempo and cheerful lyrics boost my energy. For example, I often play lively songs after work to relax and lift my spirits.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant. Improve fluency by removing fillers ("Uh, uh") and combine sentences for better structure. Add a brief detail about what you learned or why you like Chopin to make it more specific.

例: Yes, I took piano lessons from age three until high school, so I can read music and play classical pieces. My favorite composer is Chopin because his expressive melodies suit the piano and helped me improve my technique.

提案: Provide a direct concise answer and give a clear specific example. Fix grammar ("listen while studying" and "I usually listen to my favorite music, for example…"). Use linking words like "because" and avoid trailing phrases. Mention what type of music helps you concentrate.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while studying because it helps me focus and blocks out distractions. For example, I usually play instrumental or lo-fi tracks because they have a steady rhythm and no distracting lyrics.

× I prefer to listen certain music usually because the sad music is sounds emotion so my feelings is impulsive.

✓ I prefer to listen to certain music usually because sad music sounds emotional, so my feelings become impulsive.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listen' and extra 'the' before 'sad music'; 'is sounds' combines two verbs incorrectly — use simple present 'sounds' to describe a general quality; 'emotion' (noun) should be the adjective 'emotional'; 'my feelings is' has subject-verb agreement error — use 'become' (present tense change) to show resulting state. Suggestion: use 'listen to', remove unnecessary articles, use correct adjective forms and match verb form to the subject.'

× So I try to listen to music when I retired.

✓ So I tried to listen to music when I retired.

The sentence mixes present tense 'try' with past time reference 'when I retired'. Use past tense 'tried' to match the time frame. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with time markers; if referring to past habit, use 'tried' or 'used to'. 'Retired' is correct if the speaker means they stopped working; if they meant 'go to bed' use 'went to bed'.'

× I took piano lessons from when I was three years old until high school.

✓ I took piano lessons from when I was three years old until high school.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable for past situation and matches the past time frame. No correction needed. Explanation: 'took ... from ... until' correctly indicates a past period. Keep past tense because the action occurred in the past.'

× I like to play the piano. Uh, uh, my favorite composer is Chopin.

✓ I like to play the piano. My favorite composer is Chopin.

Fillers 'Uh, uh' are not grammatical errors but unnecessary in written form; removing them produces a clear sentence. Pronouns are used correctly; change is stylistic to improve clarity. Suggestion: omit hesitation sounds when writing.'

× Yes, I prefer to listen while I'm studying because it helps me to concentrate so I'll usually listen my favorite music it is for example.

✓ Yes, I prefer to listen while I'm studying because it helps me concentrate, so I usually listen to my favorite music, for example.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listen'; 'helps me to concentrate' is acceptable but 'helps me concentrate' is more natural; 'I'll usually' mixes future with general habit — use present 'I usually' or present progressive depending on context; run-on sentence needs commas and clearer structure; 'it is for example' is unnatural — place 'for example' at end. Suggestion: use 'listen to', keep consistent tense for habits ('I usually listen'), and break long sentences into clearer parts.'