Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference pattern, avoid hesitations and self-corrections, and use linking words to show contrast (e.g. 'but' or 'however'). Also correct grammar (use 'I listen to' and 'it makes me feel') and reduce repetition. Aim for 2–4 well-formed sentences.

例: It depends on my mood. If I'm feeling sad, I often choose sad music because it helps me process my emotions. However, when I want to have fun, I listen to upbeat songs to lift my spirits.

提案: Give a clear affirmative with a brief reason and one specific detail or example. Avoid repeating words and fix grammar (use 'happy music has' or 'it has'). Use a linking word like 'because' then a concise explanation.

例: Yes, it does because happy music usually has a faster tempo and cheerful melodies, which energize me. For example, I feel more alert and want to move or sing along when I hear upbeat pop songs.

提案: Answer directly with correct grammar and add a brief reason. Avoid awkward phrasing ('been to any music') and filler words. Use a linking word like 'because' to explain why, and include a short supporting detail if possible (e.g. hobbies or future plans).

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes. I haven't been interested in singing, so I prefer simply listening to music in my free time rather than learning to perform.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific examples using linking phrases like 'for example' or 'for instance.' Remove filler words and avoid saying 'that's the only time' unless accurate. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g. 'while commuting' or 'while cooking').

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play my favorite songs when I'm driving, and I also enjoy listening to music while cooking because it makes chores more enjoyable.

× We will. It actually depends on my mood.

✓ It actually depends on my mood.

'We will' is unnecessary and incoherent in context. The speaker intends to state a general truth about preference, so the present tense 'It actually depends on my mood' is correct. Remove 'We will.' to avoid an incorrect future-tense fragment. Suggestion: Start with 'It actually depends on my mood.' when describing general preferences.

× If I I'm feeling sad, then I umm, then you're listening to sad music.

✓ If I'm feeling sad, then I listen to sad music.

The original has extra words and a second-person pronoun 'you're' that doesn't match the speaker. This is a sentence structure and pronoun choice error. Use the first-person subject 'I' and a simple present tense 'listen' for habitual action. Suggestion: Say 'If I'm feeling sad, I listen to sad music.'

× Makes me feel very good.

✓ It makes me feel very good.

The sentence is missing an explicit subject. In English, a clause needs a subject; 'It' is appropriate to refer to the music. Also use simple present 'makes' for a general effect. Suggestion: Use 'It makes me feel very good.' to form a complete sentence.

× But if I wanna enjoy, I listen happy music.

✓ But if I want to enjoy myself, I listen to happy music.

Multiple issues: 'wanna' is informal and 'enjoy' needs an object or reflexive 'myself' to be natural. 'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by a noun. Also use 'want to' instead of 'wanna' in a formal response. Suggestion: 'But if I want to enjoy myself, I listen to happy music.'

× Yes, it obviously does because they have happy music has that kind of tone and excitement and, and it that, uh, makes me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, it obviously does because happy music has that kind of tone and excitement, and that makes me feel more excited.

The original mixes subjects and adds extra pronouns ('they', duplicate 'has'). Use a single subject 'happy music' with the singular verb 'has'. Replace the confused phrase 'and it that' with 'and that' to refer to the tone and excitement. Suggestion: Keep clear subjects and don't repeat auxiliary verbs.

× No, I haven't been to any music last year.

✓ No, I didn't take any music classes last year.

'I haven't been to any music last year' misuses the present perfect with a specific past time 'last year' and uses 'been to' awkwardly with 'music'. Use simple past 'didn't take' for a completed action at a specific time and specify 'music classes.' Suggestion: 'I didn't take any music classes last year.'

× So because uh, uh, I'm not interested in uh, singing, uh.

✓ Because I'm not interested in singing, I just listen to music.

The phrase 'So because' and filler words create redundancy; simplify to 'Because'. The clause 'I'm not interested in singing' is fine but should be followed by the main clause. Suggestion: Combine into one clear sentence: 'Because I'm not interested in singing, I just listen to music.'

× I just listen to music.

✓ I just listen to music.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Explanation: Short declarative sentence with correct subject and verb; it appropriately follows the previous clause.

× Yes, obviously. I think, uh, that's the only time I listen to music, umm, when like when I'm driving somewhere, I play my favorite songs.

✓ Yes, obviously. I think that's the main time I listen to music. When I'm driving somewhere, I play my favorite songs.

Run-on and filler words create awkward structure. 'That's the only time' is too absolute and may be inaccurate; 'main time' is safer. Split into two sentences for clarity and keep present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: Remove fillers and split long clauses into clearer sentences.

× If I'm doing something in the kitchen, I like to listen to music as well.

✓ If I'm doing something in the kitchen, I like to listen to music as well.

This sentence is correct as written. Present participle 'doing' and simple present 'like' correctly express habitual action. No change needed.