Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and shorter, clearer sentences. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence (state preference depends on mood), then give two specific examples (morning: rock/rap to energize; night: sad songs to relax). Use linking words like 'for example' and 'in the evening'. Avoid filler phrases ("you know").

例: I don't have one fixed preference; it depends on my mood. For example, in the morning I prefer rock or rap because upbeat songs boost my energy and help me focus. In the evening I often choose sad, slow songs to relax and fall asleep more easily.

提案: Be concise and precise: answer directly then support with a specific reason and example. Correct grammar ("it puts me in a good mood") and avoid repetition. Use one linking phrase such as 'for instance' or 'when'.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because it puts me in a good mood. For instance, when I study for exams I listen to upbeat songs to stay motivated and concentrate better.

提案: Organize chronologically and fix verb tenses: start with a topic sentence (yes/no and what), then give ages and reasons. Use clearer vocabulary ("talented", "instrument"). Avoid vague phrases and fillers. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I took piano lessons when I was a child, starting at about six years old. I didn't feel very talented with piano, so I stopped and later, around tenth grade, I started playing the guitar because it suited me better.

提案: Clarify activities and genres, and use correct collocations ("listen to music while studying/working out", "pop songs"). Give two clear examples with linking words ('for example', 'also'). Remove confusing expressions ("idioms", "live some heavyweights").

例: Yes, I usually listen to music while doing other things. For example, I study with rap or instrumental tracks because they help me concentrate, and when I work out I play energetic pop songs to keep my energy up.

× Well, that depends on what mood I'm like.

✓ Well, that depends on how I feel.

'What mood I'm like' is an incorrect pronoun and verb combination. Use 'how I feel' to describe one's mood. This fixes sentence structure and makes the meaning natural. Use: 'depends on how I feel' instead of 'depends on what mood I'm like'.

× Like in the morning, I'm love to listening to some kind of rock song, rock and rap songs.

✓ In the morning, I like to listen to rock and rap songs.

'I'm love to listening' mixes present continuous with 'love' and uses incorrect verb form 'listening'. Use simple present 'I like to listen' for habitual actions. Remove unnecessary words. Use: 'I like to listen' and plural nouns appropriately.

× And I gotta push my mood and my energy to, you know, the top.

✓ And I need to boost my mood and energy to the highest level.

'Gotta' is informal and 'push my mood ... to the top' is awkward. 'Boost' is a better verb and 'to the highest level' is a clearer quantifier phrase. Use appropriate register for speaking tests.

× And that's gonna be, you know, my work and do better and some at night, I really love to listening some kind of sad song to help me easy to fall asleep and parody.

✓ That helps me work better. At night, I really like to listen to sad songs to help me fall asleep and relax.

Original contains mixed clauses, informal 'gonna', wrong verb forms 'love to listening', and 'help me easy to fall asleep' is ungrammatical. Split into two sentences; use 'helps', 'I like to listen', and 'help me fall asleep and relax' for clarity.

× 'Cause it puts a lot of my mood in, you know, my study and when I have, you know, tomorrow I have an an exams when I'm studying, need to get some songs with a happy mood to, you know, always stay in, you know, get ready for my exams.

✓ Of course, because it improves my mood when I study. If I have exams tomorrow, I listen to upbeat songs to stay focused and prepare.

Original has pronoun/possessive issues 'puts a lot of my mood in my study' and redundant fillers. Rephrase to clear pronoun reference and correct verb usage: 'improves my mood', 'I listen to upbeat songs to stay focused and prepare'. Remove fillers.

× Well, as a child I'm used to going to a piano classes.

✓ As a child, I used to go to piano classes.

'I'm used to going' is present habitual; for past habitual use 'used to' + base verb. Also 'a piano classes' mixes article and plural; remove 'a' and use 'piano classes'.

× Cena was just like 6 years old.

✓ I started when I was about six years old.

'Cena' seems incorrect; likely intended 'I started'. Rephrase to proper subject and verb: 'I started when I was about six years old.' Use 'was about six years old' rather than 'was just like 6 years old'.

× But I feel like I'm not have talented in that kind of in instrument musical.

✓ But I felt that I wasn't talented in that kind of musical instrument.

Mixes present and present perfect forms. Use past tense 'felt' if referring to childhood experience, and correct adjective usage 'talented in' and proper word order 'musical instrument'. Remove extra prepositions.

× So I move on until in the 10th grade and play guitar, you know, because it's kind of be hard.

✓ So I moved on in the 10th grade and started playing the guitar because it was easier.

Tense inconsistency: use past 'moved' and 'started playing' for past events. 'It's kind of be hard' is ungrammatical; replace with 'it was easier' to explain reason.

× Well, definitely in studying, when I'm studying, I need to got some kind of rap music to build my mood and when I work out and listening to some like kind of idioms and you know, the music that play in the polls and pop and I gotta put my moves a lot and help me to live some heavyweights.

✓ When I study, I listen to rap music to boost my mood. When I work out, I listen to pop music and energetic songs that help me move a lot and lift heavy weights.

Original has many tense and word form errors: 'need to got', 'listening to some like kind of idioms', 'music that play in the polls' and awkward 'help me to live some heavyweights'. Correct to simple present 'I listen', use 'boost' and 'energetic songs', and 'lift heavy weights' for intended meaning.