Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (“I prefer happy music.”), then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (e.g., “I don't really get that often” is unclear).

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes my surroundings feel more cheerful. For example, upbeat songs help me concentrate when I study and make group gatherings more enjoyable.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use one linking word to add a specific example or reason. Correct verb forms and collocations (use “brighten the mood” or “lift the atmosphere”) to sound more natural.

例: Yes, it does. For instance, upbeat music brightens the mood and motivates me to exercise or complete chores more quickly.

提案: Use correct tense and grammar for past experience (“I have never taken any music classes” or “I never took any music classes”). Give a clear follow-up about future intentions and avoid unclear phrases like “Is that ground?”. Be specific about what you would learn or teach and why.

例: I have never taken any music classes, but if I had the chance I would attend lessons at UMM to learn guitar. Later, I would like to teach beginners because I enjoy helping others learn simple songs and techniques.

提案: Use correct singular/plural and clearer descriptions. Start with a topic sentence and add specific examples using linking words (“for example,” “also”). Clarify the last point: say what kinds of work are suitable for listening to music.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing daily chores. For example, I play music when I go swimming or wash the dishes, and I also listen while doing routine tasks at work, such as data entry, because it helps me stay focused.

× I prefer exciting music most of the times.

✓ I prefer exciting music most of the time.

'Most of the times' is nonstandard; the correct expression is 'most of the time' to indicate frequency. Use the singular 'time' after 'most of' when referring to general frequency.

× I don't really get that often and it really likes to lighten your environment and atmosphere up if you hear happy music.

✓ I don't really get sad that often, and happy music really helps to lighten your environment and atmosphere when you hear it.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and incorrect verb form 'likes' with an inanimate subject. Specify 'sad' (opposite of happy) if intended, and use 'helps to lighten' or 'lightens' with correct subject. Place pronouns so that 'it' clearly refers to 'happy music.'

× So I choose happy music.

✓ So I choose happy music.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change needed.

× It does. Most of the times I hear exciting music, it enlightens the environment around me, it lightens the atmosphere and it got me feeling excited when I need to do activities, doing activities.

✓ It does. Most of the time when I hear exciting music, it brightens the environment around me and makes me feel excited when I need to do activities.

Replace 'most of the times' with 'most of the time.' 'Enlightens' is awkward for mood; 'brightens' or 'lightens' is better. 'It got me feeling' mixes tenses; use present 'makes me feel' to match habitual action. Remove repeated phrase 'doing activities.'

× I never taken any music classes, but if I do I would like to go to UMM.

✓ I have never taken any music classes, but if I did I would like to go to UMM.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' to describe an experience up to now. For the conditional, use the past tense 'did' (second conditional) together with 'would' to express hypothetical desire. Alternatively keep 'if I do, I would like' is mixed; change to 'if I did, I would like.'

× I would really like to go teach an instrument.

✓ I would really like to learn to play an instrument or I would really like to go and teach an instrument to others.

The original is unclear: 'go teach an instrument' is awkward. If the student means they want to learn, use 'learn to play an instrument.' If they mean to teach, add 'go and teach an instrument to others.' Choose the version matching intended meaning.

× Is that ground?

✓ Is that correct?

'Is that ground?' is incorrect and unclear. Likely the student meant 'Is that right?' or 'Is that correct?' Replace with one of those for clarity.

× I do listen to musics when I do my daily chores like swimming or cleaning the plates and dirty dishes.

✓ I do listen to music when I do my daily chores, like swimming or washing the plates and dirty dishes.

'Music' is an uncountable noun, so use 'music' not 'musics.' Use 'washing the plates' rather than 'cleaning the plates.' Keep chores parallel and natural.

× I also listen to the music when I'm working, especially for the work that does not have to do.

✓ I also listen to music when I'm working, especially for work that does not require much concentration.

Drop 'the' before 'music' in this context; 'music' is general. The clause 'the work that does not have to do' is ungrammatical; replace with 'work that does not require much concentration' to convey intended meaning. Use present simple for habitual actions.