Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngữ pháp chính xác và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề, sửa lỗi thì, số nhiều/ít và chia động từ, và cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về hoàn cảnh hoặc ví dụ cá nhân. Sử dụng từ nối nếu có thêm chi tiết.

例: I prefer listening to happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, I often play upbeat pop songs when I feel stressed after school, which helps me relax and focus on my homework.

提案: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và sửa ngữ pháp tiêu cực. Tránh mâu thuẫn; nếu nhạc vui không giúp bạn phấn khích, hãy giải thích lý do cụ thể và đưa ví dụ. Dùng liên từ để làm rõ nguyên nhân và kết quả.

例: Not really. Happy music doesn't always make me excited, especially when I'm feeling very down; in those moments I prefer calm instrumental tracks because they help me feel calmer rather than more energetic.

提案: Cần câu trả lời hoàn chỉnh với thì phù hợp và câu chi tiết hơn. Trình bày một câu chủ đề rồi bổ sung thông tin cụ thể: nội dung lớp học, kĩ năng học được hoặc hoạt động bạn tham gia. Dùng liên từ để nối ý cho mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I participated in a music lab at my school where the teacher taught us basic music theory and singing. We also prepared songs for several school shows, which improved my confidence performing on stage.

提案: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách cụ thể hoá loại nhạc và lý do. Trả lời trực tiếp rồi nêu ví dụ cụ thể, dùng từ nối nếu mở rộng ý. Chú ý chia động từ và số ít/nhìu.

例: Yes, I usually listen to soft pop or lo-fi music while doing my homework because it helps me concentrate and feel more relaxed. For instance, I play instrumental playlists when studying for exams to avoid distraction.

× I love listening happy music more.

✓ I love listening to happy music more.

Incorrect: missing preposition 'to' after 'listening' when followed by an object. Use 'listening to' + noun. Suggestion: say 'listening to happy music' or 'listening to music that is happy'.

× I usually listen them when I when I am terrible.

✓ I usually listen to it when I am feeling terrible.

Incorrect: 'them' refers to plural but 'music' is uncountable and needs 'it' or no pronoun; also repeated 'when I'. Also 'feeling terrible' expresses state. Suggestion: use 'listen to it' or repeat 'listen to happy music' and remove duplicate words.

× I think that happy music help us feel comfortable and relax.

✓ I think that happy music helps us feel comfortable and relaxed.

Incorrect: subject 'happy music' is singular (uncountable), so verb requires third-person singular 'helps'. Also parallel structure: 'feel comfortable and relaxed' uses adjectives; 'relax' (verb) is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'helps' and 'relaxed'.

× No really, listening happy music when I am extremely terrible in not helping me feel better.

✓ No, really, listening to happy music when I am feeling extremely terrible does not help me feel better.

Errors: missing 'to' after 'listening' (see Verb + -ing), awkward phrase 'extremely terrible' should be 'feeling extremely terrible', and negative sentence needs 'does not help' for third-person singular or impersonal subject. Also 'in not helping' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: restructure to 'does not help me feel better'.

× Yes, I took part in music lab in my school.

✓ Yes, I took part in the music lab at my school.

Not strictly a participle error, but article and preposition needed: 'the music lab' and 'at my school' are natural. Suggestion: include 'the' and use 'at'.

× Music teacher teach me.

✓ The music teacher taught me.

Incorrect: missing article 'the' and wrong tense/subject-verb agreement. If referring to past, use past tense 'taught' for 'teacher' (singular). Suggestion: say 'The music teacher taught me' or 'My music teacher taught me'.

× Many shows.

✓ There were many shows.

Fragment: 'Many shows' is not a complete sentence. Use 'There were many shows' or 'We had many performances'. Suggestion: add 'There were' or incorporate into previous sentence.

× Yes, I usually listen to music while I do my homework at home.

✓ Yes, I usually listen to music while I do my homework.

Redundancy: 'at home' is unnecessary if implied; grammatically sentence is fine. Suggestion: omit 'at home' for conciseness. 'Listen to' is correct here.

× I think that music help me feel more relaxed.

✓ I think that music helps me feel more relaxed.

Incorrect: 'music' is uncountable singular and requires third-person singular verb 'helps'. Suggestion: use 'helps' to agree with subject.