Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "used to" twice), correct tense and articles, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Add a brief specific reason linking past preference to current preference using a linking phrase (e.g., "because" or "now that").

例: I preferred sad music when I was a teenager because I was going through heartbreak. Now that I have a stable job and a supportive family, I enjoy happy music more because it matches my positive mood.

提案: Improve grammar (subject–verb agreement) and use more natural phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then expand with a specific example or condition using a linking word like "if" or "when." Avoid repeating similar words ("sync/synced").

例: It depends on my mood: when the rhythm matches my energy, happy music makes me feel excited. For example, an upbeat pop song with a fast tempo pumps me up for exercise.

提案: Be concise and correct tense and grammar. Start with a direct answer, then give a brief, clear story with correct past-tense verbs and fewer hesitations. Use linking words like "but" and "because" appropriately and avoid repetition.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I taught myself to play the guitar. A younger student at school encouraged me, and because I practiced regularly, I learned to play well on my own.

提案: Answer directly about current habit as well as past habit, and use correct plural and article forms. Keep sentences joined with linking words and provide a clear current vs past contrast. Avoid fragments.

例: I still sometimes listen to music while doing tasks, but when I was a teenager I listened constantly, even while doing homework. For instance, I often did math problems with background music because it helped me concentrate.

× I used to prefer sad song because at the time I had a lot of heartbreak.

✓ I used to prefer sad songs because at the time I had a lot of heartbreak.

Countable nouns must match singular/plural usage. 'Song' should be plural 'songs' when speaking generally about types of music; use plural after 'prefer' to indicate preference for that category.

× When I used to be in my teenage, I used to prefer sad song because at the time I had a lot of heartbreak.

✓ When I was a teenager, I used to prefer sad songs because at the time I had a lot of heartbreak.

Phrase 'used to be in my teenage' is ungrammatical. Use 'was a teenager' to indicate past state. Also corrected 'used to' redundancy: one 'used to' is enough to show past habit.

× But now the things have changed.

✓ But now things have changed.

Article 'the' is unnecessary before general plural 'things'. Removing it produces natural present perfect usage to describe a change from past to present.

× It totally depends upon my mood.

✓ It totally depends on my mood.

'Depends' is correct third person singular, but the preposition 'upon' is formal; 'depends on' is more natural. No change to verb form needed.

× If the music have a sync with my energy, then I feel much more synced with the music.

✓ If the music has a sync with my energy, then I feel much more in sync with it.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'music' (singular) to take 'has' not 'have'. 'In sync' is the correct idiom and replace repeating 'the music' with 'it' to avoid redundancy.

× No, I haven't taken any musical classes, but I learned to play guitar on my own.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I learned to play the guitar on my own.

Use 'music classes' rather than 'musical classes' for lessons in music. When referring to the instrument generally, use the definite article 'the guitar' in English.

× When I was at school, uh, one junior boy give me the motivation to play the guitar and after that I learn to play guitar on my own.

✓ When I was at school, a junior boy gave me the motivation to play the guitar, and after that I learned to play the guitar on my own.

Mix of tenses and wrong verb forms: use past tense 'gave' and 'learned' to match 'When I was at school'. Also use 'a junior boy' instead of 'one junior boy' for naturalness, and add 'the' before 'guitar'.

× Do you listen to music while doing other things?

✓ Do you listen to music while doing other things?

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. It uses uncountable 'music' correctly.

× When I was in my teenage, I used to listen to songs every time.

✓ When I was a teenager, I used to listen to songs all the time.

'In my teenage' is incorrect; use 'a teenager'. 'Every time' is not the natural collocation for habitual frequency; use 'all the time'.

× Even when I was doing my homeworks.

✓ Even when I was doing my homework.

'Homework' is an uncountable noun in English and should not be pluralized. Use 'homework' without 's'.

× I vividly remember doing a math homework, listening to the music.

✓ I vividly remember doing math homework while listening to music.

Do not use article 'a' with uncountable 'homework'. Use 'math homework' without 'a'. Combine clauses with 'while' for correct simultaneous action and remove unnecessary 'the' before 'music'.