Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Expand slightly with a specific example and a linking word to make it more natural. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I usually choose music based on my mood. For example, when I feel upbeat I listen to lively pop songs to celebrate, but when I'm feeling down I prefer mellow acoustic tracks to relax and reflect.

提案: Correct the small grammar mistake and add a brief supporting detail explaining how it affects you, using a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes, it does. Happy music makes me feel energized and more cheerful because the fast rhythm and positive lyrics lift my mood and motivate me to move.

提案: Start with a concise direct answer and avoid awkward phrasing. Use one linking phrase to add a specific example of how you engage with music instead of saying you 'motivate my myself.'

例: No, I haven't taken music classes. Instead, I listen to energetic tracks at the gym to stay motivated, such as fast electronic or pop playlists that help me keep a steady pace.

提案: Give a short topic sentence and one specific example of activities and music types. Avoid repeating similar words (e.g., 'motivated' twice) and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I often listen to upbeat music while exercising or cleaning. For instance, I play fast-paced workout playlists with strong beats because they boost my energy and help me keep focus.

× It depends on my mood. If I'm happy I usually go for happy music, but if I'm sad I might go for sad music.

✓ It depends on my mood. If I'm happy, I usually choose happy music, but if I'm sad, I might choose sad music.

Use of present simple requires correct verb choice and commas after conditional clause. 'Go for' is informal but acceptable; replacing with 'choose' matches register. Add commas after 'If I'm happy' and 'if I'm sad' to separate clauses.

× Yes, because it makes me more energized and cheerful when I listening to happy music.

✓ Yes, because it makes me feel more energized and cheerful when I listen to happy music.

The verb after 'when' should be in base form for present simple ('listen'), not present participle ('listening'). Also include 'feel' to complete 'makes me feel energized'.

× No, I haven't taken any music classes. I'm not very interested in learning music, although I do listen to energetic music when I go to the gym to motivate my myself.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes. I'm not very interested in learning music, although I do listen to energetic music when I go to the gym to motivate myself.

Remove the redundant possessive 'my' before 'myself'. 'My myself' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' alone is correct. Tenses are appropriate (present perfect and present simple).

× Yes, I often listen to upbeat music because it helps me stay motivated and I usually choose motivation workout music to boost my energy.

✓ Yes, I often listen to upbeat music because it helps me stay motivated, and I usually choose motivational workout music to boost my energy.

Use the adjective 'motivational' (not the noun 'motivation') to modify 'workout music'. Also add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. 'Upbeat' is correct.