Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap kısa ve net; ancak dilbilgisi hataları, tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeler (uh) mevcut. Bağlaçlar ve daha düzgün cümle yapıları ile akıcılık artırılabilir. Örneğin konu cümlesinden sonra bir neden ve bir örnek ekleyin; kelime tekrarını azaltın ve 'them' yerine tekil/çoğul uyumuna dikkat edin.

例: I prefer happy music because it is energetic and lifts my mood. For example, upbeat pop songs help me relax after a long day and make me feel more motivated to finish tasks.

提案: Cevap olumlu ama tekrar ve dolgu kelimeleri fazla; ayrıca gramer uyumsuzlukları var (make -> makes). Bir neden veriyorsunuz ki bu iyi; ancak aynı fikri tekrar etmeyin. Bağlaçlarla cümleleri daha akıcı bağlayın.

例: Yes, it definitely makes me feel more excited because upbeat songs increase my energy. For instance, when I listen to lively tracks while walking, I feel more alert and cheerful.

提案: Cevap net ancak birçok dilbilgisi hatası ve anlamsal hatalar (take it / take him) var. Geçmiş nedeninizi daha düzgün ve kısa açıklayın; gelecek planınızı açıkça belirtin. Gereksiz dolgu kelimeleri çıkarın ve fiil kullanımına dikkat edin.

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would like to in the future. I moved frequently as a child, so I never had the chance to join a class, but now I plan to enroll in a beginner's guitar course next year.

提案: Cevap amaca uygun ama düzensiz ve tekrarlarla dolu. 'Especially' iki kez kullanılmış; anlamsal bozukluklar ve kelime dizimi hataları var. Hangi etkinliklerde dinlediğinizi ve nedenini bir veya iki net cümlede verin; daha uygun sıfatları kullanın.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores, especially when I clean the house. I choose energetic songs because they boost my mood and give me more energy to finish tasks.

× Usually I listen happy music because, uh, listening very energetic music.

✓ Usually I listen to happy music because I listen to very energetic music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating what is being listened to; this is a preposition + verb structure and the gerund 'listening' was used incorrectly. Use 'listen to' and parallel simple present verbs. Suggestion: use 'listen to' before the noun and keep consistent simple present verbs.'

× Happy music makes me feel much more relaxed and comfortable and I feel so energetic when I listen to them.

✓ Happy music makes me feel much more relaxed and comfortable, and I feel so energetic when I listen to it.

The noun 'music' is uncountable and requires the singular pronoun 'it', not 'them'. Use 'it' to refer back to 'music'. Suggestion: use singular pronoun for uncountable nouns.'

× Yes, of course, happy music make me feel more uplifted, more excited, uh, because when I listen very happy music, uh, while working or walking outside, I feel more excited.

✓ Yes, of course, happy music makes me feel more uplifted and more excited, because when I listen to very happy music while working or walking outside, I feel more excited.

Subject 'happy music' is third person singular (uncountable), so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Also 'listen' requires 'to' and adverbs like 'very' should modify appropriate adjectives ('very happy music'). Suggestion: use 'makes' and 'listen to'.'

× Unfortunately, no, I haven't taken any music classes but I would love to take it.

✓ Unfortunately, no, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would love to take one.

'Classes' is plural, so the pronoun referring to it should be 'one' or 'them' depending on meaning; 'take it' is incorrect. Use 'take one' to mean a single class. Suggestion: match pronoun/quantifier to noun number.'

× When I was a child, uh, I just moved to any other city all the time, so I didn't have enough time to take the class, but in the near future I would like to consider to take him.

✓ When I was a child, I moved to different cities all the time, so I didn't have enough time to take classes, but in the near future I would like to consider taking them.

Problems: 'moved to any other city' is unnatural; use 'moved to different cities'. 'Take the class' should be 'take classes' to match earlier 'any music classes'. 'Consider to take' is incorrect; 'consider' is followed by -ing form ('consider taking'). Also 'take him' incorrectly uses pronoun 'him' instead of 'them' or 'them' for classes. Suggestion: use 'different cities', plural 'classes', 'consider taking them'.'},{