Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid filler words and pronoun errors. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and keep answer within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer happy music. I usually listen to upbeat songs when I work because they help me stay focused and improve my mood.

提案: Give a clear, concise answer and support it with a specific example or condition. Reduce hesitation and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words such as "sometimes" and follow with a reason introduced by "because" or "when." Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct verb forms.

例: Sometimes it does. Happy music excites me when the tempo is fast or the lyrics are positive, because the rhythm energizes me and improves my concentration.

提案: Answer directly and politely, then briefly explain with correct tense and vocabulary. Avoid overly personal or inappropriate details; use correct past tense and connecting words like "because" or "so." Keep it brief and natural.

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes. When I was a child my family couldn't afford lessons, so I learned to enjoy music by listening to the radio and singing at home.

提案: Produce a fluent, grammatically correct response with a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Correct pronouns and verb forms ("while I do my homework"). Use linking words like "when" or "while" to connect ideas and give specific examples of activities.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I listen to playlists when I do my homework or clean my room because it makes chores more enjoyable and helps me concentrate.

× Yes, I prefer a happy music because he if I work a lot, I just listen to happy music.

✓ Yes, I prefer happy music because if I work a lot, I just listen to happy music.

The noun 'music' is uncountable and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' before 'happy music'. Also 'he' is extraneous and likely a filler or mistake; remove it. Reorder 'he if' to 'if' to form a correct conditional clause.

× Sometimes yes, sometimes not. Uh, sometimes I uh, listen to uh, happy music. It's make uh, me great, uh, uh, be great, uh, and uh, other, uh, fields.

✓ Sometimes yes, sometimes not. Uh, sometimes I listen to happy music. It makes me feel great and helps in other areas.

The contraction 'It's' with verb 'make' is incorrect: subject 'It' requires third-person singular verb 'makes'. Also phrase 'be great' and 'other fields' are unclear; change to 'feel great' and 'helps in other areas' to convey meaning. Remove disfluencies ('uh').

× No, I haven't because when I was a child my parents are very poor.

✓ No, I haven't because when I was a child my parents were very poor.

The clause refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so the verb describing parents' condition should be in the past tense 'were' not present 'are'. Maintain consistent past tense in the subordinate clause.

× Uh, I sometimes, uh, listen to music, uh, while I doing her homework and I, uh, clean, I clean my room, I clean my house.

✓ I sometimes listen to music while I do my homework, and I clean my room and my house.

After 'while' use the base form with appropriate subject: 'while I do', not 'while I doing'. Also 'her homework' is incorrect pronoun; use 'my homework' to match speaker. Remove fillers and combine repetition for clarity.

× Uh, if I work a lot, I just, uh, listen to music.

✓ If I work a lot, I just listen to music.

This sentence only had filler words 'uh' and an unnecessary comma. Remove fillers and the extra comma to improve fluency. No article is needed before 'music' because it is uncountable.