Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите повторы и исправьте грамматические ошибки; начните с чёткой тематической фразы, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных поддерживающих деталей с связками. Избегайте обобщений и слов типа «immature» без пояснения. Также используйте правильную форму слов и предлогов (например, "popular with children", "I can lose myself in it").

例: I prefer sad music because it helps me reflect. For example, slow ballads let me think about my future and recall important memories, which I find comforting rather than cheerful pop songs.

提案: Упростите ответы и свяжите идеи логически; используйте правильные времена и структуры (например, "I don't get excited when I listen to music"). Начните с короткого прямого ответа, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных примера с связующими словами (e.g., "for example", "when").

例: Not really. I usually choose calm background music when I study, so it doesn't make me excited. For example, at the gym I prefer upbeat tracks for energy, but otherwise music mainly helps me concentrate.

提案: Используйте правильные формы и более формальную лексику: скажите прямо "I have never taken music classes". Дайте одну конкретную причину и, при необходимости, пример того, чем вы занимаетесь вместо уроков музыки. Избегайте разговорных фраз без объяснения (например, "not my cup of tea").

例: I have never taken any music classes because I'm not musically trained and I prefer to focus on academics. For instance, I spend my free time on extra tutoring and practical projects related to my school subjects.

提案: Исправьте грамматику и сделайте структуру чёткой: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте конкретные примеры. Избегайте неясных выражений (например, "good corners"). Используйте связки ("however", "nowadays", "for example") для логики.

例: Not while studying. When I was younger I used to listen to music while doing homework, but now I need full concentration. However, I do listen to music when doing household chores or exercising at the gym.

× I prefer sad music because in my opinion happy music is immature and with music style is popular among children.

✓ I prefer sad music because, in my opinion, happy music is immature and this music style is popular among children.

The phrase 'with music style' uses an incorrect preposition and structure. Use 'this music style' or 'the music style' to refer to the preceding noun. Also add commas around 'in my opinion' for clarity and use 'this' to link the idea. Suggestion: use demonstrative determiners (this/the) instead of incorrect prepositional phrase.

× I consider is too simple.

✓ I consider it too simple.

The sentence is missing the object pronoun 'it' after 'consider'. The verb 'consider' requires an object. Suggestion: include the pronoun or noun phrase being considered (e.g., 'I consider that music too simple' or 'I consider it too simple').

× So I prefer sad music because I can lose myself in this music and I can think about my future life or recall our memories.

✓ So I prefer sad music because I can lose myself in this music and I can think about my future or recall my memories.

The phrase 'future life' and 'our memories' are awkward and inconsistent with the speaker's perspective. 'Future' without 'life' is more natural, and 'my memories' matches the singular perspective. Also 'recall' is fine as base verb; no -ing needed. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and consistent pronouns.

× I don't think so, I usually turn on the music from my background, so when I do my homework and I turn on calm music.

✓ I don't think so. I usually play background music, so when I do my homework I turn on calm music.

The original has awkward phrasing 'turn on the music from my background'. Use 'play background music' or 'have background music on'. Also punctuation: split into sentences. Modal usage itself is fine but sentence structure and collocation need correction. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'play background music' and remove extra 'and'.

× When I go to the gym, I put on my headphones to listen to music.

✓ When I go to the gym, I put on my headphones to listen to music.

This sentence is grammatical. No correction needed. Explanation: correct use of present simple for habitual actions and correct structure.

× I in general express many emotions but I definitely don't excited when I listen to music.

✓ In general I express many emotions, but I definitely don't get excited when I listen to music.

'Don't excited' is ungrammatical because 'excited' is an adjective; the verb 'get' or 'become' is needed to form the state. Also move 'in general' to the start for natural word order. Suggestion: use 'get excited' or 'become excited'.

× I never taking any music classes because I'm not an artist person.

✓ I never took any music classes because I'm not an artistic person.

'I never taking' is incorrect; use past simple 'I never took' or present perfect 'I've never taken'. Also 'artist person' is wrong collocation; use 'artistic person'. Suggestion: choose correct tense and adjective form.

× It's not my cup of tea.

✓ It's not my cup of tea.

This idiom is correct in present tense and needs no change. Explanation: idiomatic expression correctly used.

× Nowadays I'm in high school and I prefer to concentrate on my education.

✓ Nowadays I'm in high school and I prefer to concentrate on my studies.

'Concentrate on my education' is understandable but 'concentrate on my studies' is more natural collocation. Tense and structure are correct. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations.

× For this reason, I choose to do a practical and beneficial work.

✓ For this reason, I choose to do practical and beneficial work.

The article 'a' before 'work' is unnecessary when 'work' is uncountable in this sense. Remove 'a'. Suggestion: use uncountable noun without article or use a countable noun like 'a practical and beneficial job'.

× Not now. When I was young I listen to music when I completed my homework, but now I understand what I just good corners because real work demands full concentration.

✓ Not now. When I was young I listened to music when I completed my homework, but now I understand that I learn better because real work demands full concentration.

Multiple issues: 'I listen' should be past 'I listened' to match 'When I was young'. 'I completed' is okay but better 'I finished' or 'had finished'. The phrase 'I understand what I just good corners' is unclear; likely intended 'I learn better' or 'I do better'. Replace with clear phrase. Suggestion: keep past tense consistency and use clear collocations.

× Currently I listen to music when I do household chores or go to the gym.

✓ Currently I listen to music when I do household chores or when I go to the gym.

The sentence is mostly correct; adding 'when' before 'I go to the gym' improves parallelism. Tense and usage are appropriate. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure with repeated conjunction.