Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g. verb forms, articles) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use relevant vocabulary (e.g. "cheerful", "uplifting") to sound natural.

例: I usually prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, when I am with friends I listen to upbeat, cheerful songs that make me feel energetic and relaxed.

提案: Answer directly (Yes/No) and then explain briefly with a specific reason and one example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and correct verb agreement ("it makes me feel"). Keep sentences short and clear.

例: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms increase my energy. For example, when I hear lively pop songs with my friends, I feel more enthusiastic and want to dance.

提案: Give a concise direct answer and a clear reason. Use correct grammar: "I'm not interested" or "I haven't taken any classes because..." Provide one specific detail about your interests to support the answer. Avoid filler words like "uh" and repetitive phrases.

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes because my studies focus on English and other subjects. I enjoy singing casually, but I haven't pursued formal lessons.

提案: Start with a clear yes/no, then give one or two specific activities and explain why using correct verb forms and linking words (e.g. "while", "because"). Be specific about the benefits (e.g. helps concentration, relaxes me) and avoid unfinished sentences.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while studying or doing chores because it helps me concentrate and makes the work more enjoyable. For instance, I play soft instrumental music when I read to stay focused.

× Well that's an interesting question. It depends on my mood. When I feel stressed or bad, I listen.

✓ Well that's an interesting question. It depends on my mood. When I feel stressed or bad, I listen to music.

Missing particle 'to' after 'listen' is a present tense verb usage requiring the infinitive 'listen to' when referring to hearing music. Suggestion: use 'listen to' with objects (listen to music/songs).

× I prefer listen start, but I hang out with my friends and my mood is very well.

✓ I prefer to listen at first, but when I hang out with my friends my mood is very good.

Errors: 'prefer' should be followed by 'to' + verb or gerund; 'listen start' is unclear and likely 'listen at first' or 'listen first'; 'when' is needed to link clauses; 'very well' describes health/ability, but 'very good' describes mood. Suggestion: use 'prefer to + verb' or 'prefer + gerund' and choose correct adjective for mood ('good').

× I listen happy music.

✓ I listen to happy music.

Missing 'to' after 'listen' again. Use 'listen to' with a noun object. Also word order is fine otherwise: 'happy music'. Suggestion: always say 'listen to music/songs'.

× As I mentioned this on my depends on my mood when I feel happy, especially hang out with my friends, I feel I listen happy music and it make more feel happy.

✓ As I mentioned, it depends on my mood. When I feel happy, especially when I hang out with my friends, I listen to happy music and it makes me feel even happier.

Multiple problems: sentence fragments and run-on structure. Missing 'to' after 'listen'; missing 'when' before 'hang out'; subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes'; awkward phrase 'make more feel happy' should be 'make me feel even happier'. Suggestion: split into clearer sentences, add 'to' after 'listen', use 'makes' with singular subject, and include object 'me'.

× No, that's an interesting question. Uh, unfortunately, no, uh, because I don't interested in, uh, my field is another.

✓ No, that's an interesting question. Unfortunately, no, because I'm not interested; my field is different.

Incorrect verb form: 'I don't interested in' should be 'I'm not interested in' or 'I do not interest in' is wrong. Use 'be' + adjective 'interested' to express interest. Also 'my field is another' is unnatural; use 'different' or 'another field'. Suggestion: use 'I'm not interested in' or 'I am not interested in that; my field is different.'

× I interested in English and the other subject.

✓ I'm interested in English and other subjects.

Missing auxiliary 'am' and incorrect article 'the' before 'other subject'. Use plural 'subjects' if more than one, or 'another subject' for one. Suggestion: say 'I'm interested in English and other subjects' or 'I'm interested in English and another subject.'

× Uh, I like, I like sing song mute. I like sing music, but I don't, I don't interested it.

✓ I like singing songs. I enjoy music, but I'm not interested in pursuing it professionally.

Problems: 'sing song mute' and 'sing music' are ungrammatical. Use gerund 'singing' or 'sing songs'; 'I'm not interested in it' requires 'be' verb and preposition 'in'. Suggestion: use 'I like singing' or 'I like songs/music' and 'I'm not interested in it' or specify 'I'm not interested in studying it.'

× That's an interesting question. Yes, most of the time I listen music while doing something, especially while I reading book or some some tasks or work I will send I will send music this convenient, comfortable and.

✓ That's an interesting question. Yes, most of the time I listen to music while doing other things, especially while I am reading a book or doing tasks or work. I find listening to music convenient and comfortable.

Multiple issues: missing 'to' after 'listen'; 'while I reading' needs progressive form 'I am reading'; 'reading book' needs an article 'a book'; repetitive 'some some'; 'I will send' is incorrect and unclear; adjectives 'convenient, comfortable' need proper sentence with verb 'find'. Suggestion: use 'listen to music', use present continuous for ongoing actions ('I am reading'), include articles, and express opinions with 'I find ...'.