Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "so", "when", "because") to make the response coherent and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I don’t have a fixed preference for sad or happy music; it depends on my mood. When I feel sad, I prefer soft, slow songs to relax me, but when I’m happy I listen to upbeat, cheerful tracks to match my mood.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid long repetitions and filler words. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and be specific about how music affects you.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the upbeat tempo lifts my energy and improves my mood. For example, when I listen to an energetic pop song I feel motivated to exercise or start my day more positively.

提案: Start with a clear concise answer, then add brief specific supporting details about your informal music experience. Avoid unclear words and maintain sentence flow with linking phrases such as "but", "so", or "for example." Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I haven’t taken formal music classes, but I have sung since childhood and practiced at my church. I often record my voice to track my progress and I sing alone as a hobby to improve my technique.

提案: Answer directly and give specific examples of activities when you listen to music, using linking words like "for example" and "also." Reduce fillers and repetitive phrases; keep the response to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: Yes, I listen to music while doing many activities. For example, I play soft music to help me fall asleep, and I usually start and end my day with upbeat songs to boost my mood and focus during work.

× Can I say that uh umm, when I'm happy? I'm more listening to happy music.

✓ Can I say that, uh, when I'm happy, I listen to happy music more?

The original uses 'I'm more listening' which incorrectly combines the progressive 'I'm listening' with 'more'. Use the simple present 'I listen' for habitual actions and place 'more' after the verb or before the object for clarity. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual preferences.'

× Yes uh, music does really make me excited and more feeling happy and comfort umm, every time even when I'm feeling sad or feeling down, feeling depression or happy, I like to listen to music umm I'm really.

✓ Yes, music really makes me excited and happier and more comfortable; I like to listen to music whenever I'm feeling sad, down, depressed, or happy.

Errors include wrong form 'does really make' (awkward adverb placement), 'more feeling happy and comfort' (incorrect adjective/adverb forms), and repetition/word order issues. Use 'really makes me' with adjectives in correct comparative forms ('happier', 'more comfortable') and simplify the list of feelings. Place adverb 'really' before the verb phrase.'

× I think other than than other people.

✓ I think more than other people.

The phrase 'other than than other people' is redundant and incorrect. Use 'more than other people' to express degree. 'Other than' would require a following clause (e.g., 'other than other people, I...'), so 'more than' fits this comparison.'

× No, I haven't taken any music class uh, but since I was very young, uh, I was really into music and it was one of my biggest hobby and I'm a crit.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes, but since I was very young I have been really into music; it was one of my biggest hobbies and I'm a critic.

'Any music class' should be plural 'any music classes' or 'a music class'. 'One of my biggest hobby' needs plural 'hobbies'. 'I'm a crit' appears to be a truncated word—likely 'critic'. Also tense: 'since I was very young' with continuing state uses present perfect ('have been'). Use articles and plural forms correctly.'

× I'm also, I'm a Croatian, so umm, I sometime sing and uh, learn how to sing at the church.

✓ I'm also Croatian, so sometimes I sing and learn how to sing at church.

'I'm a Croatian' is acceptable but 'I'm also Croatian' is more natural. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb). 'at the church' is usually 'at church' when speaking generally. Adjust pronoun/word forms and adverb for correctness.'

× Uh, yes. And uh, I always. Music when I'm alone and uh, uh, I love to sing a lot and I love to record my voice and listen it after that.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music when I'm alone. I love to sing a lot, and I love to record my voice and listen to it afterward.

Original has sentence fragments ('I always. Music') and missing verb 'listen'. 'Listen it' is incorrect; use 'listen to it'. 'After that' is better as 'afterward' or 'afterwards'. Fix sentence fragments and preposition use.'

× Umm, I like to listen music even when I'm sleeping.

✓ I like to listen to music even when I'm sleeping.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object. Omit 'to' leads to ungrammatical phrase. Use 'listen to music'.'

× Umm, uh, I have some nights that I can fall asleep, so I just listen to soft music to make me fall asleep.

✓ There are some nights when I cannot fall asleep, so I just listen to soft music to help me fall asleep.

'I have some nights that I can fall asleep' is confusing; the intended meaning is difficulty sleeping. Use 'there are some nights when I cannot fall asleep'. Also 'make me fall asleep' is better as 'help me fall asleep'. Ensure clarity and correct clause connectors.'

× And when I wake, wake up, umm, I listen to music to cheer me up for the day.

✓ And when I wake up, I listen to music to cheer myself up for the day.

Use correct verb form 'wake up' (not repeated) and reflexive pronoun 'myself' with 'cheer up' (phrasal verb requires object). 'Cheer me up' is acceptable in spoken form but 'cheer myself up' is more grammatical here. Remove duplication.'

× Of uh, to work like umm umm, I start my day with music and end my day with music.

✓ For work or to get ready, I start my day with music and end my day with music.

'Of uh, to work like' is ungrammatical. Use a clear conjunction/phrase such as 'for work' or 'to get ready' to indicate purpose. Keep parallel structure 'start my day... and end my day...'.'