Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with coherent linking words. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences and use correct grammar (e.g., tense, articles, word order). Replace vague phrases ("that song", "April") with clearer expressions like "sad music" and "it".

例: I prefer sad music because it helps me relax. For example, the slow melodies and gentle lyrics calm me down after a stressful day.

提案: Answer directly (Yes/No) then explain briefly with a clear reason. Avoid irrelevant or confusing details and use correct forms (e.g., "I am heartbroken" → explain briefly). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "so" correctly.

例: No, happy music does not make me more excited because I usually prefer sad songs when I'm feeling emotional. I find sad songs more comforting and better at expressing my mood.

提案: Start with a clear short answer (Yes/No) then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar (e.g., "I've never taken" or "I never took"). Mention time or context if helpful. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect sentences.

例: No, I have never taken any music classes because I am not confident about my singing. Also, my school did not offer music lessons when I was a student.

提案: Give a clear yes/no answer first, then explain the situation with concrete details about what you do instead. Use concise sentences and correct phrasing (e.g., "I don't usually listen to music while working because I need to concentrate on studying or tasks").

例: No, I usually don't listen to music while doing other things because I need to concentrate on studying or working. When I have tasks that require focus, silence helps me be more productive.

× I prefer to listen that song because it made me feel relaxed April but it would be possible but it is really made me relax able when I listen sad song.

✓ I prefer listening to that song because it makes me feel relaxed, April; it really makes me feel relaxed when I listen to sad songs.

Use the gerund 'listening to' after 'prefer'. Include the preposition 'to' after 'listen' when specifying an object. Use present tense 'makes' to express habitual feeling rather than past 'made'. Combine clauses clearly and use 'songs' plural for general statements. Remove unclear phrase 'it would be possible' and correct 'relax able' to 'relaxed'. Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× I would say not because I very like to listen that so because I am Bo broken ha hearts all the time.

✓ I would say no because I really like listening to sad songs; I have a broken heart all the time.

Use 'no' instead of 'not' to answer the question. Use 'really like' and the gerund 'listening to' for preference. Replace unclear words 'Bo broken ha hearts' with 'a broken heart' and use present simple 'have' to describe a current state.

× That's why I really like to listen a sad song and I'm not exciting anymore when I listen happy song.

✓ That's why I really like listening to sad songs, and I'm no longer excited when I listen to happy songs.

Use the gerund 'listening to' and plural 'songs' for general statements. 'Exciting' is an adjective meaning causing excitement; use 'excited' to describe a feeling. Use 'no longer' for 'not ... anymore'. Include the preposition 'to' after 'listen'.

× No I never taken any music classes because I'm really bad of singing and also in in my school we don't have a music class that's why I never taken before.

✓ No, I have never taken any music classes because I'm really bad at singing, and at my school we don't have a music class, so I have never taken one before.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' for life experiences. Use 'bad at' not 'bad of'. Fix repeated word 'in in'. Clarify 'we don't have a music class' and use 'one' to refer back to 'class'. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses.

× Umm, actually I'm not listening. Why doing other things? Because I am only focused on other two other things. So that's why I do not listen to music.

✓ Umm, actually I don't listen to music while doing other things because I only focus on two other things, so I don't listen to music.

Use present simple 'don't listen' to describe habitual behavior. 'Why doing other things?' is ungrammatical; rephrase as 'while doing other things'. Avoid repeating 'other'. Use 'focus on' not 'focused on other two other things' and keep consistent tense. Maintain concise structure for clarity.