Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good short direct answer. Improve by giving one clear reason and a linked supporting detail. Use a topic sentence, then add a specific example with a linking word (for example/so/because). Keep it under 5 sentences.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, upbeat pop songs help me feel energetic and motivated when I need to study or go out with friends.

提案: Answer is positive but language and coherence need work. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (because/for example) and correct verb forms. Be specific about when and how it helps. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the rhythm and melody boost my energy. For example, after finishing my college studies I usually play upbeat songs to celebrate and relax.

提案: Content is relevant but grammar and structure are weak. Use a clear negative response, then explain with a specific reason and an example. Use correct tense and singular/plural forms, and linking words like because or so.

例: No, I haven't taken music classes because I study accounting. However, I often spend my free time listening to music to relax; for example, I play playlists that make me feel cheerful after finishing assignments.

提案: Good idea but needs clearer phrasing and fluency. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific situation and use linking words (for example/so/therefore). Correct verb patterns (listen to music, while exercising). Keep it concise.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while exercising because it helps me keep a good pace. For example, I play fast songs during my runs to stay motivated and improve my stamina.

× When I listen to happy music, it's made me feel better.

✓ When I listen to happy music, it makes me feel better.

The student used 'it's made' (present perfect) incorrectly with a general habit. For habitual actions use the simple present 'it makes'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and general truths (e.g., 'it makes me feel better').

× And yeah, I'm so happy when I listen it, especially when I'm finish my study at college and I have a lot of free time.

✓ And yeah, I'm so happy when I listen to it, especially when I finish my studies at college and I have a lot of free time.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listen'. 'Finish' should be simple present 'finish' for habitual action, and 'study' should be plural 'studies' or 'my study' as an activity; use 'finish my studies' for completing coursework. Suggestion: remember 'listen to' and use simple present for routines; use plural 'studies' for academic courses.

× I always.

✓ I always do.

Fragment 'I always.' is incomplete; it lacks a verb or object. Add a verb to complete the sentence (e.g., 'I always do.' or better specify the action: 'I always listen to happy music.'). Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× No I'm not, I'm just study accounting and I always spend a free time with musics because it's make me happy and excited after my finished work.

✓ No, I'm not. I'm just studying accounting and I always spend my free time with music because it makes me happy and excited after I finish work.

'No I'm not' is unclear; better as 'No, I'm not' to separate ideas. 'I'm just study' should be present continuous 'I'm just studying' for ongoing action. 'a free time' should be 'my free time' and 'musics' is uncountable 'music'. 'it's make' should be 'it makes' (simple present third-person singular). 'after my finished work' is wrong order and tense; use 'after I finish work' or 'after finishing work'. Suggestion: use present continuous for current studies, 'my free time', uncountable 'music', and correct subject-verb agreement.

× Actually when I'm doing my exercise and I have, I want to relate my mood with the music.

✓ Actually when I'm exercising and I want to match my mood to the music,

Use 'exercising' (verb + -ing) for ongoing action. 'Relate my mood with the music' is unnatural; use 'match my mood to the music' or 'relate my mood to the music'. Remove extraneous 'and I have,'. Suggestion: use '-ing' form for activities and correct preposition 'to' after 'match/relate'.

× I always listen music in the same time and do my exercise too, so.

✓ I always listen to music at the same time and do my exercise too.

'Listen music' needs preposition 'to' ('listen to music'). 'the same time' should be 'at the same time'. 'do my exercise' is acceptable but 'exercise' can be uncountable; 'do my exercises' if plural. The trailing 'so' makes the sentence incomplete; remove it. Suggestion: remember 'listen to', use 'at the same time', and complete the sentence without dangling conjunctions.