Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct word choices, reduce repetition, and use one or two supporting details with linking words. Keep answers under five sentences. For example, say you prefer music according to mood, give a brief reason and an example, and avoid fragmented phrases like “sit down” or “set some.”

例: I prefer music that matches my mood. For instance, I often choose sad songs when I want to reflect and happy songs when I need energy. Sometimes I’ll start with a slower track and then switch to something upbeat to lift my spirits.

提案: Make the answer more coherent and accurate: use clear linking words, correct vocabulary (e.g. “upbeat tempo” instead of “arbitrary them”), and give a concrete reason or example. Avoid absolute statements like “impossible” and keep it concise.

例: Yes, upbeat music usually makes me feel more energetic because of the fast tempo and positive lyrics. For example, I often play energetic pop songs before exercising to boost my motivation.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give a brief, specific reason for your feelings. Use past tense consistently and avoid fillers like “you know.” Be concise and include one supporting detail about what you learned or how you felt.

例: Yes, I took several music classes as a child. However, I didn’t enjoy singing lessons because I thought my voice was weak and classmates often teased me, so I focused more on learning the piano instead.

提案: Be natural and specific: use correct nouns (laundry, commute), verb forms, and linking words. Give one or two clear examples of activities and explain briefly how music helps. Keep it within four sentences.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing household chores or commuting. For instance, I put on headphones during laundry and on the bus because music helps the time pass faster and improves my mood.

× Well, I think it really depends on my mood.

✓ Well, I think it really depends on my mood.

No change needed; sentence uses present simple correctly to express general truth about habitual preference.

× If I feel sad or a little bit frustrated, I would prefer some sit down to express my feelings instead.

✓ If I feel sad or a little bit frustrated, I prefer to sit down to express my feelings.

The original mixes conditional/modal 'would' with a general present conditional. Use present simple 'prefer' in the result clause for a real conditional. Also 'some sit down' is ungrammatical; use the infinitive 'to sit down'. Suggestion: for real, habitual responses use 'If... , I prefer...'.

× When I feel a little bit motivation I prefer some happy music.

✓ When I feel a little bit of motivation, I prefer happy music.

Need the preposition 'of' after 'a little bit' when followed by an uncountable noun 'motivation' and no article before 'happy music'. Also omit 'some' with noncount/general reference. Commas improve clarity.

× But sometimes I would go for a set some first the switch to a happy music to cheer me up.

✓ But sometimes I go for sad songs first and then switch to happy music to cheer myself up.

Original has multiple problems: incorrect words ('set some', 'the switch'), unnecessary articles ('a happy music') and pronoun use. Use present simple 'go' for habitual action. 'Sad songs' fits meaning. Use 'then' to show sequence and reflexive pronoun 'myself'.

× Yes, I think so, especially with some arbitrary them or meaningful lyrics.

✓ Yes, I think so, especially with an upbeat tempo or meaningful lyrics.

'Arbitrary them' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely meant 'upbeat tempo' or 'rhythm'. Use 'an' before a singular count noun 'upbeat tempo'. Keep 'meaningful lyrics' as correct.

× I think it's impossible for people to feel excited or cheerful while listening these certain types of music.

✓ I think it's impossible for some people to feel excited or cheerful while listening to certain types of music.

Needs preposition 'to' after 'listening'. 'These certain types' is redundant; use 'certain types' or 'these types'. Also 'people' can be qualified as 'some people' to match meaning. Word order corrected.

× And besides, before my studying or exercise, I would prefer some motivation.

✓ And besides, before studying or exercising, I prefer something motivating.

Use gerunds without 'my' for general activities: 'before studying or exercising'. 'Would prefer' implies conditional; present simple 'prefer' fits habitual routine. 'Some motivation' is awkward; 'something motivating' is clearer.

× When I was a kid I took a lot of music classes but I'm not sure if I really enjoy them because you know, I had a bad voice since I was a kid when every time I think about my classmates and my friends would always ask me to stop.

✓ When I was a kid, I took a lot of music classes, but I'm not sure if I really enjoyed them because I had a bad voice; whenever I think about it, my classmates and friends would always ask me to stop.

Tense consistency: narrating past events should use past tense 'enjoyed' not present 'enjoy'. 'Since I was a kid' conflicts with simple past 'had'—use simple past 'I had a bad voice'. Use 'whenever' instead of 'when every time' and correct clause order. 'My friends' without 'my' repetition is cleaner.

× Yes, absolutely. For example, if I'm doing some laundries or studying or even commute to another place, I would always prefer to wear my headphone and listen some music because I think that's a good way to pass the time and make made the journey more enjoyable.

✓ Yes, absolutely. For example, if I'm doing laundry, studying, or even commuting to another place, I always prefer to wear my headphones and listen to music because I think that's a good way to pass the time and make the journey more enjoyable.

Use uncountable 'laundry' not 'laundries'. Use gerund 'commuting' after 'even'. 'Would always prefer' is changed to present simple 'always prefer' for habitual actions. Use plural 'headphones' and the preposition 'to' after 'listen'. Remove incorrect 'make made' and keep present meaning 'make the journey more enjoyable'.