Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and use a linking word for coherence. Also correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “gives me more energy” not “give me”).

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and gives me energy for a long working day. For example, upbeat pop songs help me stay motivated during morning commutes.

提案: Organize your answer: give a direct yes/no then one or two clear reasons with correct grammar and fewer hesitations. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid repetition and incorrect noun phrases (e.g., “motivational songs” instead of “motivation song”).

例: Yes, it does, because happy music energizes me and lifts my spirits. For example, motivational songs help me stay focused and positive during a long day at work.

提案: Keep the response direct and correct conditional forms. Use one clear reason and finish the sentence (avoid trailing phrases like “and more”). Use linking phrase “however” or “but” appropriately and correct infinitive form (“consider taking” not “consider to take”).

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would consider taking one if I had spare time because learning music would make my life more creative and enjoyable.

提案: Answer directly, remove hesitations, and use correct verb agreement (e.g., “helps me focus”). Specify the type of music and when you listen to it. Use a linking word like “for example” to give a concrete instance.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while working or studying because it helps me focus. For example, I usually play classical music when I'm studying because its calm tempo reduces distractions.

× I prefer happy music because it helps me to improve my mood and give me more energy for a long working day.

✓ I prefer happy music because it helps me improve my mood and gives me more energy for a long working day.

The verbs after 'helps me to' should use the base form or gerund depending on structure; 'helps me improve' is natural (omit to). Also subject-verb agreement: 'it' (music) requires 'gives' not 'give'. Suggestion: use 'helps me improve' and 'gives' to match singular subject.

× Yes uh, as I said before, happy music make me feel more excited and generally I really like the song about the the motivation song and give me the motivation for a long day work and also the fun song.

✓ Yes, as I said before, happy music makes me feel more excited and generally I really like motivational songs that give me motivation for a long work day and also fun songs.

Subject-verb agreement: 'happy music' is singular so use 'makes' (Third person singular). Also multiple noun and article problems: 'the the' is duplicate; 'song about the the motivation song' is awkward—use 'motivational songs'. Use plural 'songs' to match general statement and 'give' becomes 'give' with plural subject 'songs'. Reorder to 'long work day' or 'long workday'.

× No I haven't, but I think if I have spare time in the future I will definitely consider to take a music class because I think music and art will make life more dynamic and more.

✓ No, I haven't, but I think if I have spare time in the future I will definitely consider taking a music class because I think music and art will make life more dynamic and interesting.

After 'consider' use the gerund ('consider taking'), not 'consider to take' (Verb + -ing form). Also 'more dynamic and more' is incomplete; add a noun/adjective like 'interesting'. Maintain future conditional correctly with 'will consider taking'.

× Yes, uh, actually somehow I find that listening to music help me focus on work and on learning better, and I always listen to some kind of classic music to, uh, when studying.

✓ Yes, actually I find that listening to music helps me focus on work and learn better, and I always listen to some kind of classical music when studying.

Subject-verb agreement: after 'listening to music' the verb 'help' should be 'helps' because 'listening' is the subject (singular gerund). Also parallel structure: 'focus on work and learn better' keeps verbs parallel. 'Classic music' should be 'classical music'. Remove unnecessary 'to' before 'when studying'.