Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Add one specific example and a linking word to explain why. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: I usually prefer happy music, but it depends on my mood. For example, when I have a busy day I listen to upbeat songs to stay energetic, while after a stressful day I choose slow, sad music to relax and reflect.

提案: Answer directly, avoid sweeping generalizations, and correct grammar. Use a linking word to connect your general statement to a personal example. Be specific about how it helps you (mood, focus, pace).

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic. For instance, when I'm driving I listen to upbeat songs because they improve my mood and help me stay focused on the road.

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct answer and avoid filler words. If you haven't taken classes, explain briefly why and show a plan or intention using correct verbs. Use one linking word to add the plan.

例: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I haven't had enough free time. However, I am planning to enroll next year, so I am trying to organize my schedule to make time for lessons.

提案: Give a fluent, concise reply: avoid fillers and use correct verb forms. Provide one specific activity and explain clearly how music helps, using a linking word for clarity.

例: Yes, I often listen to music while driving. It boosts my energy and helps me concentrate on the road, especially during long trips when I need to stay alert.

× I prefer to listen happy music to keep my energy up but if my day goes bad I listen to sad music to.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music to keep my energy up, but if my day goes bad I listen to sad music.

After verbs like 'prefer' when not followed by a specific alternative with 'to', the gerund form is commonly used: 'prefer listening to' or the pattern 'prefer X to Y'. Also include 'to' after 'listening' when indicating the object: 'listening to music'. Remove the unnecessary trailing 'to'. Use a comma before 'but' joining independent clauses.

× So do I when I'm driving, I really enjoy listening excited music because it helps me to concentrate on.

✓ So do I when I'm driving; I really enjoy listening to upbeat music because it helps me to concentrate.

The phrase 'listening excited music' is incorrect: the verb 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' plus a noun, and 'excited' is an adjective describing a person, not music. Use 'upbeat' or 'exciting' for music. Also remove the unnecessary 'to' after 'concentrate' (concentrate is intransitive or takes 'on' with an object; here no object needed). Use correct punctuation (semicolon or period) between independent clauses.

× I really enjoy listening excited music because it helps me to concentrate on.

✓ I really enjoy listening to exciting music because it helps me concentrate.

Use the adjective 'exciting' to describe music, and include the preposition 'to' after 'listening'. 'Concentrate' does not need 'on' if no object follows. The adverb 'really' is fine. This fixes adjective choice and preposition usage.

× No, I haven't taken any any music classes because I don't have enough time for that uh, However, I uh, try to umm uh, empathy my time to register in music classes.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes because I haven't had enough time for that. However, I try to manage my time to register for music classes.

Use present perfect 'haven't had' to match 'haven't taken' if referring to ongoing lack of time. Remove duplicate 'any'. 'Empathy' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'manage' or 'allocate'. Use 'register for' rather than 'register in'. Also split into two sentences and remove filler sounds for clarity.

× I definitely, uh, enjoy, uh, listen to music while I'm driving.

✓ I definitely enjoy listening to music while I'm driving.

After 'enjoy', use the -ing form 'listening', not the base verb 'listen'. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas for fluency.

× It helps me to boost my energy and, uh, concentrate, uh, my mind, uh, to the road.

✓ It helps boost my energy and keep my attention on the road.

'Concentrate my mind to the road' is unidiomatic. Use 'keep my attention on' or 'concentrate on the road'. Also 'help' + verb often omits 'to' in natural English: 'helps boost' rather than 'helps me to boost'. Simplify phrasing for clarity.