Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and better structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and avoid repetition.

例: It depends on my mood. Generally, I prefer happy music when I feel tired because upbeat songs boost my energy. For example, I often play cheerful pop while doing household chores like washing dishes or vacuuming. However, I sometimes choose sad music when I want to relax and reflect.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words and repetition. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and use linking words to connect reasons and examples. Be specific about how music affects you.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more energetic. When I feel tired, upbeat tracks boost my motivation and help me keep going. For instance, I listen to fast-tempo songs when I go for a run because they increase my pace and mood.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, then give a brief, specific explanation. Remove fillers like "uh" and fix phrasing. State frequency or context to make the response more informative.

例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes, but I enjoy playing the piano informally. For example, when I have free time or feel sad, I often play simple songs to relax and lift my spirits.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and then specific examples of activities. Correct grammar and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to organize the answer (e.g., "for example", "when").

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play upbeat music when I do chores like cleaning or washing dishes, and I listen to relaxing tunes when I go for a walk or unwind after work.

× It depends on my mood actually I prefer to when I feel tired I listen to happy music and also when I do my chairs and vacuuming like vacuuming do dishes I will listen to happy music and sometimes I prefer sad music.

✓ It depends on my mood. Actually, when I feel tired I prefer to listen to happy music, and also when I do my chores, like vacuuming or doing the dishes, I listen to happy music; sometimes I prefer sad music.

Multiple present tense and sentence structure issues: incorrect verb forms ('do my chairs' should be 'do my chores'; 'vacuuming do dishes' is incorrect order), missing connectors and punctuation. Use simple present for habitual actions (I prefer, I listen, I do). Improve clarity by splitting into sentences and using correct nouns and verb forms. Suggestion: Use 'chores' for household tasks and maintain consistent simple present verbs for routines.

× Absolutely yes, especially when I want to do more more something and I feel tired. It give me a lot of energy and I let me excited. Also when I walk outside and do more exercise and so on.

✓ Absolutely, yes, especially when I want to do more and I feel tired. It gives me a lot of energy and makes me excited. Also when I walk outside and do more exercise, and so on.

Subject-verb agreement error: singular subject 'It' requires 'gives' (third person singular). 'I let me excited' is incorrect: use 'makes me excited' to show cause and effect. Remove repeated word 'more more' and use commas for clarity. Maintain present simple for general truths/habits. Suggestion: Check verb endings for third person singular and use 'make' with proper subject ('it makes me').

× Actually no, but I prefer playing piano. Sometimes when I feel sad and I have more time with nothing to do, I will play uh with piano because it's uh, good for me. I prefer piano music.

✓ Actually no, but I prefer playing the piano. Sometimes when I feel sad and I have extra time with nothing to do, I play the piano because it is good for me. I prefer piano music.

Article and verb usage issues with present tense: use 'the piano' when referring to the instrument in general. For habitual or repeated actions use simple present 'I play' rather than 'I will play' which implies future. 'More time' to 'extra time' for clarity. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Use 'the' before musical instruments and simple present for habitual actions.

× Yes I do, I live in releasing uh happy music while I doing uh, my chores and also when I walk outside and relaxing on my relaxing time Uh, I prefer music while I doing hard something for me.

✓ Yes, I do. I like listening to happy music while I do my chores, and also when I walk outside or relax in my free time. I prefer music while I do difficult tasks.

Incorrect gerund/participle forms and wrong verbs: 'live in releasing' is incorrect; use 'like listening to'. 'While I doing' needs auxiliary verb 'while I do'. 'Relaxing on my relaxing time' is awkward; use 'relax in my free time'. 'Hard something' should be 'difficult tasks'. Maintain present simple for habits and use correct -ing forms after verbs like 'like'. Suggestion: Use 'listening to' after 'like', ensure correct auxiliary verbs with 'while', and replace vague phrases with clear nouns like 'free time' and 'difficult tasks'.