Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. 'listen to happy music', 'it makes me feel more energetic'), and avoid repetition. Add one specific example to support your reason and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: I prefer listening to happy music because it motivates me and puts me in a positive mindset for the day. For example, upbeat pop songs help me feel energetic in the morning, so I can focus better on my work and exercise.

提案: Answer directly using correct grammar and a natural phrase (e.g. 'Yes, it does' or 'Yes, it makes me feel excited'). Give a brief specific example and a linking phrase to explain when and why it has this effect.

例: Yes, it does. Happy music makes me feel more excited, especially when I exercise or dance, because the fast tempo raises my energy and helps me keep going.

× I prefer to listen happy music because it gives me motivation and mindset for what I'm going to do within a day.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music because it gives me motivation and the right mindset for what I'm going to do during the day.

The verb 'prefer' when followed by another verb typically takes the gerund form 'listening' rather than the infinitive 'to listen' in this context (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also, the verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object (a preposition issue, Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Mindset' benefits from a determiner 'the' and 'within a day' sounds unnatural here; 'during the day' is more appropriate. Suggestion: use 'prefer listening to ...', include 'to' after 'listening', add 'the' before 'right mindset', and use 'during the day' for clearer time reference.

× So this gives me more energetic and more focus on activities that I am going to do.

✓ So this makes me more energetic and more focused on the activities I am going to do.

'Energetic' is an adjective describing a person, but the verb 'gives me more energetic' is incorrect; use 'makes me more energetic' (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'More focus' should be expressed as the adjective 'more focused' to describe the subject's state (also Grammar Problem Type 13). The phrase 'on activities that I am going to do' is wordy; 'on the activities I am going to do' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'makes me' + adjective and change 'more focus' to 'more focused.'

× Yes, it gives me more excited in doing things, especially in performing energetic activities such as exercise or dancing.

✓ Yes, it makes me more excited about doing things, especially when doing energetic activities such as exercising or dancing.

'Gives me more excited' is incorrect because 'excited' is an adjective describing a person; use 'makes me more excited' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 8). The preposition after 'excited' should be 'about' not 'in' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'In doing things' is less natural than 'about doing things.' For 'performing energetic activities such as exercise or dancing,' use parallel gerunds: 'doing energetic activities such as exercising or dancing' or 'activities such as exercise or dancing.' Suggestion: use 'makes me more excited about doing...' and use gerunds for parallel structure.