Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then add one or two concise supporting details. Use correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and vocabulary (happy/sad, emotional). Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to contrast moods. Keep it within 3–4 short sentences and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer different kinds of music depending on my mood. If I'm in a good mood, I usually listen to upbeat, happy songs to stay energized. However, when I'm feeling reflective or sad, I choose slower, emotional music to match my feelings.

提案: Start with a direct yes/no answer, then explain briefly with specific reasons and one example. Correct grammar: use correct verb agreement and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and cheerful lyrics boost my energy. For example, when I play upbeat pop songs in the morning, I feel more alert and ready for the day.

× Basically it's a fully depends on now my mood, if I'm happy then that them are I was your happy music and sometimes if I feel like emotional that time I hear a sick music.

✓ Basically it fully depends on my mood; if I'm happy, I listen to happy music, and sometimes when I feel emotional, I listen to sad music.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure problems (ID 26) and subject-verb agreement issues. 'it's a fully depends' is ungrammatical — use 'it fully depends'. 'on now my mood' has wrong word order; use 'on my mood'. The clause 'if I'm happy then that them are I was your happy music' is nonsensical and should be 'if I'm happy, I listen to happy music.' 'if I feel like emotional that time I hear a sick music' uses incorrect adjective and word choices; use 'when I feel emotional, I listen to sad music.' Suggestions: simplify clauses, keep correct word order (subject + verb), use appropriate adjectives (happy/sad), and connect ideas with commas or conjunctions.

× Yes, of course, happy music make me feel more excited because it's a it's making me relaxation.

✓ Yes, of course, happy music makes me feel more excited because it relaxes me.

This is a subject-verb agreement error (ID 27) and awkward verb forms (ID 6). 'happy music make' should be 'happy music makes' because 'music' is singular. 'it's a it's making me relaxation' is ungrammatical; use 'it relaxes me' or 'it makes me feel relaxed.' Suggestions: match singular subjects with singular verbs and use natural verb constructions for effects (relax, make someone feel relaxed).

× My mind was so fresh when I heard it.

✓ My mind feels so refreshed when I hear it.

This sentence uses past tense unnecessarily (ID 5). In the context of habitual reaction to music, use the present tense: 'My mind feels so refreshed when I hear it.' Also 'fresh' is less natural than 'refreshed' for describing mental state after listening to music. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and choose the appropriate adjective.

× So I have a musical make me feel more excited.

✓ So music makes me feel more excited.

This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and article error (ID 22). 'I have a musical make me' is ungrammatical. Use the simple subject-verb form 'music makes me feel more excited.' Remove unnecessary articles ('a') when speaking about music in general. Suggestion: state the general subject plainly ('music') followed by a correct verb ('makes').