Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct tense and agreement (e.g., "makes" not "made", "during the day" not "in the daily"). Avoid vague phrases and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer different kinds of music depending on the time of day. At night I often listen to sad music because it helps me relax and feel peaceful, while during the day I choose upbeat songs because they make me feel motivated and focused.

提案: Answer directly and support with clear reasons. Avoid rhetorical questions and awkward phrases. Use correct verb forms and precise vocabulary (e.g., "energised" or "confident" instead of "powerful"); link ideas with words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and optimistic lyrics energise me. As a result, I feel more confident and able to tackle tasks I might otherwise avoid.

× Well it depends, I prefer sad music at night that made me feel peaceful, but in the daily I am fond of happy music.

✓ Well, it depends. I prefer sad music at night because it makes me feel peaceful, but during the day I am fond of happy music.

Mixed tense and incorrect phrase choices: 'that made me feel peaceful' mixes past tense with a general preference, so use present tense 'makes'. 'in the daily' is incorrect; use 'during the day'. Also split into two sentences and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual actions (present simple) and use common time expressions like 'at night' and 'during the day'.

× They made me feel more motivated.

✓ They make me feel more motivated.

Subject 'They' refers to 'happy music' (singular or plural concept treated as plural here), but the sentence describes a habitual effect, so use present simple 'make' instead of past 'made'. Suggestion: use present simple for regular or general reactions: 'They make me feel...'.

× Yes, actually. Why listen to happy music? I will feel more powerful and I can do everything I wanted.

✓ Yes, actually. When I listen to happy music, I feel more powerful and I can do everything I want.

'Why listen to happy music?' is awkward as a response; better to say 'When I listen to happy music'. 'I will feel' implies future but context is general, so use present simple 'I feel'. 'I can do everything I wanted' mixes past tense 'wanted' incorrectly; use present 'want'. Suggestion: use 'When I listen...' and present simple for habitual feelings and abilities.

× It's a romantic or magic.

✓ It's romantic or magical.

'Romantic' and 'magic' are adjectives describing a feeling; 'magic' should be 'magical' to function as an adjective. Also 'It's' should refer clearly—better: 'It feels romantic or magical.' Suggestion: use appropriate adjective forms ('magical') and consider 'feels' to describe impressions.