Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは直接的で内容も伝わりますが、文法ミス（時制、一致、重複）と語彙の多様性が不足しています。文を5文以内にまとめ、主題文→具体例の構成にし、繋ぎ言葉（for example, because）を使って論理を明確にしてください。例えば、‘always’が重複している点や‘help us’の形を修正する必要があります。

例: Yes. My favorite teacher in high school was my homeroom teacher because he was very friendly and supportive. For example, whenever we had problems he always offered practical advice and stayed after class to help students. His calm attitude made it easier for us to ask questions. I appreciated his consistent encouragement.

提案: 答えは明確で理由もありますが、語彙の選択と文の流れを改善できます。‘have great impact’は冠詞を入れて‘have a great impact’にし、繋ぎの表現（for example, moreover）を用いて理由を具体化してください。また、冗長な表現（‘help and support every time they face difficulties’）は簡潔にまとめましょう。

例: Yes, I would like to become a teacher in the near future because teachers have a great impact on children's development. For example, I can guide students through learning difficulties and build their confidence. Moreover, I enjoy explaining concepts and helping others grow.

提案: 回答は内容が重複しており、表現に誤り（‘homeland teacher’, 二重の'at’, 冠詞の欠如）があります。より具体的な詳細（どの教科か、どんなアドバイスか）を入れ、接続詞を使って文をつなげてください。語彙も多様にしましょう。

例: Yes. I still remember my teacher from high school who taught mathematics. He was very friendly and supportive, and whenever I struggled with a topic he explained concepts step by step and gave extra exercises. His clear explanations helped me improve my grades.

提案: 答えは理由を示していて分かりやすいですが、時制と語順を正しくし、より自然な表現にする必要があります。‘moved several cities’は‘moved to several cities’に訂正し、原因と結果を接続語（so / therefore）で明確にしてください。

例: No, I don't keep in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved to several different cities when I was young. As a result, it became difficult to maintain contact, and we lost touch over the years.

提案: 回答が曖昧で非具体的な表現（‘human relationships’, ‘for example’, ‘MMM’）が多く、説明が不十分です。具体例を一つか二つ示し、接続語で説明を整理してください。また、余分な間投詞は避けること。

例: My favorite teacher helped me not only with academic subjects but also with personal issues. For example, when I had conflicts with classmates he gave me advice on communicating calmly and resolving misunderstandings, which improved my relationships at school.

提案: 意見は明確ですが表現が冗長で文法ミスがあります（‘a practical advice’→不可算、‘always and whenever’重複）。理由を具体化し、繋ぎ言葉（for instance, because）で整理してください。

例: No, I prefer my high school teachers. For instance, one of my high school teachers always offered practical advice and guidance when I faced academic challenges, which made a big difference to my progress.

× Always when we had some trouble he always gave us advice and help us.

✓ Whenever we had some trouble, he always gave us advice and helped us.

This sentence mixes past and present forms incorrectly. The context is past (when I was a high school student), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Always when' is awkward; use 'Whenever' for repeated past events. 'Help' should be past tense 'helped' to match 'gave'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense verbs and a natural temporal connector: 'Whenever we had some trouble, he always gave us advice and helped us.'

× Yes, I want to be a teacher in the near future because teachers have great impact on children's development and also teachers can help and support every time they face difficulties.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher in the near future because teachers have a great impact on children's development and can help and support them whenever they face difficulties.

This sentence mixes general statements and omits necessary articles and pronouns. Use 'a great impact' (article + singular noun). Avoid repeating 'teachers' unnecessarily; using 'can' once is enough. Add the pronoun 'them' after 'support' to show the object, and replace 'every time' with 'whenever' for natural phrasing. Maintain present tense for general truths.

× Yes, I remember my homeland teacher at at high school.

✓ Yes, I remember my homeroom teacher at high school.

'Homeland teacher' is incorrect word choice; likely 'homeroom teacher' is intended. Also there is a duplicated 'at'. Use 'at high school' or 'from high school'. Suggestion: correct the term and remove the extra word: 'I remember my homeroom teacher from high school.'

× He was so friendly and supportive so he gave me advice whenever I had some difficulties with subject.

✓ He was so friendly and supportive, so he gave me advice whenever I had difficulties with a subject.

The phrase 'some difficulties' is awkward here; use 'difficulties' without 'some'. 'With subject' needs an article: 'with a subject' or better 'with a subject' -> 'with a subject' is acceptable but 'with a subject' is repeated; prefer 'difficulties with a subject' or 'difficulties in a subject'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Maintain past tense consistently.

× No, I don't keep in touch with my teachers at primary school because I moved several cities when I was a primary school student, so it is difficult.

✓ No, I don't keep in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved to several cities when I was in primary school, so it's difficult.

Preposition usage: 'keep in touch with' is fine but 'teachers at primary school' is more natural as 'primary school teachers'. 'Moved several cities' is missing 'to' after 'moved' and 'when I was a primary school student' is wordy; use 'when I was in primary school'. Contract 'it is' to 'it's' if informal speech is acceptable. Maintain consistent phrasing.

× My favorite teacher always helped me with my subject and also some other difficulties related to human relationships, for example. MMM.

✓ My favorite teacher always helped me with my subjects and with other difficulties related to interpersonal relationships, for example.

Sentence structure: 'my subject' is vague; 'my subjects' (plural) or 'a subject' is better. 'Human relationships' is unnatural in this context; use 'interpersonal relationships'. 'And also some other difficulties' is wordy; simplify to 'and with other difficulties'. Remove filler 'MMM'.

× No, I like my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because one of my high school teachers always helped me and gave a practical advice always and whenever.

✓ No, I like my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because one of my high school teachers always helped me and always gave practical advice.

Adverb placement and redundancy: 'always helped me and gave a practical advice always and whenever' is repetitive and ungrammatical. Place 'always' before the verbs for clarity: 'always helped' and 'always gave'. 'A practical advice' is incorrect because 'advice' is uncountable, so drop the article 'a'. Use 'practical advice' instead. Maintain past tense to match context.