Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant and detailed, but you can improve naturalness and conciseness. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid overly formal phrases like "indispensable role" and trim redundancy. Add one short specific example of a lesson he taught and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes — my university professor Dr. Kumar is my favorite teacher. He was dedicated and taught practical skills, for example he showed us how to break large projects into weekly tasks to manage time effectively. Because of that method I now complete patient reports on time and feel less stressed.

提案: Good motivation and clear reason, but make the response more concise and fix grammar (tense and article use). Use one linking phrase to show purpose and give a brief, specific example of what you would teach.

例: Yes, I do. Over the past decade I have gained practical clinical experience, so I want to teach students clinical decision-making. For example, I would show them how to interpret common lab results step by step so they can gain confidence faster.

提案: Your content is good but delivery has hesitation and some awkward phrasing. Remove filler words (uh), tighten sentences, and use a linking word to connect memory to current success. Optionally give one short detail about one named teacher.

例: Yes, I remember several teachers who influenced me and helped me run my clinic successfully. For example, Mr. Bara taught me careful record-keeping, which still helps me manage patient files efficiently.

提案: The idea is clear but grammar, vocabulary and coherence need work. Correct mistakes (e.g. "didn't stay at any reason" → "didn't stay in one place"), avoid repetition, and finish the final sentence. Use one linking word to contrast primary and high school experiences.

例: No, I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers because, as the daughter of an army officer, we moved every two years and I couldn't build long-term contacts. However, I am still in contact with my high school teachers, who supported me through later studies.

提案: Strong, specific content and clear benefits. Improve grammar (plural/singular consistency and articles), shorten slightly to avoid long sentences, and use linking words to order points (first, then).

例: My teachers mentored me for hours: first they guided me through case studies and reviewed patient reports so I could improve my diagnoses; then they connected me with professionals who helped with registration, which allowed me to start my clinical practice and gain confidence.

提案: Good balanced answer with clear comparison. Improve grammar (plural/singular, articles), add a linking word to contrast (whereas/however), and avoid minor awkward phrases like "rigorous project and exam" — use plural forms and be concise.

例: It's hard to choose because they helped me in different ways. My primary teachers built my foundation and encouraged creativity through art and reading; whereas my high school teachers gave rigorous projects and exams that taught me to handle pressure and responsibility.

× I am a great fan of one of my university professors who inspired me a lot.

✓ I am a great fan of one of my university professors who inspires me a lot.

The sentence mixes present description ('I am a great fan') with a past-tense verb 'inspired' describing an ongoing influence. Use present simple 'inspires' to show the professor continues to have influence now. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing an ongoing attribute or influence.

× I have had valuable experience over past decade and I would like to pass that on that practical knowledge to the future students so they can build a stronger foundation more quickly than I did.

✓ I have had valuable experience over the past decade and I would like to pass that practical knowledge on to future students so they can build a stronger foundation more quickly than I did.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'past decade' and incorrect placement/repetition of 'that' and 'on'. Also 'the future students' is unnatural; use 'future students'. Suggestion: use 'the past decade', 'pass that practical knowledge on to future students'.

× I have had valuable experience over past decade and I would like to pass that on that practical knowledge to the future students so they can build a stronger foundation more quickly than I did.

✓ I have had valuable experience over the past decade and I would like to pass that practical knowledge on to future students so they can build a stronger foundation more quickly than I did.

Preposition 'over' is okay but needs 'the past decade'. The phrase 'pass on that practical knowledge to' should be 'pass that practical knowledge on to' or 'pass on practical knowledge to'. Avoid redundant 'that'. Suggestion: reorder to 'pass that practical knowledge on to future students'.

× I'm running my clinic more successfully, uh, just because of their contribution in me.

✓ I'm running my clinic more successfully, uh, largely because of their contribution to me.

Preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'contribution'; use 'contribution to someone'. Also 'just because of' is informal; 'largely because of' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'contribution to me' to indicate who benefited.

× They encouraged me a lot. I can name some of them like Mr. Bara, Mrs. Nancy and Professor Anju.

✓ They encouraged me a lot. I can name some of them, such as Mr. Bara, Mrs. Nancy and Professor Anju.

Phrase 'like' is often used in speech but 'such as' is more appropriate in formal speech to introduce examples. Also add a comma before examples. Suggestion: use 'such as' for clarity.

× I am a daughter of an army officer and we didn't stay at any reason for more than a two years.

✓ I am the daughter of an army officer and we didn't stay anywhere for more than two years.

Use definite article 'the' before 'daughter of an army officer' when specifying family role. 'stay at any reason' is incorrect; use 'stay anywhere'. Also 'a two years' should be 'two years' (no 'a'). Suggestion: 'the daughter' and 'stay anywhere for more than two years'.

× But I had an amazing experience with my high school teacher who are still in my contact and my.

✓ But I had an amazing experience with my high school teacher who is still in contact with me.

Relative clause subject 'teacher' is singular, so the verb must be 'is' not 'are'. Phrase 'in my contact and my' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'in contact with me'. Suggestion: use 'who is still in contact with me'.

× They spent hours mentoring me, guiding me through case studies and reviewing patients reports so I could make more accurate diagnosis.

✓ They spent hours mentoring me, guiding me through case studies and reviewing patients' reports so I could make more accurate diagnoses.

'Patients reports' needs a possessive apostrophe: 'patients' reports'. 'Diagnosis' should be plural 'diagnoses' because 'more accurate' implies multiple instances or general ability. Suggestion: use 'patients' reports' and 'accurate diagnoses'.

× They provided professional connections that helped me with the registration process and ultimately enabled me to establish myself in clinical practice, which increased my confidence and practical skills.

✓ They provided professional connections that helped me with the registration process and ultimately enabled me to establish myself in clinical practice, which increased my confidence and practical skills.

No grammatical change needed for verb -ing here. The sentence is correct. Inclusion is to show no correction required for this grammar type.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

Question is fine; present simple is appropriate to ask general preference. No correction needed.

× It is hard to choose because both help me in different way.

✓ It is hard to choose because both help me in different ways.

The plural subjects ('both') require plural form 'ways' and the phrase 'in different ways' is standard. Suggestion: use plural 'ways'.

× My primary school teachers laid strong foundations and stimulated my creativity with art and reading activities whereas my high school teachers assigned rigorous project and exam that prepared me to handle pressure and greater responsibilities.

✓ My primary school teachers laid strong foundations and stimulated my creativity with art and reading activities, whereas my high school teachers assigned rigorous projects and exams that prepared me to handle pressure and greater responsibilities.

Countable nouns 'project' and 'exam' should be plural ('projects' and 'exams') to match 'assigned' and the general meaning. Add a comma before 'whereas'. Suggestion: pluralize 'projects' and 'exams' for correctness.