Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb usage, avoid redundancy (funny and humorous), and provide a specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. My favourite teacher is Gloria, who teaches Spanish. She has a great sense of humour, so her lessons are lively and engaging. For example, she uses games and funny stories to help us remember vocabulary.

提案: Make the statement concise and grammatical; avoid awkward phrases like 'teaching English it's'. Give a clear reason and a specific supporting detail with a linking word to show coherence. Use neutral, respectful language (e.g., 'many Chinese learners' instead of 'ethnic Chinese').

例: Yes, I would like to become an English teacher because the subject is highly valued worldwide. Moreover, I feel I can help many Chinese learners improve their communication skills by focusing on practical speaking practice.

提案: Be concise and avoid contradictions (saying you remember someone but 'can't remember very vividly'). Focus on specific, relevant details about why you remember them (teaching style, personality), and link ideas logically.

例: Yes, I remember one of my high school social studies teachers because she had a distinctive teaching style. She spoke with a British accent and used lively discussions that made lessons memorable, so many students liked her.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatical answer and a brief reason. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases like 'I think around'. Use one linking word to explain why you lost contact.

例: No, I'm not in touch with them anymore. Since I moved and became busy with university and work, I gradually lost contact with most of my primary school teachers.

提案: Combine sentences to avoid fragments and redundancy. Start with a topic sentence, then explain specifically how she helped (methods or materials) using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep it concise.

例: She helped me improve my Spanish grammar by explaining rules clearly and giving plenty of practice exercises. Because Spanish grammar differs a lot from English, her patient explanations and targeted drills helped me understand tricky points.

提案: Give a clear, direct answer and avoid awkward phrases like 'the vice versa the other way around.' Use a complete supporting sentence explaining why, and connect ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because they had a better sense of humour. For instance, they used jokes and stories in class, which made learning more enjoyable and memorable.

× Attending her lesson, I always really, really fun.

✓ When I attend her lessons, I always have a really great time.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and uses 'fun' as if it were a verb. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and also relates to incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (ID 13). Use a clear subject and verb: 'I always have a really great time' or 'I always enjoy her lessons.' Include correct verb tense and plural 'lessons' for habitual action.

× Yes, definitely I would like to be an English teacher because teaching English it's greatly respected in many countries around the world.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to be an English teacher because teaching English is greatly respected in many countries around the world.

The original contains an unnecessary contraction 'it's' and an awkward clause. This is a modal/auxiliary usage and sentence structure issue (ID 4 and 26). Replace 'it's' with the simple verb 'is' and separate clauses with appropriate punctuation: '...teacher because teaching English is greatly respected...'. Also add a period after 'definitely' for clarity.

× A lot of ethnic Chinese are still not really that good with English.

✓ Many ethnic Chinese people still are not very good at English.

The phrase 'a lot of ethnic Chinese' is awkward and 'good with English' is nonstandard. This is an incorrect pronoun/phrase use and preposition issue (ID 12 and 11). Use 'many ethnic Chinese people' and the standard collocation 'good at English'.

× I do have a teacher from my past that I can't remember very vividly.

✓ I do have a teacher from my past, but I can't remember her very clearly.

The original mixes contradictory ideas and uses 'very vividly' incorrectly. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'but' to contrast possession and memory, and choose the correct adverb 'clearly' instead of 'vividly' for remembering.

× There is a teacher who teaches social class in my high school and she's very pretty.

✓ There was a teacher who taught social studies at my high school, and she was very pretty.

The student is referring to a past teacher, so past tense should be used (ID 5). Also 'social class' is incorrect; the usual term is 'social studies' or 'social science', and the preposition for schools is 'at' (ID 11). Change present 'is/teaches' to past 'was/taught'.

× Not anymore, unfortunately. I think around and I tend to forget things from my childhood. Most of them to be honest.

✓ Not anymore, unfortunately. I tend to forget things from my childhood, to be honest.

The original has fragmented and extraneous words ('I think around', 'Most of them') causing sentence structure and pronoun errors (ID 12 and 26). Remove unclear fragments and combine into a single clear sentence: 'I tend to forget things from my childhood, to be honest.'

× My favorite teacher helped me to improve my Spanish grammar. Because Spanish grammar is very different from English grammar, so I always struggle with it.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me improve my Spanish grammar because Spanish grammar is very different from English grammar, so I always struggled with it.

The second sentence begins with 'Because' making a sentence fragment; combine the ideas into one sentence. Also maintain consistent tense: if referring to past help, use 'struggled' (ID 5 and 26). Remove the unnecessary 'to' after 'helped me' for natural English.

× She has always helped me a lot. And she's very patient as well.

✓ She always helped me a lot, and she was very patient as well.

If referring to past events (teacher from past), use past tense 'helped' and 'was' instead of present perfect/ present 'has always helped' and 'she's' (ID 2 and 5). Use consistent past tense when describing a past teacher.

× I think the vice versa the other way around.

✓ I think it's the other way around.

The phrase 'the vice versa the other way around' is redundant and ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use the standard expression 'it's the other way around' or 'vice versa' alone.

× I like my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because my high school teachers. Have a sense of humor that my primary school teacher does not have.

✓ I like my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because my high school teachers have a sense of humor that my primary school teachers did not have.

The original is split incorrectly with a sentence fragment ('because my high school teachers. Have a sense...'). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine into one sentence and maintain agreement and tense: use plural 'teachers have' and parallel structure 'that my primary school teachers did not have.'