Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, with good specific detail (using TV clips). To improve, make grammar tighter (e.g., "she was funny" not "she was a funny"), avoid minor redundancy, and use one linking phrase to structure the reply. Keep within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., "engaging" instead of "funny").

例: My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher because she made lessons engaging. For example, she showed short clips from shows like Friends to teach vocabulary and conversational phrases, which helped us remember words better. Because of her creative approach, I enjoyed class and learned more effectively.

提案: Good honest response and clear reasons, but reduce filler sounds ("MMM"), tighten sentences, and add a linking phrase to connect ideas (e.g., "however"). Also give one brief prediction or decision to show development. Watch for small grammar issues ("be a teacher" → fine) and aim for more precise vocabulary (e.g., "repetitive errors").

例: I'm not sure I want to be a teacher. I like helping students gain confidence and improve, but I worry about handling repetitive errors and distracted classes, which can be exhausting. Therefore, I might consider a related role like educational coaching instead of full-time teaching.

提案: Answer is heartfelt and specific, but slightly repetitive ("I still remember" used twice). Improve cohesion by combining sentences and using linking words (e.g., "for example"). Use one concise supporting detail about how that comment affected you to show impact.

例: Yes, I vividly remember my primary school Chinese teacher because she was very supportive. For example, she once told me I would grow up to do something amazing, which encouraged me to work harder and believe in myself. I'm still grateful for her positive influence.

提案: You answer directly and give specific details, but there are some language errors ("'cause" informal; "cash about" likely meant "chat about"). Avoid repetition of "usually" and use a linking word like "because". Use slightly more formal phrasing for IELTS and correct vocabulary.

例: Yes, I'm still in touch with one primary school teacher because she is a close friend of my mother. I often visit her during vacations; we have tea and chat about family matters and my studies.

提案: Good explanation with cause and effect, but streamline the answer and avoid hedging ("I think"). Fix tenses and phrasing ("sounded weird" → "might sound strange"); avoid claiming a "perfect" presentation—use "successful". Use one linking phrase to show result (e.g., "as a result").

例: She helped me become much more confident. I used to be afraid of speaking English because I worried my pronunciation might sound strange, but she gave specific feedback and encouragement, so I was able to give a successful presentation in class and feel more confident as a result.

提案: Strong comparative answer that directly addresses the question and gives clear reasons. To improve, use one linking phrase for contrast (e.g., "whereas"), reduce informal phrasing ("like you could do something amazing"), and make sentences slightly more concise.

例: I prefer them for different reasons: my primary school teachers provided encouragement and belief in my potential, whereas my high school teachers helped me build confidence and good study habits. Together, their guidance shaped who I am today.

× She was a funny and never made the class awkward or serious all the time.

✓ She was funny and never made the class awkward or serious all the time.

The indefinite article 'a' is used before singular countable nouns or before an adjective when it modifies a noun (e.g., 'a funny person'). Here 'funny' describes 'She' directly without a following noun, so the article 'a' is incorrect. Remove 'a' to make the adjective modify the subject. Suggestion: say 'She was funny' or 'She was a funny teacher' depending on whether you include the noun.

× I still remember she used to play clips for shows like friends in class to teach vocabulary and conversation.

✓ I still remember she used to play clips from shows like Friends in class to teach vocabulary and conversation.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect with 'shows' in this context; use 'from' to indicate the source of the clips. Also the TV show title 'Friends' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. The error type involves choice of preposition and source phrase; keep the verb form 'used to play' as it correctly describes habitual past action.

× I'm not completely sure to be honest.

✓ I'm not completely sure, to be honest.

This sentence needs a comma to set off the parenthetical phrase 'to be honest.' The issue is punctuation and sentence flow rather than a change in pronoun, but it affects clarity. Insert a comma before 'to be honest' so the phrase is correctly presented as an aside.

× Like teachers have to deal with students repeating the same mistakes or not paying attention.

✓ For example, teachers have to deal with students repeating the same mistakes or not paying attention.

Beginning the sentence with 'Like' in this context is informal and can be unclear. Replacing 'Like' with 'For example' or 'Such as' clarifies the meaning. This is an issue of word choice and sentence connector rather than an article, but it improves grammaticality and register.

× One of them I still remember is my Chinese teacher at primary school.

✓ One of them whom I still remember is my Chinese teacher from primary school.

The relative clause requires an object relative pronoun 'whom' (or restructure as 'One of them I still remember is...' is colloquial but awkward). Also 'primary school' commonly takes 'from' or 'in' to indicate attendance. Use 'from primary school' for clarity. Alternatively, 'One I still remember is my Chinese teacher from primary school.'

× They were powerful words for primary school students, and I'm really grateful that she said that.

✓ They were powerful words for primary school students, and I'm really grateful that she said them.

The pronoun 'that' at the end is vague; because 'words' is plural, use the plural object pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'words.' This is a pronoun reference matching number error (singular/plural agreement).

× Yeah, I'm still in touch with one of my primary school teachers 'cause she is a good friend of my mother.

✓ Yeah, I'm still in touch with one of my primary school teachers because she is a good friend of my mother.

Avoid informal contractions like ''cause' in formal responses; use 'because.' Also 'a good friend of my mother' is grammatical but more natural as 'a good friend of my mother's.' Use the possessive form for natural English: 'a good friend of my mother's.'

× So I usually visit her house on my vacation and we usually have tea or cash about family and how my studies are going.

✓ So I usually visit her house on my vacations and we usually have tea or chat about family and how my studies are going.

The verb 'cash' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'chat.' Also 'vacation' in this context is more natural plural 'vacations' if referring to recurring holiday periods, but singular 'on my vacation' is acceptable. Correct the verb to 'chat.'

× I think she helped me become more confident back then.

✓ I think she helped me become more confident back then.

Sentence is grammatically correct; 'think' in present and 'helped' in past is acceptable because the speaker is reflecting now about a past event. No change needed. Included here to indicate it meets the tense requirements.

× I'm kind of scared of speaking English in public because I'm worried my pronunciation sounded weird, but she gave me a lot of suggestions and encouragement so that I could give a perfect presentation in class which helped me become more confident.

✓ I'm kind of scared of speaking English in public because I'm worried my pronunciation sounds weird, but she gave me a lot of suggestions and encouragement so that I could give a great presentation in class, which helped me become more confident.

The clause 'I'm worried my pronunciation sounded weird' mixes present worry with past tense 'sounded.' Use present simple 'sounds' to match the ongoing concern. Also 'perfect' is strong; 'great' or 'better' is more natural. Add a comma before the non-restrictive 'which' clause. These changes fix tense consistency and improve adjective choice.

× My primary school teachers gave me a lot of encouragement, like you could do something amazing, while my high school teachers helped me become more confident and developed a lot of good habits.

✓ My primary school teachers gave me a lot of encouragement, saying things like 'you could do something amazing,' while my high school teachers helped me become more confident and develop a lot of good habits.

The original mixes reported speech and explanation awkwardly. Use 'saying things like' to introduce an example of what they said, and change 'developed' to the base form 'develop' to parallel 'helped me become' (helped + object + base verb or helped me to develop). This fixes sentence structure and parallelism.

× She was a funny and never made the class awkward or serious all the time.

✓ She was funny and never made the class awkward or serious all the time.

This repeats an earlier correction: the article 'a' before 'funny' is wrong; also ensure verbs agree with subject: 'she never made' is correct. Included to report subject-verb consistency.