Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and avoid unclear or incorrect words. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Work on pronunciation and grammar (e.g., avoid repeated ums, wrong words like “dessert” instead of “subject” or “teacher” and incorrect prepositions). Keep answers concise (max 4 sentences).

例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my English teacher at school. She is patient and always helps me improve my grammar and vocabulary by giving useful exercises and feedback. For example, she corrected my speaking mistakes and gave extra practice activities, which helped me speak more confidently.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical response with logical linking. Use a topic sentence stating your career goal, then explain briefly why you might teach part-time with specific reasons. Avoid filler words and incorrect tense/forms (e.g., “I will teach part-time” not “I will gonna”).

例: No, I don’t plan to be a full-time teacher. However, I might teach part-time because I enjoy helping others and it fits well with my studies. I hope to become a computer engineer, so tutoring friends or children would be a flexible way to earn money and share my skills.

提案: Be specific about who the teacher was and why you remember them. Use linking words (for example, because, also, moreover) and clearer nouns (“bus” is confusing; say “past” or “school”). Reduce hesitations and give concrete detail like what made her teaching memorable.

例: Yes, I remember an English teacher from my old school. I remember her because she explained difficult grammar clearly and used interesting games in class. Also, we still keep in contact by messaging, which shows she cared about her students.

提案: Give a concise, well-structured answer: state whether you are in touch, then give specific reasons or examples. Avoid unclear phrases like “sweet seats” and repetitive wording. Use correct prepositions (e.g., “in touch with”) and one or two supporting details.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher. She still teaches at my hometown school, and she often gives me advice about studies and life. I visit her when I go home and we keep in contact through messages.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence describing the main ways she helped, then give two specific examples with linking words (for example, as a result, for instance). Avoid vague phrases like “great moment” and ensure grammatical sentences. Mention concrete outcomes (e.g., improved grades or winning a competition).

例: She supported me during difficult times and helped me improve my English skills. For example, she gave me extra speaking practice and detailed feedback on my essays, which helped me win first place in a school competition. As a result, I became more confident and my grades improved.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give two contrasting reasons using linking words (for example, because, while). Avoid repetition and incorrect words like “desert”; use precise language (e.g., “primary school teachers”). Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., “we spent more time” not “we spend quality time”).

例: I prefer primary school teachers to high school teachers. Because in primary school we spent more time with teachers and they focused on basic skills like writing and speaking, I felt more supported. In contrast, high school classes were shorter and less personal.

× As I have a favorite dessert, yes, I like uh, English dessert workouts.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher; I like my English teacher very much.

The original sentence uses 'dessert' and 'workouts' incorrectly (wrong word choice). This is an adjective/noun misuse that affects meaning. Replace incorrect adjectives/nouns with correct ones to match context: 'favorite teacher' and 'English teacher'. Also simplify filler words for clarity.

× She is so kind and polite and she helps me to speak.

✓ She is very kind and polite, and she helps me speak English.

Use 'very' rather than 'so' for formal speech and remove 'to' before the verb 'speak' because 'help' is followed by the bare infinitive. Specify 'English' after 'speak' for clarity.

× Uh, she helps me to, to in health in English, like in a grammar or sort of vocabulary and many more and see it's a kind.

✓ She helps me improve my English, such as grammar and vocabulary, and many other things; she is kind.

The original has incorrect and misplaced prepositions ('in health in English') and unclear phrases. Use 'improve my English' and 'such as' for examples. Break into clearer clauses and correct 'it's a kind' to 'she is kind'.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future, but uh, for a part time I will gonna teach, uh, for uh, some of my friends and some child because, uh, I'm at a good at teaching also, but I have a future, uh, like to be in a computer engineer.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future, but part-time I will teach some of my friends and some children because I'm good at teaching; however, I want to become a computer engineer in the future.

'Will gonna' is ungrammatical (mixing 'will' and 'gonna'). Use 'will' or 'am going to'. Correct 'some child' to 'some children' (plural). Fix word order 'I have a future, like to be in a computer engineer' to 'I want to become a computer engineer' for natural expression.

× Yes, I have a teacher from my bus that I still remember like a uh, English teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher from my past that I still remember, an English teacher.

'From my bus' is incorrect; likely meant 'from my past'. Use 'from my past' to indicate previous time. Also rephrase to join clauses smoothly.

× She's so kind, uh, for, uh, me and she's good at teaching.

✓ She is very kind to me and good at teaching.

Use 'to me' after 'kind' (correct preposition) and replace 'so' with 'very' for formality. Combine clauses for fluency.

× Also. She's still on, on a contact and she's, uh, so, uh, great.

✓ She is still in contact with me, and she is great.

Use the correct preposition 'in contact with' instead of 'on a contact'. Remove fillers and correct punctuation.

× Yes, I'm still in a touch with my primary school teacher because I see it from my sweet seats from my own hometown and see it so and see it's still teaching in the same school and she's so kind and generous person and she still gives me advice whenever.

✓ Yes, I'm still in touch with my primary school teacher because she still teaches at the same school in my hometown; she is kind and generous and still gives me advice.

Use 'in touch' -> 'in touch' is acceptable but better 'in touch with'. Remove 'I see it from my sweet seats' which is unclear. Replace with 'she still teaches at the same school in my hometown'. Also fix 'she's so kind and generous person' to 'she is a kind and generous person'.

× In my difficult situation, through a great moment and achieving my, uh, first position secure, she was there.

✓ During a difficult time, when I achieved first position, she was there for me.

Use 'during' for time expressions and reorder the phrase for clarity. 'First position secure' is awkward; use 'when I achieved first position' or 'when I secured first place'.

× She helped me to learn about, uh, speaking, umm, vocabulary and essay writing and many more.

✓ She helped me learn speaking, vocabulary, essay writing, and many other things.

'Helped me to learn about' is wordy; 'helped me learn' is natural. Use plural 'many other things' and remove unnecessary fillers.

× You see, it's so kind and helpful. She's so patient with me and.

✓ She is very kind and helpful, and she is very patient with me.

Replace 'it's so kind' (wrong subject) with 'she is very kind'. Remove trailing 'and.' Use 'very' for formality and clarity.

× As uh, I prefer primary schools, uh, primary school teachers because we spend quality time, quality time and we, we learn as she teaches me how to write and speaking and learning where high school teachers have, uh, short period of time, but I choose primary school desert.

✓ I prefer primary school teachers because we spent quality time together; they taught me how to write and speak, whereas high school teachers have shorter class periods. I prefer primary school teachers.

Replace 'primary schools' with 'primary school teachers' and correct tense agreement 'spend' -> 'spent' if referring to past, but present preference can use present: 'we spend quality time'. Fix 'how to write and speaking' to 'how to write and speak'. 'Where' should be 'whereas'. 'Short period of time' -> 'shorter class periods'. 'Desert' is wrong word; replace with 'teachers'.