Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., "He was a really good teacher," "He taught us"), and avoid vague phrases like "different matter" or "more gracious."

例: My favorite teacher was my high school math teacher. He explained difficult concepts with simple diagrams and real-life examples, so I understood the ideas quickly. Because of his explanations, I enjoyed math more and improved my grades.

提案: Answer directly and use one or two clear reasons. Keep sentences short and grammatical. Replace vague expressions with specific reasons (e.g., "help others learn"), and use linking words like "however" or "but" to contrast ideas.

例: No, I do not plan to be a teacher because I want to pursue a career in engineering. However, if I had the opportunity, I would consider teaching part-time because I enjoy helping others learn and sharing knowledge.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then provide specific memories or examples. Fix grammar (e.g., "My math teacher" not "my mathematic teacher"), use past tense consistently, and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "also" and "for example."

例: Yes. My math teacher from school still stands out because we had a friendly relationship. He not only taught math but also gave me life advice, for example, how to stay patient when solving difficult problems and how to manage stress.

提案: Respond in the present tense and be specific about how you keep in touch. Use correct pronouns and grammar, and avoid repetition. Mention the method of contact and frequency for clarity.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher. We communicate by phone and social media once every few months, and we meet occasionally. He remains an important mentor and friend from my school days.

提案: Be specific about the help and give one or two clear examples. Use past tense and concise sentences. Replace vague phrases like "helped me loads" with concrete outcomes (e.g., "he advised me to study X"), and connect ideas with linking words such as "for example" or "as a result."

例: He helped me when I was confused about my future. For example, he advised me to explore computer science because I enjoyed problem solving; as a result, I chose relevant courses and felt more confident about my career path.

提案: Make a clear comparative sentence and support it with one or two specific reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., "every teacher has"), avoid repetition, and use linking words like "because" or "while" to show contrast.

例: No, I don't prefer one more than the other because both taught me different things. For example, my primary teachers helped me build confidence and basic skills, while my high school teachers prepared me for exams and career choices.

× Yes, in school time my mathematics teacher was my favorite one.

✓ Yes, during my school years my mathematics teacher was my favorite.

The phrase 'in school time' is unnatural; use 'during my school years'. Also 'favorite one' is redundant; 'favorite' suffices. This fixes tense/context and improves idiomatic phrasing.

× He's really good teacher.

✓ He was a really good teacher.

Missing article 'a' before the noun 'teacher' and tense should match 'was' because speaking about the past. Correct article use and past tense agreement improves grammar.

× He teach us like in a good way and also he's used very different matter to understand the things and it's make us like more gracious about the topic.

✓ He taught us in a clear way, and he used different methods to help us understand, which made us more interested in the topic.

The verb 'teach' needs past tense third-person singular 'taught'. 'He's used' is incorrect; use 'he used'. 'Matter' is the wrong noun; 'methods' or 'approaches' fits. 'It's make us like more gracious' is ungrammatical; use 'made us more interested'. Sentence broken into clearer clauses for coherence.

× No, I have different plans in my future but if I have a chance I will try for a teacher because it's make us like more beautiful person in the world when we taught our lots of things to other students is a great thing I will do in future if it's possible.

✓ No, I have different plans for the future, but if I have the chance I would try to become a teacher because teaching others is a rewarding thing I would like to do if possible.

Use 'for the future' not 'in my future'. 'Try for a teacher' is incorrect; use 'try to become a teacher'. Replace 'it's make us like more beautiful person' with 'teaching others is a rewarding thing'. Use conditional 'would' to express hypothetical. Simplify and correct verb forms and prepositions.

× Yes, in my school time it was my mathematic teacher is it's like I have a very friendly bond that time and he told me lots of things about the world or the books things.

✓ Yes, in my school days it was my mathematics teacher; I had a very friendly bond with him, and he told me many things about the world and about books.

'Mathematic' should be 'mathematics'. 'I have' should be past 'I had'. Remove extraneous 'is it's like'. Use 'many' instead of 'lots of' for formality and correct preposition 'with him'. This fixes tense consistency and noun forms.

× Not only the study works, He also told me about the things how I have to handle the situation with very patiently.

✓ Not only did he teach me academic work, he also told me how to handle situations very patiently.

'Study works' is awkward; use 'academic work'. The sentence needs auxiliary 'did' for inversion after 'Not only'. 'How I have to handle' should be 'how to handle'. 'With very patiently' is wrong order; 'very patiently' should modify 'handle'. Fixed word order and verb structure.

× He told me lots of.

✓ He told me many things.

Sentence fragments like 'He told me lots of.' are incomplete. Provide the object 'things' to complete the sentence.

× Yes, I will touch with my primary school teachers.

✓ Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teachers.

'Touch with' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'in touch with'. Also use present continuous 'am still in touch' to indicate ongoing connection.

× He's like great person in my life, which I met in my in my school time and we also a good friend right now.

✓ He is a great person in my life, whom I met during my school years, and we are also good friends now.

Use 'a great person' with article. 'Which' should be 'whom' for people. Fix repeated 'in my'. Use 'we are' not 'we also a'. Correct plural 'friends' and word order.

× It's a great thing we experience in that time.

✓ It was a great experience at that time.

Use 'experience' as noun and past tense 'was' to match context. 'In that time' is unnatural; use 'at that time'. This fixes article and preposition usage.

× He helped me that time when I'm very confused in my life.

✓ He helped me when I was very confused in my life.

Mixing present 'I'm' with past 'helped' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'was' to maintain temporal consistency.

× He told me about the things like I have, how I have to do choose the career or what things I am interested.

✓ He told me things like how to choose a career and what I was interested in.

Remove extraneous words 'I have'. Use infinitive 'how to choose' and preposition 'interested in'. Maintain past tense 'was' for consistency.

× He helped me loads.

✓ He helped me a lot.

'Loads' is informal but acceptable; 'a lot' is clearer and more standard in formal responses. No grammatical error but choose register-appropriate phrasing.

× He's a great person. He I like him very much.

✓ He is a great person; I like him very much.

Redundant 'He I like him' is ungrammatical. Simplify to two proper clauses with correct subject-verb order.

× He gave me a very great advice in my life so that I can do better things in my life.

✓ He gave me very good advice that helped me improve my life.

'Advice' is uncountable, so remove 'a'. 'Very great' is awkward; use 'very good' or 'valuable'. Combine clauses for clarity and correct tense.

× No, I think every teacher have their own things according to me.

✓ No, I think every teacher has their own qualities, in my opinion.

Subject-verb agreement: 'every teacher' requires 'has'. 'Their own things' is vague; use 'qualities'. 'According to me' is better as 'in my opinion'.

× I love both primary or secondary teachers so it's a great experience.

✓ I love both primary and secondary school teachers, so it is a great experience.

Use 'both...and' not 'both...or'. Add 'school' and correct punctuation. Maintain formal contraction 'it is'.

× When I was in primary, teacher shared things very greatly and when I grown up I would go to secondary school.

✓ When I was in primary school, my teacher explained things very well, and when I grew up I went to secondary school.

Use 'primary school' and include 'my'. 'Shared things very greatly' is awkward; 'explained things very well' is natural. 'Grown up I would go' mixes tenses; use past 'I grew up' and 'went'.

× It also a great time. We spend a lot of things like he taught me lots of things.

✓ That was also a great time. We had many memorable experiences, and he taught me many things.

Insert verb 'was' for 'It also a great time'. 'We spend a lot of things' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'We had many memorable experiences'. Use past tense 'taught' and replace 'lots of' with 'many' for formality.